Patrick vs. Vinny {Patrick wins}

[~RustyGunZ~]

General stuff, will edit usual shit later. Due Monday

Patrick

[Vinny]

cheq' 10 lines

[Vinny]

Patrick ima Swerve just to sprey this newbie
only time he hear.. PS I Love You, is his sister favorite movie
faggit stop beatin off let your arm rest, your battlin a calm vet
the only time P-A problem, is in City Wide Bomb Threats
known for hollows & techs! play ur cards right or youl fall on the deck!
cuz' if we get nervous when you Post Up, its just the Jason Collins affect
im always applauding myself for getting even cause i hate odd
cant escape god! so il put Pat on His Back, w/ out him doing a great job
Pat? for this young bastard il just grab the old revolver
only hip hop talk, if they mention Trick Daddy, cuz he dont know his father

[Swerve]

Check...I'll post up today...either before I get off work or just after work.

[Swerve]

You’re serious?

You’re not improving, no matter how much you bitch and you shout,
Vin’s still weeks away from being relevant…and that’s only cause Fast 6’ll come out.
It’s not a game when you come at me, I’ll make this fool cry out,
And have this bitch run up for kicks and get injured like the first female NFL tryout.
Your girls a slut, facts is facts dookie, there’s no way to defend it,
That bitch got an open ended pink slip that Bags can only hope to contend with.
Vinnie is a fitting name now, but your last one was just lame shit,
Cause you can’t be named Kwality and not have a single bar that displays it.
Me and your girl switching positions, got the dick scoopin guts,
When she tired of the back, bitch get it from the front, man like groupie sluts.

[Sharp]

im always applauding myself for getting even cause i hate odd
cant escape god! so il put Pat on His Back, w/ out him doing a great job

PS I love you was a cool idea but delivered poorly.


You’re not improving, no matter how much you bitch and you shout,
Vin’s still weeks away from being relevant…and that’s only cause Fast 6’ll come out.
It’s not a game when you come at me, I’ll make this fool cry out,
And have this bitch run up for kicks and get injured like the first female NFL tryout.
Your girls a slut, facts is facts dookie, there’s no way to defend it,
That bitch got an open ended pink slip that Bags can only hope to contend with.
Me and your girl switching positions, got the dick scoopin guts,
When she tired of the back, bitch get it from the front, man like groupie sluts.


Damn lol


whole verse was quotable for me, swerve had nice hits, lolz, and clean wording. He got it pretty easily.

V/ Swerve

[Flow]

Patrick ima Swerve just to sprey this newbie
only time he hear.. PS I Love You, is his sister favorite movie
Delivery was off but the concept was original - Spend more time on wording
faggit stop beatin off let your arm rest, your battlin a calm vet
the only time P-A problem, is in City Wide Bomb Threats
I get where your going with this, but poor wording again, there is no delivery or sting in these
known for hollows & techs! play ur cards right or youl fall on the deck!
cuz' if we get nervous when you Post Up, its just the Jason Collins affect
Liked the concept in here, but you seem to really lack wording and execution. Think you need to take a browse over some of the training sessions that are up and it could help you by miles
im always applauding myself for getting even cause i hate odd
cant escape god! so il put Pat on His Back, w/ out him doing a great job
this is a nice peice of wordplay, still think wording was off to some degree, but by far your best so far
Pat? for this young bastard il just grab the old revolver
only hip hop talk, if they mention Trick Daddy, cuz he dont know his fatherThis was a poor close



You’re serious?

You’re not improving, no matter how much you bitch and you shout,
Vin’s still weeks away from being relevant…and that’s only cause Fast 6’ll come out.
Nice opener
It’s not a game when you come at me, I’ll make this fool cry out,
And have this bitch run up for kicks and get injured like the first female NFL tryout.
Lol okay
Your girls a slut, facts is facts dookie, there’s no way to defend it,
That bitch got an open ended pink slip that Bags can only hope to contend with.
Really nice liked this - nice bags reference
Vinnie is a fitting name now, but your last one was just lame shit,
Cause you can’t be named Kwality and not have a single bar that displays it.
lol got some good chuckles from me on that one
Me and your girl switching positions, got the dick scoopin guts,
When she tired of the back, bitch get it from the front, man like groupie sluts.This one was missed on me


Easy vote - Pat

Vinny you need to take more time on planning out your bars, your concepts are quite good and fresh but the wording and execution is awful..Also I felt no sting other then one bar in your entire verse.

[StarFaggot]

Vinny - ps I love you was coo. Jason Collins line was chuckle worthy, pat on his back was nice

Pat - pink slip line was nice the wp is played but the bags thing is current so, , the rest was ok but no stand outs

Mvgt Vinny for having one more decent bar than Pat.

[Jay]

known for hollows & techs! play ur cards right or youl fall on the deck!
cuz' if we get nervous when you Post Up, its just the Jason Collins affect
im always applauding myself for getting even cause i hate odd
cant escape god! so il put Pat on His Back, w/ out him doing a great job

vs

You’re not improving, no matter how much you bitch and you shout,
Vin’s still weeks away from being relevant…and that’s only cause Fast 6’ll come out.
Me and your girl switching positions, got the dick scoopin guts,
When she tired of the back, bitch get it from the front, man like groupie sluts.


pretty good battle here. both a couple bars that went hard and a couple that weren't
as good imo. close one to call but based off of creativity one was more consistent.

v. patrick

[Cashius]

Jason Collins and Pat on back

Vs.

Front man, a lot of decent stuff...kwality, Vin, pink slip

Vinny had 2 quotables but I didn't like the rest of his verse at all. One letter name plays are a no no these days. Swerve had one quote but the rest of his verse was pretty good. Gotta go with him for consistency.

Pat.

[fathead]

Vinny: The Windy City Bomb Threats Line Was A Decent Concept, And So was Jason Collins. You Had A Decent Flow But Your Punches Werent As Hard hitting

Pat: Definatley Had The Better Punches And Verse Overall. The Nfl Tryout Line Was Good And The Pinkslip Line Was Perfectly Worded. Also The Kwality Line Was A Good Personal But, Pretty Predictable Though.

v/pat