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Geno
10-15-2013, 03:40 PM
dead man..
the final mohican in moccasin shoes
composite i drew a sketch, violet and blue
our planet may plummet as comets accrue
but we'll finally be home, y mi casa es su
political mastermind, mostly moderate views
lived to witness evils that accomplishments do
consistence often construed as an impossible proof
i stand to make corrections with a competent few
iAm Gawdian, flossing as a gaudy excuse
to flash like orange alerts on metropolitan news
knowledge is useless once you're following suit
indoctrinated fully as apostles, aloof
aphoristic, plague-resistant, conquering flu
common cold coughing mucus into concepts to puke
from Wisconsin to Utah, 600 block to the Dunes
only taking lives to find a better coffin to use..

Geno..
Transylvanian apartments are an alternate roost
Lethargic for you, parasite until the carcass consumed
Harvest the moon, rite before a charlatans doom
Exhumed, for bathing in a touch of garlic perfume
I've seen the awfullest news, carvings on tombs
The fall of platoons, amused, that they all were subdued
Flying saucers, confused, cautious of truths
Watched them crash into tunnels that were carpal, and bruise
Seen partially prooned, crop circles startle bafoons
That were targets for groups in the market of fruit
Smoke screens nothing short of arsonist proof
Crosses and screws, hung kings sing songs of exhaustion, and puke
From Holocaust for the jews, to dre sampling a parliament tune
Plausible cruelty, what would the carpenter do
Harken the blues, eyes wide shut while its dark in the room
When all's said and done, we're the farthest from human

PancakeBrah
10-15-2013, 05:44 PM
1rd

Spot for sale

Certain
10-15-2013, 05:55 PM
dead man, I liked this:

aphoristic

But really, this was great. I don't have much to add at the moment. I'll give it another read later. But you both were in full gear for this one.

CopyPat
10-17-2013, 03:51 PM
how does this have NO feed. ppl intimidated or something? this was just awesome again. 2 of the best right here, unbelievably polished and smooth (i stole ur scheme there). whenever i read black i think of beer commercials talking about easy drinking.. black all ur shit is easy reading. pretty impressive for someone to keep up with geno right now while hes been on fire. also rarely see black collabing with anyone that can stay with him. u guys nailed this, should collab more, great stuff. proper proppers for this one

Mr. J
10-17-2013, 07:45 PM
This was a dope collab, seems like the thing to do these days
regardless I felt Black's verse was pretty slick, the flow was sick
and some lines really stuck out to me, this is my second time reading this
decided to come back and spread some love on the butter
Geno, the way you play with words and keep your flow going is dope
it seems like you never let up when you get that stride going
tbh I feel like you're the only one to keep up with me once I'm in that zone
you can shout out to Split & maybe we could bring back the ol' vibe
keep it up breh's you always got me here waving pom pom's

Darth Yoda
10-17-2013, 10:02 PM
same syllables throughout, pretty cool guys. The topic was stellar

Split
10-17-2013, 11:48 PM
i feel like Genocide was sober or at the perfect drunk for writing for his verse

Phalanx
10-18-2013, 08:20 AM
My, my gentlemen. This was quite the piece of work here. Alot of people do not understand how much skill it requires to carry one multi through a verse. And then to make two verses that hold a semblence of direction? Thats talent. The flow, as I interpreted it, was very smooth from both writers. The first verse slightly more so than the first. As far as lyricism, I liked the first verse a little more. Just more suited to my preference as far as style. But the second verse did a great job following up, and I really think you did a good job tying this piece together with your final line. On a whole, the chemistry here was nice. Great job guys.

My Favorite Lines -

i stand to makecorrectionswith a competent few iAm Gawdian, flossing as a gaudy excuse to flash likeorangealerts on metropolitan news knowledge is useless once you're following suit

dead man
10-18-2013, 02:44 PM
Word to shiva

Split
10-22-2013, 01:33 AM
genocide is really smart. really liked this. idk what to add.

Split
10-22-2013, 01:35 AM
you can shout out to Split & maybe we could bring back the ol' vibe


my bros :D

we should collabo! Lucifer

Frank
10-23-2013, 08:04 PM
political mastermind, mostly moderate views
i stand to make corrections with a competent few
to flash like orange alerts on metropolitan news
apostles, aloof
plague-resistant, conquering flu
common cold coughing mucus into concepts to puke
from Wisconsin to Utah, 600 block to the Dunes

apartments are an alternate roost
Watched them crash into tunnels that were carpal, and bruise


this was a dope collaboration that didn't disappoint... two writers with 2 different styles exhibiting the same style and you could see still the distinction in differences. black is more passive and introverted with his reflections while adolf is more active extroverted in his phrasing. the same rhyme scheme through out. well done.

i loved that rhyme scheme............

Mike Wrecka
10-23-2013, 08:43 PM
sick. I love this piece. black altered his style ever so slightly, like just a fraction of a millimeter to match genocides usual swag. the result was incredible. the two best OM writers on the site teaming up. im nominating this piece for the HOF

Vulgar
10-29-2013, 07:46 PM
Grooviness.

our planet may plummet as comets accrue
but we'll finally be home, y mi casa es su
political mastermind, mostly moderate views
lived to witness evils that accomplishments do
^dope, and good wordplay in the last line.

Transylvanian apartments are an alternate roost
Lethargic for you, parasite until the carcass consumed
Harvest the moon, rite before a charlatans doom
Exhumed, for bathing in a touch of garlic perfume
I've seen the awfullest news, carvings on tombs
The fall of platoons, amused, that they all were subdued
^this opening section kilt it.

I was satisfied with this production.

Wise Wiggles
10-29-2013, 10:37 PM
You farfinewgans should have let me in dis manggggg

Felt the ending's from both of you's stood out.

PancakeBrah
10-29-2013, 10:47 PM
Felt the ending's from both of you's stood out.

Geno
10-30-2013, 10:53 PM
Thanks, everyone. Dope verse btw, dead man
Always a pleasure conspiring w/you