Mac vs. bleak {bleak wins}

[Sn00p]

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Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday,
February 28th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
Voting ends Sunday 11:59 PM PST.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions can be no longer than 36 hours
and have to be granted by your opponent.



Line Limit:

Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both.



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Recycling = DQ.
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means you will disqualified.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
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must match the 1st person's line amount.




Mac bleak

[Mac]

yo

[bleak]

10 lines of Mac nameplays.

check.

[Mac]

bleak i need an ext..
i suppose you need one too?

[bleak]

ya

[Mac]

bleak

you're useless, weak, faggot. what do you think?
bleak has monster energy.. only when he takes alot of that drink
you're not pro, nigga, who do you speaking for
you'll never step in the game, stick to buying them at the App Store
apart from punches, there's nothing you can get
i know rap is art.. but yours looks like someone took a brush and splattered on it
bleak has no life outside from the internet, he'll never have a single thing
prolly bleak will have wife & sons.. then nothing after he stops playing The Sims
you can't drop the XBOX controller. gamer: talking scientifically
things are always Easy for bleak, since he's used to change difficulty

[bleak]

I'm an outbreak, a plague. Spreadin and you're suited to die, bitch.
If Macbooks a battle against me, I'll prove he's not immune to a virus.
On RIA, I read your verses. The last half are trash, you shout the wrong lines.
The way you ran out of steam, it broke the clocks at the scouting combine.
This beach bum would get smacked on the streets of hip hop.
I father flunkies and Pac Sun in a bag, without a receipt or flip flops.
My zombies pourin out the sewers. Eatn brains, and bored of what son said.
in the 10th round, Mac's ammo couldn't help against the horde of the undead
To the real Mac, you're nothing. Cause you don't land in spars.
Immaculate is at least twice the writer, and 8-10 times the man you are.

[~RustyGunZ~]

bleak has no life outside from the internet, he'll never have a single thing
prolly bleak will have wife & sons.. then nothing after he stops playing The Sims

only decent line

vs

I'm an outbreak, a plague. Spreadin and you're suited to die, bitch.
If Macbooks a battle against me, I'll prove he's not immune to a virus.
To the real Mac, you're nothing. Cause you don't land in spars.
Immaculate is at least twice the writer, and 8-10 times the man you are.

mac10 line was obviously going to be lame no matter how you put it, pac sun line didnt do it for me


v/bleak

[Vinzr]

nothing

vs

I'm an outbreak, a plague. Spreadin and you're suited to die, bitch.
If Macbooks a battle against me, I'll prove he's not immune to a virus.

I thought bleak came with enough to seal him the victory here, had a few ok name plays and really i thought he outshined Mac here. Mac didnt really have much, his attempts were meh and needed fresher concepts.

v/ bleak

[Dominate]

Mac - your verse was kind of creative which is good, but most lines lacked something to make them memorable, such as a harsh punch or a clever wordplay. The wife and kids line was almost for the punch. I'm guessing you two know each other and he's a gamer - if so then it's good how you came personal as well. Try to rhyme more than one syllable whenever you can (without killing the wording), because it makes the reader catch the rhythm better and makes the verse come off more swagged out. Keep at it.

Bleak - opener and closer were both cool. Tbh I didn't get the references in all the bars inbetween. But it doesn't matter, you got it off the other 2 bars.


v/ Bleak

[RPK]

bleak has no life outside from the internet, he'll never have a single thing
prolly bleak will have wife & sons.. then nothing after he stops playing The Sims

vs

I'm an outbreak, a plague. Spreadin and you're suited to die, bitch.
If Macbooks a battle against me, I'll prove he's not immune to a virus.
To the real Mac, you're nothing. Cause you don't land in spars.
Immaculate is at least twice the writer, and 8-10 times the man you are.

Mac, you've really elevated since I last read your verses. I think if you work on your wording a little more, you'll get it. I think bleak took this with one more quotable, and his nonquotes were stronger as well.
V/Bleak

[Hollywood]

Sims

vs.

Macbooks

pretty close honestly, but not a great battle. Sims line was probably my fav but Bleak had more decent attempts w/ nonquotes

V/Bleak

[El Muffin]

bleak has no life outside from the internet, he'll never have a single thing
prolly bleak will have wife & sons.. then nothing after he stops playing The Sims

vs

I'm an outbreak, a plague. Spreadin and you're suited to die, bitch.
If Macbooks a battle against me, I'll prove he's not immune to a virus.


and closer

macs wording needs some brushing up upon..concepts were ok just wordings was odd

bleak took it

v/bleak

sorry im in rush mode with the links