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PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 08:36 PM
shoot

Witty
11-09-2013, 08:37 PM
Yes.

Fig
11-09-2013, 08:38 PM
Me

StarFaggot
11-09-2013, 08:39 PM
lets hear it brah

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 08:39 PM
Yes.

You constantly brag about all the HOF open mics you've written but you never write, and when you do sign into leagues you no show. If you do show, you write like Textcee V.2.1, Multi's Optional edition.

Malachi
11-09-2013, 08:40 PM
hi

Ryan 12
11-09-2013, 08:40 PM
Witty

u have zero talent in writing pussy

except poems about being a fagg0t

Split
11-09-2013, 08:40 PM
Validate my self doubts

Rawn MD
11-09-2013, 08:41 PM
Lol have fun, use wanted this for how long now?

Shoot

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 08:41 PM
Me

You constantly no show. The only thing I've read from you is that one open mic I liked. But it had no rhymes. You're just like PancakeBrah except without the writing skills to back up his discussion prowess.

Witty
11-09-2013, 08:41 PM
You constantly brag about all the HOF open mics you've written but you never write, and when you do sign into leagues you no show. If you do show, you write like Textcee V.2.1, Multi's Optional edition.

It's just because I'm better than everyone.

StarFaggot
11-09-2013, 08:42 PM
You constantly no show. The only thing I've read from you is that one open mic I liked. But it had no rhymes. You're just like PancakeBrah except without the writing skills to back up his discussion prowess.

lol @ but it had no rhymes

Witty
11-09-2013, 08:42 PM
Witty

u have zero talent in writing pussy

except poems about being a fagg0t

I am better than you will ever be.

I have been asking you to prove me wrong.

Are you scared?

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 08:43 PM
lets hear it brah

This topic is mostly for topical shits because that's what I write in. So I'm going to imagine what your Open Mics would be like. I imagine they would have a lot of cool rhymes but a generic as fuck rhyme scheme. Your content would be that of a 12th grader in a predominantly black high school where they graduate people just to get them out of the building.

StarFaggot
11-09-2013, 08:44 PM
lol

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 08:51 PM
Validate my self doubts

You are the exact opposite of the saying 'brevity is the soul of wit'. You use weird and complex language well and there are jewels in your verses but you're not confident enough to simply say what you're saying without fancying it up with Webster.com research.

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 08:56 PM
Lol have fun, use wanted this for how long now?

Shoot

You are the retarded version of Neighbor when you do swag and flow, if the retarded version of Neighbor was on life support and could only type by eye movement on an XBox controller. Your open mic audience is 5 year olds who can't read. If there were an infinite amount of Rawns typing for an infinite amount of time they would not be able to reproduce the letter H.

StarFaggot
11-09-2013, 08:59 PM
You are the retarded version of Neighbor when you do swag and flow, if the retarded version of Neighbor was on life support and could only type by eye movement on an XBox controller. Your open mic audience is 5 year olds who can't read. If there were an infinite amount of Rawns typing for an infinite amount of time they would not be able to reproduce the letter H.

lol...

veritas
11-09-2013, 09:05 PM
please tell me?

Zen
11-09-2013, 09:06 PM
Try not to kill my ego too much.

Rawn MD
11-09-2013, 09:06 PM
I expected better

Mael
11-09-2013, 09:07 PM
What would I be like if I lay my hand gripped with ink against the paper to compose of the poetic arts?

Probably as bad as I just made that sound, meh.

Destroyer
11-09-2013, 09:09 PM
sup

Fig
11-09-2013, 09:10 PM
You constantly no show. The only thing I've read from you is that one open mic I liked. But it had no rhymes. You're just like PancakeBrah except without the writing skills to back up his discussion prowess.

BUT I beat you

Cashius
11-09-2013, 09:16 PM
Me.

TYSON
11-09-2013, 09:19 PM
Go ahead

Eŋg
11-09-2013, 09:32 PM
you haven't read me enough. go on.

Zombie
11-09-2013, 09:46 PM
You are the retarded version of Neighbor when you do swag and flow, if the retarded version of Neighbor was on life support and could only type by eye movement on an XBox controller. Your open mic audience is 5 year olds who can't read. If there were an infinite amount of Rawns typing for an infinite amount of time they would not be able to reproduce the letter H.

loll

Split
11-09-2013, 09:46 PM
You are the exact opposite of the saying 'brevity is the soul of wit'. You use weird and complex language well and there are jewels in your verses but you're not confident enough to simply say what you're saying without fancying it up with Webster.com research.

Thanks, understood

Though all my language is organic/ home grown. I guess it does seem really stilted

Split
11-09-2013, 09:48 PM
you haven't read me enough. go on.

Is that Akira?

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 09:53 PM
Thanks, understood

Though all my language is organic/ home grown. I guess it does seem really stilted

I like your writing heaps bro. This topic is a maelstrom.

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 10:00 PM
you haven't read me enough. go on.

You're English, right? You post like Vulgar, Black, and Pent in discussion. Acting above. When in all reality you're obviously a cut below the top-top tier you think you're in. Your wording is great and your rhyming is strong but your own self worth makes you the poor man's version of the elite topicalist/open mic'er. You'll disagree with this, which only reinforces the accuracy of it.

Darth Yoda
11-09-2013, 10:01 PM
be meaner/archaic want 2 laff more

Eŋg
11-09-2013, 10:12 PM
Is that Akira?

Tetsuo Shima. from Akira, yea.

You're English, right? You post like Vulgar, Black, and Pent in discussion. Acting above. When in all reality you're obviously a cut below the top-top tier you think you're in. Your wording is great and wording is strong but your own self worth makes you the poor man's version of the elite topicalist/open mic'er. You'll disagree with this, which only reinforces the accuracy of it.

yezzir. lol @ categorizing my boarding habit. i half-agree. i'd given those you just mentioned, and others, their dues as writers and in so doing concede the superiority of their craft. i consider myself an elite open mic'er. i do not consider myself an elite topicalist. a semantic difference, perhaps.

apart from that, this was a solid psychoanalysis with what you were given. werd.

Destroyer
11-09-2013, 10:12 PM
analyze me dammit!

veritas
11-09-2013, 10:16 PM
Me too please

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 10:17 PM
be meaner/archaic want 2 laff more

If the period didn't exist no one would think you are dope. Every one of your aliases is Cristian, and 99% of the board doesn't know what that means. Every one of your permutations writes with postcum on their hand from watching Eminem Vimeos. Boarding. Wise Ways literally jerks off to your verses, Orc likes them because liking them makes him feel smart, and everyone else follows because why not. You all write relatively the same way and emoji each other thinking it's ironic when in all reality people get it and just shrug. You guys are the Finn and Jake of textcees.

Darth Yoda
11-09-2013, 10:23 PM
hahHAHAHAa. BWHAHA dull boy

cristian is commonly thrown around because he's (inaudible)

good !!!!! I analyze you later acting like you.

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 10:27 PM
hahHAHAHAa. BWHAHA dull boy

cristian is commonly thrown around because he's (inaudible)

good !!!!! I analyze you later acting like you.

im sure you'll do a good job of it. as an admin, i will delete it if i feel offended.

the exclamation points !!!! are hilarious; we know you think you're smart.

which one is this? the model boxer who knows everyone in new york? or the depressed dad who writes great open mics? or the zany guy? or cristian!? i can't tell!

it's so interesting.

Frank Metts
11-09-2013, 10:36 PM
Something about paragraph form without propose punctuation

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 10:37 PM
Something about paragraph form without propose punctuation

if you were to ever write an open mic it'd be in paragraph form like all of your disucssion posts. everyone's eyes would glaze over like you seeing a mcdonalds menu

Certain
11-09-2013, 10:38 PM
PancakeBrah, you are obsessed with interesting rhymes and too often let them guide your verses. Your rhymes and schemes are elite level, but you're often a syllable or three too long or too short, hurting your cadence. You write about things that mean a lot to you, like pretty white girls, but you often seem to intentionally ignore the frames of reference of your readers. You like juxtaposition a bit too much. And you sometimes go on runs of trying to write like other people, but you're not zygote and don't pull it off as well as him. Also, you might be my favorite writer on this site.

NYCSPITZ
11-09-2013, 10:39 PM
I knew it was cristian Darth Yoda u fucking liar

he knows ur ip ur phantom is ghost

pancake do me get real specific like the exact tier (top-mid-low-top)

veritas
11-09-2013, 10:44 PM
Me please?

Fig
11-09-2013, 10:46 PM
Do VERITAS

It'd be cool

Darth Yoda
11-09-2013, 10:46 PM
IPs don't mean much and I think everyone except .. void? has the same IP atm. Not to add to the mysterious aura or anything.


and Certain shoots from halfcourttttttttt!!!!!

score

Frank Metts
11-09-2013, 10:47 PM
if you were to ever write an open mic it'd be in paragraph form like all of your disucssion posts. everyone's eyes would glaze over like you seeing a mcdonalds menu

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=19617&highlight=Chess+game


It's the only open mic I've ever dropped here ... Was teaching the children how to write creatively as a coping skill and started this


Also you indulge in more calories a day then me... Eat a burrito when your 32 and watch your stomach look like a snakes who just ate a rat..

Zen
11-09-2013, 10:49 PM
I have still not been told why I suck.

veritas
11-09-2013, 10:50 PM
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=19617&highlight=Chess+game


It's the only open mic I've ever dropped here ... Was teaching the children how to write creatively as a coping skill and started this


Also you indulge in more calories a day then me... Eat a burrito when your 32 and watch your stomach look like a snakes who just ate a rat..

That was a dope open.

Darth Yoda
11-09-2013, 10:51 PM
zneland suck cause taxi driver wannabe homeless 11-14 backwards mad posts since jan 2013

Frank Metts
11-09-2013, 10:53 PM
That was a dope open.

Thanks V

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 10:59 PM
PancakeBrah, you are obsessed with interesting rhymes and too often let them guide your verses. Your rhymes and schemes are elite level, but you're often a syllable or three too long or too short, hurting your cadence. You write about things that mean a lot to you, like pretty white girls, but you often seem to intentionally ignore the frames of reference of your readers. You like juxtaposition a bit too much. And you sometimes go on runs of trying to write like other people, but you're not zygote and don't pull it off as well as him. Also, you might be my favorite writer on this site.

I think you recognize the zeitgeist of the site, and write accordingly, with your own particular strength for wording and grammar. If I were to write the most PancakeBrah verse possible, and you were to write the most Certain Serpent verse possible, they'd be near identical, with mine being a being a bit more real, emotional, and personable with yours a bit more refined, professional, and executed. You have a knack for wording; you are fully aware that the majority of AOWL members can't truly write to write and you take advantage. For some reason you take stock in your record and your 'vote streak', as petty as that is. I do as well. If I were to pick a doppleganger for myself on this site it'd be you, but there are differences. You are a bit more rote; I am a bit more bleeding heart. In the heart of this topic, the reason why you suck as a writer...sometimes you come off as emotion machine X in topicals. You perfect what you write but more than half the time it seems to me that its just a possible interpretation. Like, 'this verse seems like what sadness would feel like'. You write it as well as can be done, but I don't feel it. Its all a bit dry.

Also, you're probably one of my favorite writers *dullboy/bwhahha emoji*

NYCSPITZ
11-09-2013, 11:01 PM
what would u say about dead man

TYSON
11-09-2013, 11:01 PM
I have still not been told why I suck.

Split
11-09-2013, 11:02 PM
I don't count my win against Genocide because Zygote voted against me

veritas
11-09-2013, 11:02 PM
Me please.

Destroyer
11-09-2013, 11:03 PM
I'm through being ignored. you'll see me in the OM soon enough

Certain
11-09-2013, 11:05 PM
I don't count my win against Genocide because Zygote voted against me

I love zygote, but his voting is weird. So is yours.

Cashius
11-09-2013, 11:09 PM
Me.

PancakeBrah
11-09-2013, 11:13 PM
Me please.

I've clicked on all of your open mics. They're just an extension of your boarding, whether you're trolling or not. Purposefully inaccessible and vague. You use big words to try to add to your legend of intelligence. In the end no one really likes them, even if they say they do. You're a mix of black d and Split Eight if neither knew how to write an affecting thought, or original rhyme scheme. Your undermining of Discussion through boarding is justified but Open Mic is a legitimate place to try to be creative and you undermine it in all the wrong ways.

veritas
11-09-2013, 11:34 PM
I've clicked on all of your open mics. They're just an extension of your boarding, whether you're trolling or not. Purposefully inaccessible and vague. You use big words to try to add to your legend of intelligence. In the end no one really likes them, even if they say they do. You're a mix of black d and Split Eight if neither knew how to write an affecting thought, or original rhyme scheme. Your undermining of Discussion through boarding is justified but Open Mic is a legitimate place to try to be creative and you undermine it in all the wrong ways.

perhaps...I also must consider that yiu are a fool and are blind. My last piece laid the mathematical framework of the physics of an interdomensional portal. But yeah....I feel you lol. Have a great night. Troll tide

Strikta
11-09-2013, 11:47 PM
Yo.

Mike Wrecka
11-10-2013, 07:49 AM
I don't count my win against Genocide because Zygote voted against me

I actually do the same exact thing. I could lose 9-1 but if he voted on me I think I won. and vice versa

dull boy
11-10-2013, 11:24 AM
He said I write good OMs. I think we're both the zany guy. I'm kind of tired of the charade, honestly. Only because I'm cooler than Cristian, but only because I'm me and not him.

Ghost1
11-10-2013, 11:29 AM
Tell me.

BWHAHA
11-10-2013, 11:29 AM
He said I write good OMs. I think we're both the zany guy. I'm kind of tired of the charade, honestly. Only because I'm cooler than Cristian, but only because I'm me and not him.

Dude..don't. Just don't.

Certain
11-10-2013, 11:33 AM
You guys are going to have to start catching up to Darth Yoda's recent activity wave.

dead man
11-10-2013, 11:49 AM
what would u say about dead man
:/

King Ra.
11-10-2013, 12:30 PM
Be gentle.

Strikta
11-10-2013, 12:33 PM
PancakeBrah

Witty
11-10-2013, 12:42 PM
I would like to make one correction.

I write all the time, constantly...any free time I have is spent writing, be it in my head or on paper. I just rarely post them here because lately I haven't felt they were the kinda things I wanna be posting, they haven't been to a topic or about anything really...just ramblings because that's how my head feels right now.

Writing is what I do, some would say it is all I do...it is just how my mind is wired.

dull boy
11-10-2013, 12:57 PM
^ I've been writing that way for years. I post them anyway. It makes me feel kind of pretentious. I commend you for not posting them.

Wise Wiggles
11-10-2013, 01:43 PM
If pancake would just start writing about MILK and that sort of business again, every thing would make sense in life!!!!

CopyPat
11-10-2013, 02:02 PM
lol milk was the sickest, that was when cakes really came into his own.


alright though man, let me hear it...

Neighbor
11-10-2013, 02:10 PM
Do me, do me

BWHAHA
11-10-2013, 02:44 PM
lol @ dull boy always commending somebody.

detour
11-10-2013, 11:48 PM
shoot

why not...

NYCSPITZ
11-10-2013, 11:50 PM
:/

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