Stupid Bitch Music.

[Geno]

Sadistic sense of humor, sense perfume of which she'd worn
I never knew a love nor hatred that consumed like this before
Initial kisses hit me -floored, stuck on stupid -had me going
That was years ago, but I still look as stupid as those moments
Had me open in a manner that could only have been love
I called it true, but come to find out its as phony as she was
And it only had begun, no way to stop this rollercoaster ride
Now I see her more when I'm asleep than wide awake with open eyes
I hope it dies -these feelings deep, the jagged blade is lodged
The knife is penetrating, pain, I don't know how to make it stop
I thought I found a way, but not the right effects were being made
Falling in love with one showed me that I was sexually enslaved
There's no expression we can paint to signify the bumps ahead
Asking god to damn the fucking bitch to me that once was blessed
I've hungered less since we became the failure people know us as
And now my future has the holes that your complete devotion had

[Camp Bell]

Nothing like a bitch to spoil shit..
this was great.
i really dont get into the emotional pieces
but this was so smooth and vivid, couldnt help but to like it

Had me open in a manner that could only have been love
I called it true, but come to find out its as phony as she was
And it only had begun, no way to stop this rollercoaster ride
Now I see her more when I'm asleep than wide awake with open eyes

favorite lines

[Bodey]

nd it only had begun, no way to stop this rollercoaster ride
Now I see her more when I'm asleep than wide awake with open eyes
I've hungered less since we became the failure people know us as
And now my future has the holes that your complete devotion had

loved those^^

my boy's goin through somethin like this right now. this bitch has lied and lied to him so many times and he's been so miserable. sorry if you're goin through this right now. i always enjoy readin your pieces, you know just how to put the words together. keep your head up

[dead man]

if I'm being honest i did not like this.

Sadistic sense of humor, sense perfume of which she'd worn
I never knew a love nor hatred that consumed like this before
Initial kisses hit me -floored, stuck on stupid -had me going
That was years ago, but I still look as stupid as those moments

this was the peak. and the first two lines were the only portions which displayed, to me, any real or palpable sense of your state. i say this not to discourage you from writing any more of these type of verses, cause this was obviously the work of a talented writer and a necessary release, but this wasn't hitting for me in almost any sense of the word.

focus not so much on what is happening but where it takes you. write peripherally.

thats all i can give you sir.

thanks for this

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[Geno]

Thanks for the honest remarks. I kind of wrote this piece as a test of whether or not I had still had this type of content readily available should it be necessary to use again. I feel you when you say it wasn't hitting because it was all forced emotion, unlike my usual vent/introspect pieces concerning this kind of writing. You hit the nail on the head if you found it hard to relate to or even identify at all with, and the fact that you weren't feeling it tells me that its easy to recognize a forced piece of emo work. Thanks black, your wisdom is levels beyond

I will work on a more peripheral view when writing btw. I think its a good idea to add this to a piece, brings a lesspredictable set of thoughts to the table I think.. that's if I'm comprehending you correctly.

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[Geno]

up lol