Rayge vs. Pimp Daddy Payne {Rayge wins}

[Sn00p]

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Due Dates:

Verses are due Friday,
March 29th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
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Rayge Pimp Daddy Payne

[Maximus]

Ok, 10

[bleak]

Ray Charles punches for 10 lines.

chuh

[~RustyGunZ~]

Rayge Pimp Daddy Payne

verses are due tonight

[Maximus]

.
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forget energy drinks, i'll rip out ur guts cos u aint built for this war
so we wont see a Pimp Juice... just da one from his pancreas spilled on da floor
u beat 8. But i'll put u on a gurney once i break ur limbs & shoulders
in votes u were overSplit.. & im leaving u stretched like gymnasts in dat posture
if u make audio tracks no one will bump it, each verse u write is ancient
so when it comes to joints we wont feel Payne's like cured arthritis patients
hiphop aint dead, there are still dope emcees who attack & flow tight
cos RapIsAlive with the ArtOfBattling... u're just getting thrashed in both sites
claiming u're a vet in rap but we can see you lack the musical gift
so dont gas urself cos u're not a proPayne... i'll just roast u in a room full of it

[bleak]

U was food in the champ match..literally on the menu fa Hush
U ain't get that diss trophy..but u still got ur muscular one, so ur special to us

da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease

Flexin my quads. This fraud'll get wrecked. They say ya nice but you should quit tho
Ya thought that muscle shit's a hot concept, but Trill's in the background like- "Do you even lift, bro?"
Maximus, your account sits on minimum cause you're lacking the thought, b.
Put ya grip up.The only time yall will see Pay Rays is when I put another stack on ya body.
So you're RIA's detective. Caught Yoda n Dope. But shiiiieeettt, ya prolly bitin too.
I shoulda done the same, fam. it takes me green Dope for the motivation to write for you.
Ya girl's got a trailer trunk. Before I leave, she'll be bashed and done.
She's slobbin on my semi. at the same time that she wishes you'd be smashed by one.
You felt queasy when you saw that you had me, cause ya lines barely matter.
He couldn't stomach the gore. It's funny cause he'll end up in mine in this battle.

[bleak]

upping so you know I posted

[Cashius]

Both sites

Vs.

Almost quoted the semi line

A lot of average concepts here. Nothing really bad but nothing that stood out too much. Rayge takes it with a stronger quote.

Rayge.

[Lotto Smirk]

hiphop aint dead, there are still dope emcees who attack & flow tight
cos RapIsAlive with the ArtOfBattling... u're just getting thrashed in both sites
claiming u're a vet in rap but we can see you lack the musical gift
so dont gas urself cos u're not a proPayne... i'll just roast u in a room full of it

vs

Ya girl's got a trailer trunk. Before I leave, she'll be bashed and done.
She's slobbin on my semi. at the same time that she wishes you'd be smashed by one.

Vote- rayge just had less misses and overall harder hitting concepts

[namix]

Rayge's nameplays were executed better (joints and pro payne), partial nameplays need to be done really really well to be impressive imo (in the case of Payne's "Pay Ray's", the concept was aiight if his name was Ray, but it seems this generation does this name-break-up 'ish all the time, its cool at times, just needs to be a real non-contrived derivative of their actual name imo).

the both sites line and semis line were both solid enough non-nameplay lines, but I thought Rayge was a bit more crisp delivery-wise overall

v-rayge

[RPK]

hiphop aint dead, there are still dope emcees who attack & flow tight
cos RapIsAlive with the ArtOfBattling... u're just getting thrashed in both sites
claiming u're a vet in rap but we can see you lack the musical gift
so dont gas urself cos u're not a proPayne... i'll just roast u in a room full of it

Vs.

Ya girl's got a trailer trunk. Before I leave, she'll be bashed and done.
She's slobbin on my semi. at the same time that she wishes you'd be smashed by one.

Rayge took it with one more quotable. Also thought his non quotes were better.
V/Rayge

[Sn00p]

hiphop aint dead, there are still dope emcees who attack & flow tight
cos RapIsAlive with the ArtOfBattling... u're just getting thrashed in both sites
claiming u're a vet in rap but we can see you lack the musical gift
so dont gas urself cos u're not a proPayne... i'll just roast u in a room full of it

other three weren't bad either. no misses here imo.

vs.

Flexin my quads. This fraud'll get wrecked. They say ya nice but you should quit tho
Ya thought that muscle shit's a hot concept, but Trill's in the background like- "Do you even lift, bro?"
^this coulda been good, but it was too wordy. like the wording wasn't bad, but it woulda been harder with less words.
Maximus, your account sits on minimum cause you're lacking the thought, b.
Put ya grip up.The only time yall will see Pay Rays is when I put another stack on ya body.
^decent
So you're RIA's detective. Caught Yoda n Dope. But shiiiieeettt, ya prolly bitin too.
I shoulda done the same, fam. it takes me green Dope for the motivation to write for you.
^this concept was kinda lazy and i think you know that
Ya girl's got a trailer trunk. Before I leave, she'll be bashed and done.
She's slobbin on my semi. at the same time that she wishes you'd be smashed by one.
^not bad
You felt queasy when you saw that you had me, cause ya lines barely matter.
He couldn't stomach the gore. It's funny cause he'll end up in mine in this battle.
^again, this felt lazy and you probably know that yourself.

yeah, rayge was consistently hitting and bleak was getting a bit lazy with the concepts. this wasn't a blowout at all, but ray wins convincingly imo. more hits and better unquotes. bleak coulda made his verse doper easily.
v/ray

[Wicked]

Nothing too quotable here on either side in my opinioon.
Ray: the gymnastics and arthritis bars were very simple and basic.
Payne: The only thing that came close to a punch was the semi bar which was a really forced concept.

Ray had better concepts and more attempts at punchlines.

V: Ray

[Dominate]

hiphop aint dead, there are still dope emcees who attack & flow tight
cos RapIsAlive with the ArtOfBattling... u're just getting thrashed in both sites
claiming u're a vet in rap but we can see you lack the musical gift
so dont gas urself cos u're not a proPayne... i'll just roast u in a room full of it

vs

Ya girl's got a trailer trunk. Before I leave, she'll be bashed and done.
She's slobbin on my semi. at the same time that she wishes you'd be smashed by one.


thought semi was funny as fuck actually... lotb.... but, not enough to overcome 2 quoteables vs 1.... all other lines in this battle were around the same "meh/OK/not bad" standard


v/ Rayge

[Que]

Ray- I liked the Music /propane line...I tried liking the both sites play but geeezzz...I just can't give that one to you bro. Cool concept but not executed up to par.As far as you PDK ...I lol'ed at the semi line and that was about it. Both of you wrote cool enough to roll thru both drops tho. Just wasn't anything GOATish. Again that propane line was clever...and so was the semi line . Imma prolly go with Ray.

V-Ray

[bleak]

yo close this shit good battle Rayge

[~RustyGunZ~]

u beat 8. But i'll put u on a gurney once i break ur limbs & shoulders
in votes u were overSplit.. & im leaving u stretched like gymnasts in dat posture
hiphop aint dead, there are still dope emcees who attack & flow tight
cos RapIsAlive with the ArtOfBattling... u're just getting thrashed in both sites
claiming u're a vet in rap but we can see you lack the musical gift
so dont gas urself cos u're not a proPayne... i'll just roast u in a room full of it

best verse I've seen from u. the misses were eh.

vs


Ya girl's got a trailer trunk. Before I leave, she'll be bashed and done.
She's slobbin on my semi. at the same time that she wishes you'd be smashed by one.

closer was okay i guess, the first bit of your verse was just bland. the opener was more of a forum post in disc than a bar. u got what it takes just need to polish up a bit. the quote was funny though

v/rayge