megatron vs. Untold {Untold wins}

[~RustyGunZ~]

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Verses are due Friday,
April 26th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
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megatron Untold

[Untold]

Check

[megatron]

Ext

[Untold]

Ok. How many you wanna go?

[Untold]

10 sent to knucklehead

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Trons no leader. We don't need a chemist to say ya lackin
Cuz whoever would electron has a chemical imbalance like unstable atoms
I'm a college kid, acknowledge this. Ur a wack goon
Funny how when it's time for finals.. U couldn't pass in this league or a classroom
Ya trash dude. N ya sluts cunts deranged n soiled
The bitch is so jacked up.. Guys crawl from under her like mechanics changin oil
When I sock this hoe, he'll rock n roll. N bleed a whole pool
Y'all gon see a Megadeth show minus the long hair, mosh pit n screamin vocals
One more name play for this lame gay I wouldn't stand beside
Cuz we all know Mega dumb bitch whose relatives hate her on Family Guy

[megatron]

My bad shit got real wit my daughter last night gimme till 2est? ? If I don't have anything done by then I probably wont

[megatron]

My bad but here..


You jus a lame wack dude ya whips awful youll never have a dame to rap to
u drive a daewoo wht kinda bitches ur carpal, theyll break them bones before they wave at u
u hittin ya bitch rite? i doubt it, cuz everytime she see me i kno she bout it
She love dis pipe, she get on top and watch ya broad jump like she gettin scouted
this nigga think he swaggin, but he rocks purses n skirts i think he faggin
Its sad when ur dad has to tell u to go get abu, then hangs hiself when u bring a lad in
u ont want them problems we resolve em, We got this gangsta shit down to an 'ology'
i always got my squad w. me, and they'll buck for anything like the dollar tree
This nigga got me twisted, thinking he'll win w. Wack lines n a shit load a filler*
u trippin I'm too gifted I kill u w. Lite bars like michelob n miller

RIP

[StarFaggot]

Untold- electron was nice nameplay but punch was ok, jacked up line was coo, megadeath was aight, last bar could've been arranged differently. Ok showing

Mega - Aladdin line was lulz, carpal line too wordy but lol at drivin a daewoo.. Dollar tree was good braggo but not a diss.

Mega has lotb but Untold was a bit more consistent I've got untold by a slim mov

[Flow]

Btw peeps my feed going to be crap this week im struggling on workload but-
This was 50 50 for me. Untold had consistency mega had more enjoyable concepts.
To be honest I couldn't make my mind up an had to go on personal bias shit an I felt untolds close was way to close to my family guy line on mega so my vote going to mega.

1-1 uppin (get you both back with detailed feed next time)

[Orc]

MEGATRON HAD THE ALADDIN LINE WHICH HAD A DECENT FLIP.. THE WORDPLAY HAS BEEN DONE BEFORE BUT THE ABU EXTRA PIECE MADE IT HIT.. DOPE! CARPAL HAD A NICE SWAGGER TO IT ALSO.. UNTOLDS WHOLE VERSE COULD PROBABLY BE QUOTED THOUGH IF I WASN'T BEING TOO HARSH, VERY CONSISTENT.. I THINK MEGATRONS RUSHING TO GET A VERSE UP COST HIM THIS ONE.. UNTOLD GOT IT.. VOTE UNTOLD

[~RustyGunZ~]

Trons no leader. We don't need a chemist to say ya lackin
Cuz whoever would electron has a chemical imbalance like unstable atoms
Ya trash dude. N ya sluts cunts deranged n soiled
The bitch is so jacked up.. Guys crawl from under her like mechanics changin oil
When I sock this hoe, he'll rock n roll. N bleed a whole pool
Y'all gon see a Megadeth show minus the long hair, mosh pit n screamin vocals

opener was a cool nameplay wording could have been better, a bit of a lazy simile. finals/school is played, oil change was lulz, megadeth was cool dk if it's been used on him, solid wording though. meg line was just eh didn't like the delivery

vs

this nigga think he swaggin, but he rocks purses n skirts i think he faggin
Its sad when ur dad has to tell u to go get abu, then hangs hiself when u bring a lad in
^ that was dope n roflz

rest was lame tbh, poor concepts and sloppy wording. try to bring more lines like that one and u'll do well

v/untold

[Sharp]

Trons no leader. We don't need a chemist to say ya lackin
Cuz whoever would electron has a chemical imbalance like unstable atoms
Ya trash dude. N ya sluts cunts deranged n soiled
The bitch is so jacked up.. Guys crawl from under her like mechanics changin oil
When I sock this hoe, he'll rock n roll. N bleed a whole pool
Y'all gon see a Megadeth show minus the long hair, mosh pit n screamin vocals

Family guy's been done against him about every week, otherwise decent verse for sure


(You jus a lame wack dude ya whips awful youll never have a dame to rap to
u drive a daewoo wht kinda bitches ur carpal, theyll break them bones before they wave at u)
this nigga think he swaggin, but he rocks purses n skirts i think he faggin
Its sad when ur dad has to tell u to go get abu, then hangs hiself when u bring a lad in


Carpal was almost. Dollar tree was a dope flex line, but it was a flex line. Everything else but aladin was a miss... Untold got it for me on consistency but nice battle.

V/ Untold