Sharp Nine vs. Jah Homie {Sharp Nine wins}

[Sn00p]

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Round 1 Rules

Due Dates:
Verses are due Wednesday,
February 20th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
Voting ends Saturday 11:59 PM PST.
(Battles that lack votes may close later.)
(One sided battles may get closed early.)
(Extensions can be no longer than 36 hours
and have to be granted by your opponent.)

Line Limit:
Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
(The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both.)

Voting:
Must vote on 5 battles and post your links.
Post the links in the thread titled "Round 1 Voting Links".
You will be punished if you don't post all 5 voting links.
You will not like the punishment, so just vote so you
don't have to cry later.

General Rules:
1st person can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
MUST match the 1st person's line amount.

Sharp Nine Jah Homie

[Sharp]

Alright bud

10 lines cool?

[Jah Homie]

Just got into this. 10 lines works.
Can I get a 24 hour extension? 10 isn't a lot, and usually it doesn't take too long to write, but I want to spit these lines refined.

[Sharp]

Extension's cool

[Sharp]

Jah Homie


Jah's yt channel (found in his sig on otbva)
http://www.youtube.com/user/DramaticalLimited

Your youtube's shit, end of discussion
People only think Jahvid Best after multiple concussions
you fuckin vote for 2triple0? I'll lay you flat, queer
only a fan of 2000 since your bars are straight from that year
That Rasta shit make Homie think he has okay lines
But fact is only people that praise Jah stoned out they mind
Drop the king act, dont need a reign of your shit
I'll have Jah rule crushed so fast fifty calls me up for tips
we heard Jah's an alias, but I doubt the hoe's worth it
The only Gamble I see here is doing text with those verses

[Jah Homie]

Drop:
I’m naturally sharp so you’ll never see homie fire off a nine
I’d rather break yo wrist and knock your lights out til’ you flatline
I put sharp at the end of my fists to slice up the punchline
then filet this herb neatly so I eat well at lunchtime
I'll pluck a sharp chord when I tune him on the inside
hang him from a line so he can sharpen up his dull mind
I'll break this disrespectful bitch by rippin' out his weak spine
this gamble’ll put him under six feet inside some cheap pine
he’ll need four score and twenty years to remember these rhymes
after I repackage his flaky white lies into potent dope lines

[Flow]

Your youtube's shit, end of discussion
People only think Jahvid Best after multiple concussions
lol
you fuckin vote for 2triple0? I'll lay you flat, queer
only a fan of 2000 since your bars are straight from that year
ok
That Rasta shit make Homie think he has okay lines
But fact is only people that praise Jah stoned out they mind
lol nice
Drop the king act, dont need a reign of your shit
I'll have Jah rule crushed so fast fifty calls me up for tips
lol nice
we heard Jah's an alias, but I doubt the hoe's worth it
The only Gamble I see here is doing text with those verses
nice close

VS

I’m naturally sharp so you’ll never see homie fire off a nine
I’d rather break yo wrist and knock your lights out til’ you flatline
nice build up - but no to the punch
I put sharp at the end of my fists to slice up the punchline
then filet this herb neatly so I eat well at lunchtime
no
I'll pluck a sharp chord when I tune him on the inside
hang him from a line so he can sharpen up his dull mind
no
I'll break this disrespectful bitch by rippin' out his weak spine
this gamble’ll put him under six feet inside some cheap pine
no
he’ll need four score and twenty years to remember these rhymes
after I repackage his flaky white lies into potent dope lines
psht

No offence Jah but I didn't feel any of that. Where as Sharps was really on point and had some really good lol's.

Vote Sharp

[Malachi]

Your youtube's shit, end of discussion
People only think Jahvid Best after multiple concussions
cool
you fuckin vote for 2triple0? I'll lay you flat, queer
only a fan of 2000 since your bars are straight from that year
lol
That Rasta shit make Homie think he has okay lines
But fact is only people that praise Jah stoned out they mind
this was cool kinda think it could be better but still nice
Drop the king act, dont need a reign of your shit
I'll have Jah rule crushed so fast fifty calls me up for tips
hah great
we heard Jah's an alias, but I doubt the hoe's worth it
The only Gamble I see here is doing text with those verses
dope closer

vs

I’m naturally sharp so you’ll never see homie fire off a nine
I’d rather break yo wrist and knock your lights out til’ you flatline
nah
I put sharp at the end of my fists to slice up the punchline
then filet this herb neatly so I eat well at lunchtime
lol just no
I'll pluck a sharp chord when I tune him on the inside
hang him from a line so he can sharpen up his dull mind
ok i guess
I'll break this disrespectful bitch by rippin' out his weak spine
this gamble’ll put him under six feet inside some cheap pine
nah
he’ll need four score and twenty years to remember these rhymes
after I repackage his flaky white lies into potent dope lines
ok

V/ Sharp 9

Lol he had a nice solid verse. Good nameplays.
Jah was no match for the Sharp

[Swerve]

Sharp - I actually enjoyed a good deal of your verse, but I'm assuming enough Jah lines been done. Jahvid Best was really nice regardless. Gamble line was also alright. I kinda like that you throw back the old school style of really short lines but to improve you may have to actually extend them a bit to fit some bigger concepts and have time to develop your ideas more.


Jah - No punches at all, lack of creativity. You were more or less just talking shit. You need to get at your tutor to get some pointers because while I'm sure you have the potential to be doing better, you're just not right now. Throw some wordplay, nameplay, similes...metaphores anything in there to get a rise out of the reader. I got Sharp here pretty easily because of it.


Vote - Sharp Nine

[Camp Bell]

sorry for the lack of breakdown but....

sharp bodied with the jahvid best line, jah was waaay to basic
nothing from him hit IMO...keep working fam

vote:sharp