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big baby
12-31-2013, 01:21 AM
Ground is flickering. Dust. I'm Nicolaus the physicist, conducting experiments. Now down is withering up. I'm sick. Like a crowd with syphilis. In the smallest housing predicaments. I study so much my mouse blistering. I browse more history than DOW JONES. Listen honey, see where tippin' that cow goes. Twist a spears tip end. I'm coughing up, a imported beer liquid. Sorta queer when I'm vodka drunk. Call the cops. Cops are called. I'll cop a feel on her jugs til she tells me I have to right to remain science. Then shoot a tri-laser away and degrade eyelids. I'm a true raper. The two-faced two-timing strange tyrant. Who's fascinated by when wiper of blades make triangles. On windshields. I'm totally naked in negative wind chill. MY factions wittier. I'm so belligerent. I'd eat a ***tus, and use the pricks to become carnivorous. Half my linear thought is about a thousand times more sinister than the most wickedest Saw flick. My deliverance is ancient. Lift a leg up, I'm paging ground control to major tom. Setting off a station bomb, in the Caymans, on an agent bond/Jason saw/Satan/God pagan cross. It's contagious, cough. Caucasian, dark, haired abrasive tall guy with a persuasive nod. Held a Jamaican broad hostage until the cops gave applause. I'm crazy. I'm the opposite of insane islam. I say salam, until someone pays rewards, and gets me an escape Accord faster than McLaren's top speed. Hey, a Nazi.


lol. I spit flow epithets. I’ve evidenced a cycle so menstrual, the subject of my sentences get period blood on the predicates. Blitz clone. Resident evil. My arrogance is ten frames above your shit slow hesitance. The way my mouth shapes sound waves during prose. You would think the ground shakes when I flow. Abhorrent storm witch, lit a match and swallowed it whole. See, My conduits wholly. I’m desperate woman when texting, fucking bananas. Your raps are bologna, going ham on a whole piece. The american hero, antecedent. Zero. My connections like electrical circuit. Integrated measures of current. You couldn't engineer my immeasurable torrent. I’m three spell check edits certain of that. Going third-person with personable action, turning you tender, purring felines vertebrae worthless. It’s vapid. The flexible serpent, with a warrant out for his arrest. Hissing venom to irregular when it lands you turn into rabbits. And that was a magic trick for the occurrence that happened

Certain CopyPat Fig Jr.

Certain
12-31-2013, 01:25 AM
@Curtain

Figgly Wiggly
12-31-2013, 01:37 AM
I inspired this

CopyPat
12-31-2013, 01:57 AM
what makes this even more impressive is that he wrote each paragraph in well under 10 minutes each... amazing

e11even
12-31-2013, 02:04 AM
btw...



...they all support apples.


legendary verse. just legendary.

PancakeBrah
12-31-2013, 10:10 AM
The hostage til the cops applause line was awesome. The major tom scheme was also. At work so I only skimmed but this was great. Might give better feed later.

Wise Wiggles
12-31-2013, 10:51 AM
Uh mays eeen

Just Write
12-31-2013, 09:32 PM
Setting off a station bomb, in the Caymans, on an agent bond/Jason saw/Satan/God pagan cross. It's contagious, cough. Caucasian, dark, haired abrasive tall guy with a persuasive nod. Held a Jamaican broad hostage until the cops gave applause. I'm crazy. I'm the opposite of insane islam.



Aaaaaaand, curtains. Damn that was sick bro. Actually this is the first thing i read from you surprisingly, will definitely peep more though. Good shit

Scripter
01-01-2014, 12:17 PM
I agree with Just Write

this was my favorite part
"Setting off a station bomb, in the Caymans, on an agent bond/Jason saw/Satan/God pagan cross. It's contagious, cough. Caucasian, dark, haired abrasive tall guy with a persuasive nod. Held a Jamaican broad hostage until the cops gave applause. I'm crazy. I'm the opposite of insane islam.

Wow this was a amaz za zing very artistic. I can understand that religion blinds so many from the truth and even twists what's right at times. I like how you brought attention to this.

big baby
01-02-2014, 03:10 PM
UP UP

Certain
01-02-2014, 04:15 PM
My favorite part was, "I'm three spell check edits certain of that."

big baby
01-02-2014, 04:26 PM
My favorite part was, "I'm three spell check edits certain of that."

You know, I mean, don't mean to test or insult your intelligence. That was about you, right?

jdeek
01-02-2014, 04:28 PM
Smh....ridiculous. can't say anything you don't already know about this shit. bravo

dull boy
01-02-2014, 05:38 PM
Reminds me of that one thing I wrote that one time.

Certain
01-02-2014, 06:19 PM
You know, I mean, don't mean to test or insult your intelligence. That was about you, right?

Why are you writing about me? Am I your muse?

big baby
01-02-2014, 06:26 PM
Why are you writing about me? Am I your muse?

You were there when I wrote it.

dead man
01-02-2014, 06:32 PM
i wrote my last OM (very) loosely based on a comment certain left me.

certain it appears you are NCs muse.

oh and this was cool but you have obviously written better bwaahahaha.

Figgly Wiggly
01-02-2014, 06:50 PM
YA IT WAS AIIIGHT

big baby
01-02-2014, 07:02 PM
YA IT WAS AIIIGHT

why do you hate me all I do is support you and this is what I get you're a shit a plague and a disease

big baby
01-02-2014, 07:02 PM
i wrote my last OM (very) loosely based on a comment certain left me.

certain it appears you are NCs muse.

oh and this was cool but you have obviously written better bwaahahaha.

i'm glad we're commenting on each others threads, slowly, but surely. thanks.

NYCSPITZ
01-02-2014, 07:43 PM
big babes + cake will mate soon

NYCSPITZ
01-02-2014, 07:44 PM
got the flow of a runescape general...

NYCSPITZ
01-02-2014, 08:24 PM
let me see my new sig real quick

Ghost1
01-02-2014, 09:07 PM
Wtf time machine did i just click on in ur sig? Lol wow.

An this piece.was.like....the same as ur.other.ones?

Its cool tho. Neat schemes.

NYCSPITZ
01-02-2014, 09:15 PM
lmfaooo this nigga bedroom like africa yo

bags thanks b

big baby
01-02-2014, 09:18 PM
my OMs are the only threads where people get together and chat other than what I posted.

Certain
01-02-2014, 09:20 PM
I'll do a very detailed breakdown of this exemplary verse if you'd prefer.

big baby
01-02-2014, 09:22 PM
I'll do a very detailed breakdown of this exemplary verse if you'd prefer.

i'd actually love that, certain.

Certain
01-03-2014, 05:32 AM
Yo, yo yo mammas so fat. crowd: "HOW FAT IS SHE!!!!!!!!" SHES SO FAT SHE BOYCOTTED AN ITUNES APP CAUSE IT SUPPORTS APPLES

This joke was funny, and I had never heard it before. Your mom is so fat she bought enough iTunes applications to bake an Apple pie.

Ground is flickering. Dust. I'm Nicolaus the physicist, conducting experiments. Now down is withering up. I'm sick. Like a crowd with syphilis. In the smallest housing predicaments. I study so much my mouse blistering. I browse more history than DOW JONES.

It's very difficult to start a verse without a beginning, and I think this section was a bit below what came after it. I wondered if "Nicolaus the physicist" might have connected with the ground turning to dust, but I couldn't draw any linear connections.

Listen honey, see where tippin' that cow goes. Twist a spears tip end. I'm coughing up, a sorta queer linen. Vodka drunk. Call the cops. Cops are called. I'll cop a feel on her jugs til she tells me I have to right to remain science. Then shoot a tri-laser away and degrade eyelids. I'm a true raper. The two-faced two-timing strange tyrant. Who's fascinated by when wiper of blades make triangles. On windshields. I'm totally naked in negative wind chill.

I liked this. It was very sexually charged, like you. The juxtaposition of the short sentences with the long one is very much you in your element. "I'm a true raper" worked because of the raper/rapper wordplay, even if the word is "rapist."

MY factions wittier. I'm so belligerent. I'd eat a ***tus, and use the pricks to become carnivorous.

It's evolution! This is a great line, very clever. Also, my local taco place serves a ***tus taco. I haven't tried it yet but plan to soon. Supposedly, it's good.

Half my linear thought is about a thousand times more sinister than the most wickedest Saw flick. My deliverance is ancient. Lift a leg up, I'm paging ground control to major tom. Setting off a station bomb, in the Caymans, on an agent bond/Jason saw/Satan/God pagan cross. It's contagious, cough. Caucasian, dark, haired abrasive tall guy with a persuasive nod. Held a Jamaican broad hostage until the cops gave applause. I'm crazy. I'm the opposite of insane islam. I say salam, until someone pays rewards, and gets me an escape Accord faster than McLaren's top speed. Hey, a Nazi.

This section was ineffable. This is why people like your writing. The rhymes were absurd, the connections were loose but fluid and the humor was strong. I wanted it to continue off "Hey, a Nazi," but for the purposes of a cypher, it made sense to not kill all the rhyming options.

lol.

Is this supposed to be pronounced el-oh-el, or is it a laugh?

I spit flow epithets. I’ve evidenced a cycle so menstrual, the subject of my sentences get period blood on the predicates.

This line didn't make much sense but sounded cool.

Blitz clone. Resident evil. My arrogance is ten frames above your shit slow hesitance. The way my mouth shapes sound waves during prose. You would think the ground shakes when I flow. Abhorrent storm witch, lit a match and swallowed it whole. See, My conduits wholly.

This was a very good bragadocio section. It reminded me of something Apathy might use.

I’m desperate woman when texting, fucking bananas. Your raps are bologna, going ham on a whole piece. The american hero, antecedent. Zero.

Was hero meant to be a double-entendre, also meaning sandwich? I liked this. All those things in this are about sandwiches, and I like sandwiches.

My connections like electrical circuit. Integrated measures of current. You couldn't engineer my immeasurable torrent. I’m three spell check edits certain of that.

This was a very fluid segment, and you stuck to one theme. And you mentioned me, so I liked that.

Going third-person with personable action, turning you tender, purring felines vertebrae worthless. It’s vapid. The flexible serpent, with a warrant out for his arrest. Hissing venom to irregular when it lands you turn into rabbits. And that was a magic trick for the occurrence that happened

I'm not sure what "Hissing venom to irregular" means, but I liked the magic trick part of this. There were a lot of good sounds in this, but it never felt like the conclusion of a verse. Of course, that's part of the same issue that left the beginning not working, because these types of verses really can't come to a natural beginning or end. But even the lack of a period led me to believe there was more to be said, and given that this was from a cypher, there was more to be said.

Still, this was very fun to read.

Fig
01-03-2014, 05:35 AM
my OMs are the only threads where people get together and chat other than what I posted.

It's because you're handsome, if only you could see that baby
If only

Fig
01-03-2014, 05:11 PM
I'm sober as a gopher baby

I like verse

big baby
06-04-2014, 06:43 PM
up

Camp Bell
06-05-2014, 01:29 PM
yall swear yall want me back....shit was dope. salute!