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~RustyGunZ~
05-01-2013, 11:34 AM
General stuff, will edit usual shit later. Due Monday

Jay Boredom

Boredom
05-01-2013, 03:40 PM
check, 10.

Jay
05-01-2013, 06:45 PM
word

Jay
05-01-2013, 10:48 PM
this nigga wears skinny jeans and be after the whores, awful
funny how they don’t feel the Chemistry in anything that Bohr Model
ya girl ass is phat, don’t ruin the act while im tryina please her
for thinkin you Batman I’ll leave Wayne in the dark night riddled with seizures
mess with me son, one swing’ll get the job Dunn, its danger man
then have your girl handlin my balls in public quicker than that Rangers fan
this Game aint for everyone, and I hate to say this
but when I swing the Saber, you’ll get cut faster than the Game did Derwin Davis
heads leave bodies when i jab, u steppin in a crazy ring
but im Collin this faggot out to I can strangle him so everyone can hear the fat lady sing

Boredom
05-04-2013, 12:48 PM
...

i blaze that dank herb n slay nerds, when puffin i stay on that dope shit.
i'll burn a blunt then let that shotty smoke to leave jay w/ em roaches.
u'll never see this virgin w/ dimes in a club n thats nothin i'd lie bout'
if u gave a chick the d jay..that slut would've had to scratch her fuckin eyes out.
i make it rain w/ goons that live that devil life n will let that metal strike.
only time jay throws paper is when he delivers them daily on his peddle bike.
ur future is bleak and ur on par w/ that faggot so face facts dude.
the only place u see yourself in five years is w/ him in a gay bars bathroom.
and the fact the prediction was close put your head in my scope.
i'd tell u to get on ur knees, but ur already there dick in mouth beggin for votes.




gtfoh

Sharp
05-05-2013, 07:58 PM
this nigga wears skinny jeans and be after the whores, awful
funny how they don’t feel the Chemistry in anything that Bohr Model

rangers was almost, everything else was eh


u'll never see this virgin w/ dimes in a club n thats nothin i'd lie bout'
if u gave a chick the d jay..that slut would've had to scratch her fuckin eyes out.
ur future is bleak and ur on par w/ that faggot so face facts dude.
the only place u see yourself in five years is w/ him in a gay bars bathroom.

generally consistent, liked these two the most


Boredom was more consistent throughout, had the lotb with dj. Decent battle, but he got it.

V/ Boredom

Flow
05-08-2013, 12:29 PM
this nigga wears skinny jeans and be after the whores, awful
funny how they don’t feel the Chemistry in anything that Bohr Model
OK nice start
ya girl ass is phat, don’t ruin the act while im tryina please her
for thinkin you Batman I’ll leave Wayne in the dark night riddled with seizures
No - Tailing off here what the hell was that??
mess with me son, one swing’ll get the job Dunn, its danger man
then have your girl handlin my balls in public quicker than that Rangers fan
I dont know the reference so I wont comment
this Game aint for everyone, and I hate to say this
but when I swing the Saber, you’ll get cut faster than the Game did Derwin Davis
oh dear
heads leave bodies when i jab, u steppin in a crazy ring
but im Collin this faggot out to I can strangle him so everyone can hear the fat lady sing
.....

You need alot of practice dude - the league will do wonders but you should check the tutorials available - will do you wonders

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i blaze that dank herb n slay nerds, when puffin i stay on that dope shit.
i'll burn a blunt then let that shotty smoke to leave jay w/ em roaches.
ok
u'll never see this virgin w/ dimes in a club n thats nothin i'd lie bout'
if u gave a chick the d jay..that slut would've had to scratch her fuckin eyes out.
ok
i make it rain w/ goons that live that devil life n will let that metal strike.
only time jay throws paper is when he delivers them daily on his peddle bike.
didnt really feel this fam
ur future is bleak and ur on par w/ that faggot so face facts dude.
the only place u see yourself in five years is w/ him in a gay bars bathroom.
preferred the set up to the punch it self
and the fact the prediction was close put your head in my scope.
i'd tell u to get on ur knees, but ur already there dick in mouth beggin for votes.
lol



gtfoh

This was always going to be a straight win to B as soon as I read Jays verse.

Jay you need to heed my advice man an look at some of the tutorials we have here.

Vote Bore

StarFaggot
05-08-2013, 02:28 PM
Jay - lol at dont ruin the act, Derwin saber line was ok could've been reworded, everything else was a bit sub par. Your concepts were identical throughout the entire verse and the creativity didn't connect well.

Boredom - the dj line was ok but could've been reworded, the rest was an ok attempt at wit but they didn't hit.

I've got Jay winning this slightly bc I enjoyed his verse more.

Cashius
05-09-2013, 10:34 PM
Jay was ok. Bohr model was good. Ranger fan was ok. This guy could be good with some polish.

DJ was dope. Throw paper was ok.

I think Boredom got this with better multi's, cleaner wording, and stronger quotes. Not a bad battle.

Boredom.

R!canTheoryz
05-11-2013, 04:51 AM
Vote - Bore, He had the more well rounded verse here Decnt showing on both parts
But bore def had the more wittier Approach n executed Concepts I enjoyed his Dejay/ scratch Line Funny shit

Orc
05-11-2013, 07:14 AM
this nigga wears skinny jeans and be after the whores, awful
funny how they don’t feel the Chemistry in anything that Bohr Model
mess with me son, one swing’ll get the job Dunn, its danger man
then have your girl handlin my balls in public quicker than that Rangers fan
this Game aint for everyone, and I hate to say this
but when I swing the Saber, you’ll get cut faster than the Game did Derwin Davis


v

u'll never see this virgin w/ dimes in a club n thats nothin i'd lie bout'
if u gave a chick the d jay..that slut would've had to scratch her fuckin eyes out.
i make it rain w/ goons that live that devil life n will let that metal strike.
only time jay throws paper is when he delivers them daily on his peddle bike.


cool battle. both on the cusp of that next level. enjoyed jays verse a little bit moore.. a lil more outside the box w/ his concepts. wud gave the closer the nod also if it had made grammatical sense. boredome maybe od'd w/ nameplays for sucha small batt. anyway yea Jay got it imo

~RustyGunZ~
05-11-2013, 05:22 PM
this nigga wears skinny jeans and be after the whores, awful
funny how they don’t feel the Chemistry in anything that Bohr Model
mess with me son, one swing’ll get the job Dunn, its danger man
then have your girl handlin my balls in public quicker than that Rangers fan
this Game aint for everyone, and I hate to say this
but when I swing the Saber, you’ll get cut faster than the Game did Derwin Davis

closer was wack, batman line was blah. 2 good references and a cool nameplay

vs

i blaze that dank herb n slay nerds, when puffin i stay on that dope shit.
i'll burn a blunt then let that shotty smoke to leave jay w/ em roaches.
u'll never see this virgin w/ dimes in a club n thats nothin i'd lie bout'
if u gave a chick the d jay..that slut would've had to scratch her fuckin eyes out.

throw paper no. opener just barely, kind of a predictable nameplay but i'll give it to you. dj was dope. bathrooms no. closer no.

eh it was cool, jay was a lot more consistent. bore had LOTB and a lazy but decent nameplay.

v/jay

fathead
05-11-2013, 09:47 PM
Jay:The BatMan Line Was A Clever concept. The Rangers Fan Line Was Pretty Good Too. Your Flow Was Decent And The Fat Lady Sings Line Is Kinda Played, But Still funny. Overall Good Verse

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Boredom: The First Two Lines Are Pretty Funny, But Pretty predictatble. The Peddle Bike Line Was Funny And Had A Clever concept, And The Gay Bar Line Was Pretty Funny Too. Also I Feel Your Verse Had The Better Flow So...

V/boredom