Devangel

[Scripter]

If I could just put my rhymes
on the paper
and pull out my mind
the good times
instead of all the crimes
and wicked capers
an hide the evil eyes
from my neighbors
there might be a way
to subside with these angels angles
even demons
aren't flame proof
they're one in the same
who you playing
God don't reign men
things just haven't been
the same
since being placed
in this place
to save an gain wings
an remain his right hand
like the holy ghost riding
to save the soul of Satan

[big baby]

This is intereTing as well. I'm going to post an interesting piece as well.

[PancakeBrah]

"an hide the evil eyes
from my neighbors "

That was solid.

Obviously needs to be fleshed out, not even in terms of line length but in purpose and depth. Angel angles? Piece seems relatively troll-ish. This can't be judged as a 'poem' even though it's structured like how someone thinks a poem should be structured. It's neither here no there.

[Scripter]

I appreciate the feed
I do like an abstract style of writing from time to time.
I like to explore different angles
It's all merely to make people think.