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C Raw
05-08-2013, 07:15 PM
"There goes anotha weekend i can't recall at all
The K2's got me dreamin & sleepin i'm noddin off
Thinknin of getttin money i'm dedicated to ball
Don't need no wishin well my misions don't fail at all
Got a goal in my mind, i'm tryna grab it.
but the money when i get it, i spend it to support a habit
i can't have it, thats not me. anyone tryna stop me
i'm poppin 3 and takin jewls but bitch i ain't no nazi.
whats not to see? don't mind me
rollin' with killas and alotta g's
pussy boys know where i be!
tell try to see and come find me."

Thats the mind of little nigga whos father figure is outta the picture
simple rhymes for the little mind, who pushes real problems aside
take the raps out the box, out of the house nigga.
i'm a free man who rhymes & expands minds, you still a house nigga!
taking pills to forget whats really wrong.
listening to old eminem songs like, "This is the bomb!"

Zen
05-08-2013, 07:26 PM
I'm glad you're droppin and I'm glad you're being active....but I've got to be a dick. Go drop feed on other OM posts. I'll give feed to this tomorow when I have more time. Stay up man.

FEED: Well you need to up your vocabulary man. That's my main complaint. Also it might be best if you tryed writing about something new instead of the same thing over and over you know what I mean? Try writing about something you never even thought about writing about before to get a spark of creativity going. That's my opinion. Keep droppin man.

C Raw
05-08-2013, 07:29 PM
Ahhhh fuck, yeah i will lol

Geno
05-08-2013, 07:39 PM
cool shit, sort of basic mechanically. Vocab is shallow -get a little deeper with it. Format is good. And like.buddha said.. drop feed, I'm posting a new rule in the forum -look for it

C Raw
05-08-2013, 07:55 PM
i went and fed about 3 pieces like 10 min ago. but thanks for the feedback.