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Camp Bell
02-05-2013, 02:41 AM
im on a mission to distance myself lyrically...
by scripting hell from an encrypted splinter cell, digitally
you dont have the energy to compete with my synergy
it's tom clancy wit bombs handy to drop fancy, literally..
i stay unconscious physically, stunt in a deposit box, mentally
comprising shocks of literacy, the dalai lama wasn't fit to read
psychotic hints of sicker keys, in sonic mixed wit cinder speed
driven by disease god has given me, until i reach a profitability
i'll religiously hock phlegm in speech, exhibiting prophet abilities..
my bold actions has the appeal of the goat, bo jackson on the field
jock my scriptures please, my post status dope, packaged for deals
on the block til my fingers freeze, holding packs to go, crack is my skill
i could make earth spinning cease, my flows' galactic hold on the axis is real
*hits joint*
this loud i'm getting high with, got me quiet as a church mouse the cat just killed
preaching to the choir only to be reminded, preachers lying to be hired is practiced, chill
while ya'll pageant&practice walking backwards in heels, i'll remain a blasphemous bastard at will

Flow
02-06-2013, 10:27 AM
Hmm seen alot better from you chap. Your rhyme scheme was weak at the start then improved alot as you moved on. Ironically its usually the other way round for niggas.

Wasnt a huge fan of the topic etc but still it was a nice read. There were some real highlights for me in this drop
- comprising shocks of literacy, the dalai lama wasn't fit to read
psychotic hints of sicker keys, in sonic mixed wit cinder speed

and

- preaching to the choir only to be reminded, preachers lying to be hired is practiced, chill

Keep it up - Nice work

Lars
02-06-2013, 11:32 AM
I only came in here because I wrote a piece about Kurt Cobain called Whatchumacallit.

I'm glad to see you didn't steal it.

I'll leave feed tomorrow once I've read through...

Camp Bell
02-06-2013, 04:35 PM
lol word....i'd NEVER BITE OR STEAL ANOTHER MANS WORK.

Zen
02-11-2013, 03:04 PM
I always enjoy your shit Camp Bell but this one was a little off for me compared to your other drops. Still all in all I thought it was nice especially the flow. Keep postin fam.

Fig
02-12-2013, 12:53 AM
I personally enjoy your structure on here. It flows very very smoothly when read aloud. Im going to have to say its what keeps me invested past the content. I thought this was a fun piece though, definitely seen better from you, but i don't believe in constantly having to out do your last bit of work. Cool drop.

Split
02-12-2013, 12:57 AM
lol word....i'd NEVER BITE OR STEAL ANOTHER MANS WORK.
respect.


it's tom clancy wit bombs handy to drop fancy, literally..
i stay unconscious physically, stunt in a deposit box, mentally
comprising shocks of literacy, the dalai lama wasn't fit to read
psychotic hints of sicker keys, in sonic mixed wit cinder speed

your punctuation's spot on, and your scheming in general is fresh. flexes can seem lazy, but i can tell the flow was double checked at least... good stuff man, look forward to reading your league verse