this is the dopest bar ever on netcees.

[Joe Metts]

Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts
Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts


Flows perfect. Dope content. All around genius.

[Wise Wiggles]

Sick wordplay.

[namix]

nice inners

the syllable count is off a bit, but my only real constructive criticism is that i would have used your setup to allude to the punch rather than giving it away out of the gate. It would have really resonated with me if you revised it to be something more like:

Frank Metts Frank Metts Frank Metts Frank Metts Frank Metts
Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts Joe Metts

^^ that keeps the freshness of the concept, but throws the reader for a bit of an unexpected loop from the setup to punch, you know?

nevertheless, agreed that it was a dope bar... good to see a fresh take on an old school concept!

[Neighbor]

Joe Metts needs a Bowflex for those breasts

[Witty]

Neighbors chick would get it with foreign objects, razors, sticks
I'd lick her anus quick...ughh, tastes of dick.

Sorry.

I am ashamed of myself.

[Split]

WE DIDDLED THE LITTLE MIDGET IN LITTLE ITALY FIDDLE DEE RIDDLE DEE LITERALLY RIBS ON A LINGUINI METAL TREE

[Sharp]

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[Ghost1]

I WISH A NIGGA WOOD

CABINET
MAGNET
BASKET
LASPIT
HASMICK

[Rawn MD]

^^faggot