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YDK
04-17-2013, 05:04 AM
Thinkin about the situation at hand
A kid looking in the mirror yet facing a man.
Making a plan while debating demands
Weighing the outcomes of decisions that created this chance
Im just working for a future wit my fate in my hands!
Hate all around me, lovin from a distance
My heart got broke, the reciept was a misprint.
Ain't taking it back I'm amazed at the fact
That I can relax wit a blade in my back
Just blaze up a sack, its fading to black
The music dies out while I'm Layin a track.
Im playin it back I'm playing it back
But I ain't fuckin playing I'm just saying the facts!
I've done wat I can I'm a man, never done
Put my daughter on my back her loves forever #1

Zen
04-17-2013, 10:24 AM
Short little drop here but nice nonetheless. The second line here was the best line here imo. A kid looking in the mirror and facing a man. I feel like that from time to time lol. It's a story of raising a daughter and the pressures it brings which was the strong point of this piece because I could feel the emotions behind this. Nice man.

dead man
04-17-2013, 12:20 PM
Ain't taking it back I'm amazed at the fact
That I can relax wit a blade in my back

illllllll

Just Write
04-17-2013, 12:28 PM
dope piece man, feedin it cuz the title says so lmao jk.. nah hut for real i agree wih zen, second line was fire, flow was smooth as fuck. good shit brethren

YDK
04-18-2013, 01:07 AM
Lol thanks for the feed guys much appreciated

IamBenT
04-18-2013, 09:30 AM
Ain't taking it back I'm amazed at the fact
That I can relax wit a blade in my back
Just blaze up a sack, its fading to black
The music dies out while I'm Layin a track.

Nicely done, you have a great flow that would fit well with the
right kinds of beats, i suggest if you have not already done so
to begin laying dope lyrics on wax ASAP LOL on the real, its
great introspection, anyone with a kid can relate, where I find
alot of times i still feel like a kid but i gotta be responsible for that baby, ya feel?
Dope