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Wise Wiggles
03-10-2013, 01:32 AM
this is for you lone rangers, that hate allegiance
every django has his day- damn near taste the freedom
seen it all before, just couldn't frame the sequence
seen the sun set, just couldn't chase the pheonix
walk in the clouds, a grape for squeezing
it's cancer cartons, kush & beer
rafter carvings- brooks was here
fresh scars be scaring the women
something's gotta work cuz therapy didn't
a bear with these writtens of terrible visions
you think God really cares if we sinning ?
melt with me- hold the pillow, I'm Jeremy piven
hell? I see your raise, now deal the turn
i got no poker face.. no real concern
well tailored self immolation- I don't feel the burn
just gather up the ashes and seal the urn
throw me in a gust, cliffside, right near a sea
watch me fly away & disappear like bees
just an empty tin man, no gears to squeak
most snakes end up sleeping w/the eels or worms
the hood's Lector. Eat your cheek for good measure
oh look, pepper! now the flesh'll cook better
rainy days ain't so bad, you need wet to grow
you lennon's need to let it be & let it go
no one's perfect- we all human from head to toe
time stops, toasting w/my pops like depp in blow

Fig
03-10-2013, 01:48 AM
this is for you lone rangers, that hate allegiance
every django has his day- damn near taste the freedom
seen it all before, just couldn't frame the sequence
seen the sun set, just couldn't chase the pheonix

that was a tight intro. I liked the piece alot, sometimes the scheme threw me off guard though, like here:

walk in the clouds, a grape for squeezing
it's cancer cartons, kush & beer
rafter carvings- brooks was here
fresh scars be scaring the women

made it a bit awkward to read, but other than this bit, it read perfectly fine. good post.

Frank
03-10-2013, 03:06 AM
Hahaha. Lively rhyme - almost revived the forum single handidly

it's cancer cartons, kush & beer
rafter carvings- brooks was here

don't go awol join AOWL

-frank was here-

Split
03-11-2013, 02:15 PM
rainy days ain't so bad, you need wet to grow
you lennon's need to let it be & let it go
no one's perfect- we all human from head to toe
time stops, toasting w/my pops like depp in blow

Word. Go feed someone asshole.

Dove Dozer
03-11-2013, 05:18 PM
this was dope. it actually made me delay posting my own shit.

damn this flowed so fluid