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Zombie
04-06-2013, 02:40 AM
What I've gathered, is intricate. A splatter....SO intimate.
You’re lathered. My instrument. Leaves the bronze’ blood-stained
Regards, a jab. To your impotence. Praise the Gods.
Feng Shui
Praise Allah. Gun play to the next level. Shooting daggers at militants.
I’m more of a natural stimulant. Unless the Adderalls© limitless.
& Zom's a half animal simulate. Adapting adapters along my Velociraptor-tipped ligaments
And if Gods’ the Rapture?
I'm involved. In manners with Project Manhattan. A physicist
This is all but natural. Constituent.
With a lab-coat giving an alien’ - brain surgery.
In a castle, with lit candles under a alias name. Courtesy.
The lightning blade.
Now slicing about an eighth of it's thalamus perfectly *chainsaw whirrs*
The incision so entirely mutant, my scalpel turned into a human
And with a fervent spatial range. Arranged by laser ray mercury.
Layered in a kamehameha wave circuitry. Labelled "KEEP AWAY". Urgently
With both hands soaked. In no-mans land. Negative 10,003.
With no pounds or gravity. Space suit. Not even a ghost could float.
My idea of fun is a hundred wive blowjob dessert.
Lord. I’m so gone, it’s worthless..
It works.
And let the truth be told further. I don't promote violence. I just encourage murder
You’d be puzzled by my affinity for forming synthesized super novas from dirt.
I only grapple over-the-arm RPG’s cause it very nicely shoulders the hurt.
It’s all fun and games, til’ the mummified robots emerge.
Exercising their rights to bear synchronized load guns that burst.
Comin’ by? Fuck Goodbyes. I’M LEAVING EARTH by drinking pints of liquefied Zoloft in spurts
It's systemized. Get hypnotized by the slithered slime Cobra. Coerced.
So upset with your past deeds, you can feel the mess ups?
And it’s clear as day. And the light you see is a field of spectrum's
What if zombies aren’t dead, and we’re the dead ones?

Split
04-06-2013, 02:47 AM
wow @ the synthesized cobra Zoloft line

This was slick, my friend. not too headfirst but ya got your feet wet.

I can leave youore detailed feed in the morning

Zombie
04-06-2013, 03:07 AM
I added more and fixed more, Split. Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Split
04-06-2013, 03:50 AM
I added more and fixed more, Split. Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

http://www.doctornerdlove.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/07/bwahaha.jpeg

yes yes good good

Wise Wiggles
04-06-2013, 11:28 AM
hmm

Zen
04-06-2013, 02:25 PM
This is some dope ass shit. I really don't have any complaints and can't really give any advice. Nice drop fella.

dead man
04-09-2013, 03:32 PM
You’re lathered. My instrument. Leaves the bronze’ blood-stained
Regards, a jab. To your impotence. Praise the Gods.
Feng Shui

its crazy what a close read accomplishes. did not catch this on my first skim of this a few days back.. fun

And if Gods’ the Rapture?
I'm involved. In manners with Project Manhattan. A physicist

In a castle, with lit candles under a alias name. Courtesy.
The lightning blade.
Now slicing about an eighth of it's thalamus perfectly



welcome back

CopyPat
04-11-2013, 02:38 AM
shits intense. and random. you've elevated to some next level weird type of atmosphere way up there where the rules do not apply. you're playing around with the whole idea of rhyming and flow, scheming..wordplay. everything. nobody is safe!! dat shit cray! don't have much to say to u other than that though cause it feels like u could EASILY write whatever u want to any style.. i just felt a free-nees in this.. and a not giving of any fucks. it was outta control. it was a fun adventure of reading some ridiculous shit. i enjoyed it... alot. i'm not sure i would love this typa style every time tho. but for what it was it was cool

some of the shit was over my head and took away from the overall experience cause it started out redic but then u said "kamehameha" and i was like wtf? also the negative 100003 .. other than that this was great, lol. post more i want to see what else u have

Darth Yoda
04-11-2013, 09:11 AM
liked.

Just Write
04-11-2013, 07:51 PM
yea.. i don't know where to start lol, this was definitely a favorite of what i've read today.. from content to scheme to vocab to presence.. just all around nice man. dope drop sir.