Pharaoh Among Men

[Mike Wrecka]

I am a.....
pharaoh in the midst of this metropolis,
that wants to run with the lions and the ostriches,
until im just a hostage in a sarcophagus,
and there is no oxygen left in my esophagus,
opulence, got me living preposterous,
so I bathe in the Nile among crocodile and hippopotamus,
was in denial , a higher level of consciousness,
is to be humble, while still displaying confidence,
providing shelter where I used to stomp these tents,
because commoners really survive with common sense
as my tomb is in scripted with exquisite hieroglyphics,
depicting my life on this earth, but my life is wicked,
and whats written in stone is far from finished,
sitting atop a throne has left me alone, diminished,
inside my home? , terrific, filled with the finest possessions,
inside my dome? horrific, filled with a tyrants intentions,
so unless my collection can be passed on too others,
it will sit hidden inside a pyramid until it gets discovered,
the fact is I killed my brother, in order to become a king,
and now I truly know the feeling that emptiness brings,
surrounded by things that are meaningless, what I wish I had,
was a way to go back and erase the past.............
so I could be free at last this wealth that I have amassed,
had me feeling fulfilled but that's diminishing fast,
so im going back to the basics, back to where I started,
among the people that I love, in the streets, the market,
but ive become a target, the political stipulations,
of my death would severely shake the foundation,
of this nation, so im surrounded by guards,
that have to escort me around in my own back yard,
im a pharaoh I make laws, this doesn't seem right,
cause in reality m a prisoner in my own life

[Just Write]

This was dope mike, i like how you stayed on the whole concept all the way through. The ness end rhyme for the furst ten got a bit repetitive but it really picked up after that. I could relate to a lot of this (besides killing my brother to become the king lol) but yea, nice read man. Stay up

If you dont mind peep my last piece and tell me what u think

[Brenn]

the be dining sounded like something kendrick L would spit it was multi sound and flowed on point...


and whats written in stone is far from finished,
sitting atop a throne has left me alone, diminished,
inside my home? , terrific, filled with the finest possessions,
inside my dome? horrific, filled with a tyrants intentions,

^^^^my favorite bit!

Overall a decent drop... props

[Mike Wrecka]

breathe

[Hush]

inside my home? , terrific, filled with the finest possessions,
inside my dome? horrific, filled with a tyrants intentions

Really liked that

[tyler]

Really enjoyed this piece. It was very genuine and well put together. I thought a few lines needed work toward the end but that's me getting picky because overall nothing bored me about this and you accomplished everything u needed to in this piece. It sounded good reading it, had a good meaning behind it, and was depicted very smoothly. Overall near perfect piece here bud. Keep it up. Ps the first 14 lines are so were my favorite part, made me want to keep reading and were intriguing.

[Illume]

I am a.....
pharaoh in the midst of this metropolis,
that wants to run with the lions and the ostriches,
until im just a hostage in a sarcophagus,
and there is no oxygen left in my esophagus,
opulence, got me living preposterous,
so I bathe in the Nile among crocodile and hippopotamus,
was in denial , a higher level of consciousness,
is to be humble, while still displaying confidence,
providing shelter where I used to stomp these tents,
because commoners really survive with common sense
as my tomb is in scripted with exquisite hieroglyphics,
depicting my life on this earth, but my life is wicked,
and whats written in stone is far from finished,
sitting atop a throne has left me alone, diminished,
inside my home? , terrific, filled with the finest possessions,
inside my dome? horrific, filled with a tyrants intentions,
so unless my collection can be passed on too others,
it will sit hidden inside a pyramid until it gets discovered,
the fact is I killed my brother, in order to become a king,
and now I truly know the feeling that emptiness brings,
surrounded by things that are meaningless, what I wish I had,
was a way to go back and erase the past.............
so I could be free at last this wealth that I have amassed,
had me feeling fulfilled but that's diminishing fast,
so im going back to the basics, back to where I started,
among the people that I love, in the streets, the market,
but ive become a target, the political stipulations,
of my death would severely shake the foundation,
of this nation, so im surrounded by guards,
that have to escort me around in my own back yard,
im a pharaoh I make laws, this doesn't seem right,
cause in reality m a prisoner in my own life

I thought the first half of this was a lot more complex and intricate then the last half seemed like you began to lose steam. a few great one liners and the part about the sarcophagus and the line after was genius. All in all a good piece but the start was definitely stronger than the end.