KINDLY WATCH THE FUCK OUT

[Nigma]

The mysterious man enters, he’s delirious
Look! See? The veneer on his hooked teeth???
Appeared with a book, seized a lad by the hand
Like a battering ram the fangs deep and the juice leaks
Chewed out creases that lesion his cheeks leaving loose meat
The screaming consumes E and the savage advances
Then ravaged the gash till its tearing up puke green, and
Free runs the smear from the goop leaked from both ears to his shook feet
And when his delirium took speed, it mirrored the book scene
LOOK! SEE?? He’s happy as Dracula eating period pussy!

[Fig]

ew

[Nigma]

ty bro

[Frank]

Dracula eating period pussy

Dope

[Nigma]

Ty Franklin. We are friends

[david stern razor burns]

This was interesting. A little weird, obviously. Content was quite strange. There were a few parts I didn't understand though:

"Like a battering ram the fangs deep and the juice leaks"

I don't remember a battering ram having fangs, or "juice" per se. Maybe if you mean like the hydraulic fluid is the juice? And I suppose that could be what's leaking. But then it would have to be a malfunctioning battering ram, which you didn't mention.

Sorry Nigma, not trying to be an asshole purposely but that line just stood out because it seemed extremely forced. I actually thought a lot of this verse seemed forced to be honest. I've seen much better work from you, and so have we all, this was clearly just a quick drop for fun...So do what you gotta do, but I will always offer my sincerest feedback regardless. Last line about Dracula period pussy was a little off-putting coming from you. I could have pictured Wise Ways saying that rather than you.
Rhymes, flow and scheming were obviously the star of this verse. Beyond that it was a tad thin. Please see my 2 posts in open mic, I would be curious to see what you think of them. The first one was titled pneumoniacolonoscopymononucleosisississippi, it was in response to daymon blades razor waynes response to your original. Also, I am about to post a new entry. Thanks!