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dull boy
01-31-2014, 04:00 PM
This nothingness I find is crushing. Ticks of time
rushing swiftly by ’til nothing sent survives.
Dusk and dimming light cover strips of bright
sunny blips of life with numbing tents of night.
Fronts and ends collide. Death; It seems so close,
I've been half asleep for weeks and my reflection sees a ghost.
Take breaths and breathe, but know I’ve left so leave a note.
I’m already dead. My flesh will grieve my soul.
Take steps and seem to float through life as quite unphased,
but it's not that I don’t hurt, I’m not alive to mind the pain.
I try and hide my grave and signs that I’ve decayed,
outline your eyes and trace my sigh a smiley face,
but find your smiles are fake and the dirt you’re in has buried
you beneath a tombstone. The earth’s a cemetery.
The words your lips are wearing are carried, etched and cast
as the last you’ll ever speak. Prepare your epitaphs.
The only purpose in life is the purpose to die.
Everything inbetween is worthless when time's
furnace has died. You’re history. The new
won’t remember me and you. We’re a memory, and who
living gives a hoot 'bout those a century removed?
No one. Know what? This misery is cute.
Epiphanies of doom. No afterlife’s are left.
Everything you do is just passing time for death.

Wise Wiggles
01-31-2014, 04:08 PM
it's hard to stay mad when there's so much beauty in the world. Sometimes I feel like I'm seeing it all at once and it's too much. My heart fills up like a balloon that's about to burst. And then I remember to relax, and not try to hold on to it. And then it flows through me like rain. And I can't feel anything but gratitude for every single moment of my stupid little life. You have no idea what I'm talking about, I'm sure. Don't worry, you will someday.

Cheer up bud. This was the sickest thing I've read in a while

Certain
01-31-2014, 04:25 PM
This was mostly tried (not trite) in its bleakness, but the cadence and rhymes were excellent, and there was this one really great section:

I try and hide my grave and signs that I’ve decayed,
outline your eyes and trace my sigh a smiley face,
but find your smiles are fake and the dirt you’re in has buried
you beneath a tombstone. The earth’s a cemetery.
The words your lips are wearing are carried, etched and cast
as the last you’ll ever speak. Prepare your epitaphs.

Clayray
01-31-2014, 05:08 PM
This nothingness I find is crushing. Ticks of time
rushing swiftly by ’til nothing sent survives.
Dusk and dimming light cover strips of bright
sunny blips of life with numbing tents of night.
Fronts and ends collide.

^^ Fav part for me, the flow was smooth throughout but I liked the beginning, really strong start.

The rest was nothing short of awesome, sorry for the lack of a better word but it seems a better suited one slips my mind.

the message it conveys is too true. especially this part..

The only purpose in life is the purpose to die.
Everything inbetween is worthless when time's
furnace has died. You’re history. The new
won’t remember me and you. We’re a memory, and who
living gives a hoot 'bout those a century removed?
No one.

it's a bit bleak as well as the whole thing. seems to stem from some dark thoughts IMO.

but good piece man, really enjoyed it.

Frank
01-31-2014, 07:03 PM
Lighten up

Bright sunny blips are ahead of you

dull boy
11-04-2017, 02:16 PM
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Geno
11-09-2017, 03:27 AM
I loved this.
Ive been kicking arouns the idea that im possibly not real anymore. Somehow. Somewhere a long the lines. Ive leapt decades into maturity and left an older more wreckless geno behind. Amni even alive? Or did i die when i od'd years ago?idk. Did i wake up into the world of life when i rose in the icu in that philly hospital after taking the worst beating i ever took with my head the size of a basketball.. Or did i never make it out of there alive?idk. I honestly dont remember. And since then ive felt this never ending feeling of punishment that only sinks in when i feel im starting to achieve somethinf but then something i love dissapeara for some reason.

Its like a smack in the face, for past sins and mistakes.
Is this some form of hell, im trapped in someplace?

I wish i knew. This piece took me even deeper into these ideas. Smh. I just dont know anymore. Everything seems so surreal nowadays

PancakeBrah
11-09-2017, 02:37 PM
Woah geno you're real calm down man.

Anyways, really enjoyable writing in this one, guys.

Geno
11-09-2017, 05:40 PM
Im really glad to see you pancake. I hope your right. I cant be certain

big baby
11-09-2017, 09:21 PM
dont kill self geen...






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