Dominate vs. Swerve - {Dominate wins}

[Meth]

The Long Anticipated...
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Round 3

Rules:

12 lines minimum/20 max (If u & ur oppenent(s) agree to more that's fine)
No swaying
No biting
No recycling
No other dumb shit that will get u DQd

Voting on 3 battles is mandatory, or u will be docked 2 for every one u miss. Links MUST be posted in the voting links thread at the top of the forum.

Battles due Tuesday October 29th at 11:59 pm PST

Extensions allowed up to 48 hrs, & to ONLY be agreed to between both participants.

Any other questions or concerns PM me
Dominate Swerve

[Dominate]

Whattup Swervington?

16?

[Swerve]

Sounds good bud.

[Dominate]

U got it bud. Thanks for letting me still post


Ayo,

His girl look like a body builder - w/ those biceps u know she trumpin him
Pat Buchanan’s so fuckin prominent they could sway ppl to vote Republican
Kid’s been mid-tier forever, how his fans saying I won’t best this queer?
Fuck what a Stan Doubts… Swerve aint had ONE of those his whole text career
I’m dope w/ a flawless delivery, plus I’m in a line of TRUE work
U only good w/ Polish to Boot cuz ur that kid that says “shine ur shoes, sir?”
& ppl ain’t gonna sugarcoat it - they’ll say u got burnt in the fires
They’ll make no Bones about it… Just an ep of that show that ur murder inspires
I meet girls’ every criteria that’s why I stay bedding the fairest dimes
If Swerve putting Ticks in Boxes it’s by spreading his genital parasites
Fuck ur Australia punches, keep thinking those lines are in fine taste
At least MY version of an Outback doesn’t need corrective surgery & a spine brace
You emotional faggot... I’ll take ur girl & enter her nookie
U got NO chance of taking Midol… that’s why you’re STILL a sensitive pussy
Ur scoliosis is jokes though – I know ur shit isn’t totally damned
Only reason ur Backpacks up is cuz ur a soy latte drinking fag who goes to poetry slams

[Swerve]

I actually don't have a sister or daughter. They are hypothetical. Hypothetically they would be solid 8's

Of course even your sister's hypothetical, you'll be dieing alone,
Fact is you'll never see a solid 8...like lunches at nika's retirement home.
Good lines from you are few and far in between, I’m just keeping you honest,
Cause a hot barbie something Dom can’t comprehend unless he’s throwing shrimps on it.
You scare tourists away from Australia cause you’re sad and you’re shitty,
I’m wondering how the country Canberra faggot like you living near its capital city.
Your girl wanna fuck me cause she know this Potter fan is not the one,
Cause while she busy tryna tongue my parcel...you're trying to learn parseltongue.
Say goodbye to your family and friends cause the kid is ruthless,
Hack him to pieces and then lay D parts in the open like a female nudist.
Dom’s too much of a geek to touch a bitch, he doesn’t really relish hugs,
During contact, he’s got a hover technique that helicopter pilots would be jealous of.
Aero had all the bars in the tag, you begged him to check yours,
While Aeropostale the good lines, you just go chasing young teens in those prep stores.
Your girl loving my sex game, I had her straddling me during fall brawl,
Then she started "sitting sideways" on the pole like a stripper dancing to paul wall.

[Cashius]

Polish to boot, Midol

Vs.

Barbie, Canberra



This was real close to me. I thought that Dom had some concepts that were clever but didn't hit (Buchanan, Bones). Outback isn't fresh against him. But aside from that one there weren't any real misses. Swerve had the Paul Wall thing which was ok but the Nik and Harry Potter lines were complete misses for me. I also feel that Dom's quotes stood out a bit more, mostly because of his wording. So, I gotta barely lean to Dom. Good job, gize.

Dom.

[Neighbor]

His girl look like a body builder - w/ those biceps u know she trumpin him
Pat Buchanan’s so fuckin prominent they could sway ppl to vote Republican
Is it 'Pat boo cannon' you're going for here? I like the idea, but the pronunciation's a little forced.. still not bad for an opener
Kid’s been mid-tier forever, how his fans saying I won’t best this queer?
Fuck what a Stan Doubts… Swerve aint had ONE of those his whole text career
Okay, nothing special
I’m dope w/ a flawless delivery, plus I’m in a line of TRUE work
U only good w/ Polish to Boot cuz ur that kid that says “shine ur shoes, sir?”
Good shit, very original.. got an lol
& ppl ain’t gonna sugarcoat it - they’ll say u got burnt in the fires
They’ll make no Bones about it… Just an ep of that show that ur murder inspires
This was alright, kinda wish you were going at him more
I meet girls’ every criteria that’s why I stay bedding the fairest dimes
If Swerve putting Ticks in Boxes it’s by spreading his genital parasites
Damn
Fuck ur Australia punches, keep thinking those lines are in fine taste
At least MY version of an Outback doesn’t need corrective surgery & a spine brace
Damn again lol
You emotional faggot... I’ll take ur girl & enter her nookie
U got NO chance of taking Midol… that’s why you’re STILL a sensitive pussy
Yep, this'll work
Ur scoliosis is jokes though – I know ur shit isn’t totally damned
Only reason ur Backpacks up is cuz ur a soy latte drinking fag who goes to poetry slams
Nah, not for a finisher

vs.

Of course even your sister's hypothetical, you'll be dieing alone,
Fact is you'll never see a solid 8...like lunches at nika's retirement home.
Decent opener, you get bonus points for it being relevant to Dom
Good lines from you are few and far in between, I’m just keeping you honest,
Cause a hot barbie something Dom can’t comprehend unless he’s throwing shrimps on it.
Can't support a 'barbie' play, even tho it's a personal
You scare tourists away from Australia cause you’re sad and you’re shitty,
I’m wondering how the country Canberra faggot like you living near its capital city.
Liked it
Your girl wanna fuck me cause she know this Potter fan is not the one,
Cause while she busy tryna tongue my parcel...you're trying to learn parseltongue.
lol Fuckin Harry Potter punches & shit.. this was weird, but got an lol
Say goodbye to your family and friends cause the kid is ruthless,
Hack him to pieces and then lay D parts in the open like a female nudist.
Okay.. the actual wordplay's straight, it's just I'm not a big fan of those first letter nameplays
Dom’s too much of a geek to touch a bitch, he doesn’t really relish hugs,
During contact, he’s got a hover technique that helicopter pilots would be jealous of.
Solid jab lol
Aero had all the bars in the tag, you begged him to check yours,
While Aeropostale the good lines, you just go chasing young teens in those prep stores.
A little forced, but still a nice hit & personal
Your girl loving my sex game, I had her straddling me during fall brawl,
Then she started "sitting sideways" on the pole like a stripper dancing to paul wall.
Average closer

Okay, so this battle was a little bit of a let down.. I could tell you both either rushed or seemed uninspired to do the dance.. Dom really didn't go at Swerve too much, but the 2 bars I really liked that were relevant from him were haymakers.. Swerve was hit or miss, I thought he directed his verse at Dominate more effectively, tho.. I gotta edge it to Dom for having better punches, but could see it going either way

v/ Dominate

[murda sho]

Swerve

Of course even your sister's hypothetical, you'll be dieing alone,
Fact is you'll never see a solid 8...like lunches at nika's retirement home.
Good lines from you are few and far in between, I’m just keeping you honest,
Cause a hot barbie something Dom can’t comprehend unless he’s throwing shrimps on it.
You scare tourists away from Australia cause you’re sad and you’re shitty,
I’m wondering how the country Canberra faggot like you living near its capital city.

Say goodbye to your family and friends cause the kid is ruthless,
Hack him to pieces and then lay D parts in the open like a female nudist.


Dom

Kid’s been mid-tier forever, how his fans saying I won’t best this queer?
Fuck what a Stan Doubts… Swerve aint had ONE of those his whole text career

& ppl ain’t gonna sugarcoat it - they’ll say u got burnt in the fires
They’ll make no Bones about it… Just an ep of that show that ur murder inspires

Fuck ur Australia punches, keep thinking those lines are in fine taste
At least MY version of an Outback doesn’t need corrective surgery & a spine brace
You emotional faggot... I’ll take ur girl & enter her nookie
U got NO chance of taking Midol… that’s why you’re STILL a sensitive pussy


This was a good battle y'all was thrown some nice punches back and forth but I think Swerve's were a little better, could go either way tho

[Alvin Karpis]

opener, outback played np but was relevant, midol
swerve had the solid 8, hot barbie, hover
honestly this was really close because you both had some bad misses
but same amount of nice lines
Guess it comes down to which lines i felt hit harder and I think dominate took it, some time his wp is forced like stand doubts but i was feeling the lines that did hit more

v/dominate

[KwaL!ty]

His girl look like a body builder - w/ those biceps u know she trumpin him
Pat Buchanan’s so fuckin prominent they could sway ppl to vote Republican
Kid’s been mid-tier forever, how his fans saying I won’t best this queer?
Fuck what a Stan Doubts… Swerve aint had ONE of those his whole text career
& ppl ain’t gonna sugarcoat it - they’ll say u got burnt in the fires
They’ll make no Bones about it… Just an ep of that show that ur murder inspires
You emotional faggot... I’ll take ur girl & enter her nookie
U got NO chance of taking Midol… that’s why you’re STILL a sensitive pussy



vs



Of course even your sister's hypothetical, you'll be dieing alone,
Fact is you'll never see a solid 8...like lunches at nika's retirement home.
Good lines from you are few and far in between, I’m just keeping you honest,
Cause a hot barbie something Dom can’t comprehend unless he’s throwing shrimps on it.
You scare tourists away from Australia cause you’re sad and you’re shitty,
I’m wondering how the country Canberra faggot like you living near its capital city.
Say goodbye to your family and friends cause the kid is ruthless,
Hack him to pieces and then lay D parts in the open like a female nudist.
Dom’s too much of a geek to touch a bitch, he doesn’t really relish hugs,
During contact, he’s got a hover technique that helicopter pilots would be jealous of.



this battle was pretty close both came with some dope wordplay & personals ..the quotes went in swerves favor .. the misses were tied swerve would have took that category but the Aeropostale didnt work at all which brought his verse down needless to say Swerve gets this for being more polished and harder hitting..

[Beyond]

Dominate

Opener is nice. Don't see the complaints about it. I guess it may be slightly forced on Pat's boo's cannons, but it's passable, IMO. Stan Doubts was cool. I had you need to Stan decide and make a decision to drive off a bridge like he did vs. Con on Rapflava in '07 maybe where he viciously robbed me in my only shut out loss on that site ever out of 50 some odd battles there in which I brutally avenged that losses at least 3 times by shut out fashion myself in reg and topical battles. But I digress. Polish to Boot is roflz. Good shit. Not too complex, but didn't need to be. Bones is dope. Again, not too complex, but fresh and very crisp wording. Easily as good as Neigh's or better because Bags is a faggot. Ticks in Boxes is fire. Clever shit and set up well. Outback not fresh, but love the double personal flip and punchline. Smooth as butter. Midol is sick. Great punchline. Backpacks worse line in your verse. No one says someone's back packs up or packs or anything. Just bizarre. Punchline was also a bit too wordy. On to Swerve.

Swerve

Solid 8 is a good flip on a played concept. Well, 8/ate is cum/come ish, is what I meant. Hot Barbie is dope to me. I like it 'cause it's a personal flip. Bar be/Barbie isn't fresh, though, indeed. Canberra is similar to Barbie, although I remember using it actually WITH Dom as my tag partner vs. Damien & Aero in a HOF battle on IHH (a longbar site) enroute to champing the tournament. Mine was something like your bitch can't have a Melbourne or Canberra child... on some Baron bitch Fight Night type shit or something. I don't remember. Parceltongue is decent. Obscure to me, but I see what you did there. Lay D parts in the open is pure fire to me. No idea why it wasn't quoted. Faggots. It's just perfect. Connection works both ways 100%, etc. Hover technique is alright. Concept and connection just aren't as strong as they could be. Idk. Aeropostale is fresh. Giving it points off that alone. Sitting sideways was a good closer, too. Clean connection.

Overall

Close battle and pretty dope. Thought Dom was too consistent here. He had one real slip for me while Swerve had a couple. Both had some fire though and a few lines I really dug. Just thought Dom edged it out on slightly more consistent/better unquotes. Props to both.

/v dominate

[Answer]

His girl look like a body builder - w/ those biceps u know she trumpin him
Pat Buchanan’s so fuckin prominent they could sway ppl to vote Republican

As mentioned, this is forced. Buchanan is pronounced Byu-cannon, and even if it weren't - i have some issues with the wordplay, but the execution was solid

Kid’s been mid-tier forever, how his fans saying I won’t best this queer?
Fuck what a Stan Doubts… Swerve aint had ONE of those his whole text career

This is alright. The way I read it is "Fuck what a stand outs" which really doesnt make sense grammatically.

I’m dope w/ a flawless delivery, plus I’m in a line of TRUE work
U only good w/ Polish to Boot cuz ur that kid that says “shine ur shoes, sir?”

This was dope, clever, and funny

& ppl ain’t gonna sugarcoat it - they’ll say u got burnt in the fires
They’ll make no Bones about it… Just an ep of that show that ur murder inspires

This was alright...the concepts a bit corny to me, but the execution's on point

I meet girls’ every criteria that’s why I stay bedding the fairest dimes
If Swerve putting Ticks in Boxes it’s by spreading his genital parasites

Not really feeling this one, but its likely because ive seen a lot of tic and box related concepts recently

Fuck ur Australia punches, keep thinking those lines are in fine taste
At least MY version of an Outback doesn’t need corrective surgery & a spine brace

Kind of funny, but I still have some issues with the wordplay

You emotional faggot... I’ll take ur girl & enter her nookie
U got NO chance of taking Midol… that’s why you’re STILL a sensitive pussy

Also kind of funny, but I'm still iffy about this. The whole thing with "my doll" seems really 1920's and just doesn't connect quite as hard as it could

Ur scoliosis is jokes though – I know ur shit isn’t totally damned
Only reason ur Backpacks up is cuz ur a soy latte drinking fag who goes to poetry slams

Solid closer





Swerve

Of course even your sister's hypothetical, you'll be dieing alone,
Fact is you'll never see a solid 8...like lunches at nika's retirement home.

I get that it's relevant to a comment he made, but I honestly feel like this would've hit harder in the context of talking about him not being able to get women. By bringing up the quote, I feel like we're talking about how his hypothetical sister isn't even a solid 8. It really takes a lot of sting out of an otherwise dope punch

Good lines from you are few and far in between, I’m just keeping you honest,
Cause a hot barbie something Dom can’t comprehend unless he’s throwing shrimps on it.

Kind of funny, but you're hurting yourself by omitting the word "is" from the sentence "a hot barbie something dom cant comprehend"

You scare tourists away from Australia cause you’re sad and you’re shitty,
I’m wondering how the country Canberra faggot like you living near its capital city.

This is kind of like a line that Dom used where one side of your wordplay is working, but the other side isn't. The statement "The country Canberra faggot like you" makes no sense at all. I get it..."Can bare a"....but that only works on one part of the wordplay. The mistake a lot of people make is thinking that they can just throw away the context of one side and get away with it. That doesn't float with me

Your girl wanna fuck me cause she know this Potter fan is not the one,
Cause while she busy tryna tongue my parcel...you're trying to learn parseltongue.

Not really feeling this one at all to be honest. This was actually pretty below par in comparison to your other lines.

Say goodbye to your family and friends cause the kid is ruthless,
Hack him to pieces and then lay D parts in the open like a female nudist.

Meh, I'm not really feeling this. It's just too obvious and comes across as something that's probably been done thousands of times against people whose names start with "D".

Dom’s too much of a geek to touch a bitch, he doesn’t really relish hugs,
During contact, he’s got a hover technique that helicopter pilots would be jealous of.

Kind of funny. I like this

Aero had all the bars in the tag, you begged him to check yours,
While Aeropostale the good lines, you just go chasing young teens in those prep stores.

This is just forced on a lot of levels. Phonically and grammatically

Your girl loving my sex game, I had her straddling me during fall brawl,
Then she started "sitting sideways" on the pole like a stripper dancing to paul wall.

This is also a huge miss. It's down there with the parseltongue line for least favorite



Best Lines: Dom

3. You emotional faggot... I’ll take ur girl & enter her nookie
U got NO chance of taking Midol… that’s why you’re STILL a sensitive pussy

2. Ur scoliosis is jokes though – I know ur shit isn’t totally damned
Only reason ur Backpacks up is cuz ur a soy latte drinking fag who goes to poetry slams

1. I’m dope w/ a flawless delivery, plus I’m in a line of TRUE work
U only good w/ Polish to Boot cuz ur that kid that says “shine ur shoes, sir?”


Best Lines: Swerve


3. Good lines from you are few and far in between, I’m just keeping you honest,
Cause a hot barbie something Dom can’t comprehend unless he’s throwing shrimps on it.

2. Of course even your sister's hypothetical, you'll be dieing alone,
Fact is you'll never see a solid 8...like lunches at nika's retirement home.

1. Dom’s too much of a geek to touch a bitch, he doesn’t really relish hugs,
During contact, he’s got a hover technique that helicopter pilots would be jealous of





At the end of the day, Swerve had some good lines - but also had some huge misses, which Dom was consistent enough to avoid. If those two lines from swerve were replaced by lines that were at par with the rest of his verse, I think I'd have this leaning his way. But ultimately...

MVGT - Dominate