God Of War
02-02-2013, 05:47 PM
David Lama
July 15th, 2009, 05:33 AM
No Time to Waste 2009
Keystyle Tournament
Verses due July 15th 2009.
11:59PM Pacific
10 lines only - cannot exceed this amount
these are keystyle battles.
you only have a day to write.
NO EXTENSIONS WHATSOEVER.
IF YOU DONT MAKE IT ON TIME YOU LOSE
Recycling = Automatic DQ
1st to 5 wins
3-0 = KO
4-1 = TKO
check in. G/l
MoreHits
July 15th, 2009, 02:46 PM
lets get this up early......yea?
C. Gaffle
July 15th, 2009, 08:37 PM
aight, just got home from ill probably have mine up ina bit
C. Gaffle
July 16th, 2009, 02:42 AM
so for the lateness, wasnt actually gonna post at all
I'll puttin u on blast, i've neva seen a pupil with such a ass pen
& that's the reason ur sophoMore...an im the upperclassmen
See Im simply nice, but with u im bored i guess
cuz text is one of those areas...where More is less
See in Stick and Move u got straight ripped by Gen, now it's me
so if u got beat by a'Cide line....imagine when theres no boundaries
& u aint even in my weight class, ur punches are well...hyped
while im the real deal with Hits...an this'll be a SWELL fight
After smashin u, i'll nurse u back to health when ur awfully broken
u'll be weighted on hand n' foot...sinkin to the bottom of the ocean
done.
MoreHits
July 16th, 2009, 02:58 AM
i started writing with 5 minutes left, so hold off the clowning
n just for trying to rushmore………u getting thrown off a mountain
sure he has all the intentions of winning but this dude is just heart
theres no way i’m having a C in the finals…..especially when im schooling him hard
bitch if u want fag, u just an annoying whack dude
u've only gotten this close to more cuz of the lesser sign pointed at u
compared to u i'm a vet, i've ran through better cats
if anyone says G fit with the greats....its cuz they wearing new era hats
defcons nice, but really, ya wuz thinking this dude is ill too?
ur the aero of the tourney.......there wuz alot of hype around u but even this newb can kill u
e
July 16th, 2009, 03:44 AM
vote = gaffle
more,
obviously more hits posted after to try and flip his script, and failed. thats weak in my book. not so much that u tried to flip his shit, but that u didnt manage to do it well....
ur punches were long winded and worded very poorly.
example:
"bitch if u want fag, u just an annoying whack dude"
doesn't matter what language you speak, that makes no sense.
all in all, idk man. i voted for u last round cuz ur verse was alot better than this. none of your punches had sting to'em.
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Gaf,
Looks like you went for the throat on this one. your flow is inconsistent in spots and so are your punches. meaning, at one point you had me like "uh oh".....and the next i was like "bleh"
one very nice punch followed by a weak one. overall a winning verse.
"See in Stick and Move u got straight ripped by Gen, now it's me
so if u got beat by a'Cide line....imagine when theres no boundaries"
terrible setup but a great punchline. i liked that. arguably ur best line in the verse.
MoreHits
July 16th, 2009, 03:58 AM
not bitching.....but i didnt even read his verse.....so how did i flip something?.......last round i fed......not this one.....i started writing that verse at 11:54 n it was due 5 minutes later....no excuses though.....good stuff gaffle
Mighty Odds
July 16th, 2009, 04:17 AM
i don't know why dude said that one line ain't make scene.. to me it did.. either he didnt read it right or hes one of them grammar nazi lol.. anyways
here what i liked
See Im simply nice, but with u im bored i guess
cuz text is one of those areas...where More is less
See in Stick and Move u got straight ripped by Gen, now it's me
so if u got beat by a'Cide line....imagine when theres no boundaries
After smashin u, i'll nurse u back to health when ur awfully broken
u'll be weighted on hand n' foot...sinkin to the bottom of the ocean
vs
i started writing with 5 minutes left, so hold off the clowning
n just for trying to rushmore………u getting thrown off a mountain
this was a cool little battle.. but just one line from more stood out to me.. so with that said I gotta go with C graffle.. just had a better verse at the end of the day
Vote- C Graffle
e
July 16th, 2009, 04:23 AM
okay @ gaffle in regards to flippin his verse. imma just -shrug- on that one. no worries though....
but as far as =
"bitch if u want fag, u just an annoying whack dude"
someone please explain to me what that means
David Lama
July 16th, 2009, 07:22 AM
Morehits needed to word his lines better. I can tell he rushed it. Concepts were there. The wording wasnt. Gaffle was more polished. Better wording and flow which made his lines hit harder.
My vote goes to C. Gaffle
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July 15th, 2009, 05:33 AM
No Time to Waste 2009
Keystyle Tournament
Verses due July 15th 2009.
11:59PM Pacific
10 lines only - cannot exceed this amount
these are keystyle battles.
you only have a day to write.
NO EXTENSIONS WHATSOEVER.
IF YOU DONT MAKE IT ON TIME YOU LOSE
Recycling = Automatic DQ
1st to 5 wins
3-0 = KO
4-1 = TKO
check in. G/l
MoreHits
July 15th, 2009, 02:46 PM
lets get this up early......yea?
C. Gaffle
July 15th, 2009, 08:37 PM
aight, just got home from ill probably have mine up ina bit
C. Gaffle
July 16th, 2009, 02:42 AM
so for the lateness, wasnt actually gonna post at all
I'll puttin u on blast, i've neva seen a pupil with such a ass pen
& that's the reason ur sophoMore...an im the upperclassmen
See Im simply nice, but with u im bored i guess
cuz text is one of those areas...where More is less
See in Stick and Move u got straight ripped by Gen, now it's me
so if u got beat by a'Cide line....imagine when theres no boundaries
& u aint even in my weight class, ur punches are well...hyped
while im the real deal with Hits...an this'll be a SWELL fight
After smashin u, i'll nurse u back to health when ur awfully broken
u'll be weighted on hand n' foot...sinkin to the bottom of the ocean
done.
MoreHits
July 16th, 2009, 02:58 AM
i started writing with 5 minutes left, so hold off the clowning
n just for trying to rushmore………u getting thrown off a mountain
sure he has all the intentions of winning but this dude is just heart
theres no way i’m having a C in the finals…..especially when im schooling him hard
bitch if u want fag, u just an annoying whack dude
u've only gotten this close to more cuz of the lesser sign pointed at u
compared to u i'm a vet, i've ran through better cats
if anyone says G fit with the greats....its cuz they wearing new era hats
defcons nice, but really, ya wuz thinking this dude is ill too?
ur the aero of the tourney.......there wuz alot of hype around u but even this newb can kill u
e
July 16th, 2009, 03:44 AM
vote = gaffle
more,
obviously more hits posted after to try and flip his script, and failed. thats weak in my book. not so much that u tried to flip his shit, but that u didnt manage to do it well....
ur punches were long winded and worded very poorly.
example:
"bitch if u want fag, u just an annoying whack dude"
doesn't matter what language you speak, that makes no sense.
all in all, idk man. i voted for u last round cuz ur verse was alot better than this. none of your punches had sting to'em.
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Gaf,
Looks like you went for the throat on this one. your flow is inconsistent in spots and so are your punches. meaning, at one point you had me like "uh oh".....and the next i was like "bleh"
one very nice punch followed by a weak one. overall a winning verse.
"See in Stick and Move u got straight ripped by Gen, now it's me
so if u got beat by a'Cide line....imagine when theres no boundaries"
terrible setup but a great punchline. i liked that. arguably ur best line in the verse.
MoreHits
July 16th, 2009, 03:58 AM
not bitching.....but i didnt even read his verse.....so how did i flip something?.......last round i fed......not this one.....i started writing that verse at 11:54 n it was due 5 minutes later....no excuses though.....good stuff gaffle
Mighty Odds
July 16th, 2009, 04:17 AM
i don't know why dude said that one line ain't make scene.. to me it did.. either he didnt read it right or hes one of them grammar nazi lol.. anyways
here what i liked
See Im simply nice, but with u im bored i guess
cuz text is one of those areas...where More is less
See in Stick and Move u got straight ripped by Gen, now it's me
so if u got beat by a'Cide line....imagine when theres no boundaries
After smashin u, i'll nurse u back to health when ur awfully broken
u'll be weighted on hand n' foot...sinkin to the bottom of the ocean
vs
i started writing with 5 minutes left, so hold off the clowning
n just for trying to rushmore………u getting thrown off a mountain
this was a cool little battle.. but just one line from more stood out to me.. so with that said I gotta go with C graffle.. just had a better verse at the end of the day
Vote- C Graffle
e
July 16th, 2009, 04:23 AM
okay @ gaffle in regards to flippin his verse. imma just -shrug- on that one. no worries though....
but as far as =
"bitch if u want fag, u just an annoying whack dude"
someone please explain to me what that means
David Lama
July 16th, 2009, 07:22 AM
Morehits needed to word his lines better. I can tell he rushed it. Concepts were there. The wording wasnt. Gaffle was more polished. Better wording and flow which made his lines hit harder.
My vote goes to C. Gaffle
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