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Bladed Thesis
04-07-2014, 07:09 PM
you see me...
blast through the window,
Bladed's mastery practically has to be tenfold
grown since the last of these minnows
saw my artform or read of my grapple mementos.
in the past, I trampled brash cats who I Rick Rolled,
after I had gone to RW's to shatter the cesspool
and that's when I went home to bask in the redzone.
a dastardly temple with a lass in my pimp hold,
the bastard half-assed pupil of the blacketh disciple
returning to the crater from whence he came, cracked black in the mental.
discovered the dark arts of a magic crescendo
in the tomb of Gandolf the Grey, within a tome teaching dragon-speech Kendo
written using with ink of battery crystals
Zerg to the core as the hatchery explodes,
you better blast or flee, kinfolk, my strategy is so
that if any of these kids reach the faggotry threshold
I'm putting him sixfeet deep and snatching his widow.
ha, the baffling bimbo...
anybody giving flattery gets no backup so if you're mad at me get blown.
takeover topicals? It can't be this simple
and if so guess that'd be my next goal:
push you off your pinnacle and tragedy unfolds as gravity gets close!
if it is that easy, guess it's back to the classic Nintendo!

and now the hurt begins...
in the game of colors, I found the perfect tint
and you're completely stable in your grounded worry, kid.
those aren't gat blasts, that's the sounds of turbulence
echoing across skyscrapers towering over crowds of herded men.
erupting thunder JUMPS and rain pounds the worlds again
as Bladed grasps his pen, HE found the words within,
hailstorm above among clouds of fervent sin.
harvest time and in the battlefields we plough the murdered men,
ratchet drawn and showered earth with lead.
and so the cowards learned the end...
the Night of the Long Knives and a Thousand Shurikens!

Geno
04-07-2014, 07:16 PM
cool shit, stay active, feed -get fed. simple mathematics

good read. 1

dead man
04-07-2014, 10:30 PM
nice to see you haven't missed a step.

you always had a very aggressive style. apparently its timeless because it fits right in with the zeitgeist of open mic even to this day. I'm assuming you wrote this recently but i really have no way to be sure.

original word choices. rhythmically sound, your writing has personality which many people actually struggle to project. the whole piece was a touch autobiographical and mainly flexing to reintroduce yourself to the culture and the community. as you may have already seen, you've made a lasting name for yourself but it will not keep you in the books for long. many people survive off their legacy while absent and make a less-than grandiose return only to be cast aside. time is strange like that.

fortunately for you, you have the gift of consistency on your side.

interested in seeing something more introspective or focused from you. maybe something less broadly focused. there were a couple lines in here i thought were weaker than the rest, such as

anybody giving flattery gets no backup so if you're mad at me get blown.

and you're completely stable in your grounded worry, kid.

and a few others not even worth mentioning..

but overall, really great to see you back in action old friend. its a refreshing feeling.

keep on it. thanks

1

King Ra.
04-08-2014, 07:35 AM
Good to see you here and participating in the league. Looking forward to seeing your work. I'd say this reads like your introduction to the site and I actually liked what you did here. Rhyming was on point, solid scheme. You really started picking up near the mid part of the first section, which I felt was the strongest part. Some cool lil references in there. I'm definitely interested in seeing what you come up with here and in the league.

Good stuff.

Wise Wiggles
04-08-2014, 08:07 AM
reminded me of a copy pat with less multies

good stuff doe

Sick
04-08-2014, 09:09 AM
Dope I remember yu


Stick around

Bladed Thesis
04-08-2014, 11:10 AM
nice to see you haven't missed a step.

you always had a very aggressive style. apparently its timeless because it fits right in with the zeitgeist of open mic even to this day. I'm assuming you wrote this recently but i really have no way to be sure.

original word choices. rhythmically sound, your writing has personality which many people actually struggle to project. the whole piece was a touch autobiographical and mainly flexing to reintroduce yourself to the culture and the community. as you may have already seen, you've made a lasting name for yourself but it will not keep you in the books for long. many people survive off their legacy while absent and make a less-than grandiose return only to be cast aside. time is strange like that.

fortunately for you, you have the gift of consistency on your side.

interested in seeing something more introspective or focused from you. maybe something less broadly focused. there were a couple lines in here i thought were weaker than the rest, such as

anybody giving flattery gets no backup so if you're mad at me get blown.

and you're completely stable in your grounded worry, kid.

and a few others not even worth mentioning..

but overall, really great to see you back in action old friend. its a refreshing feeling.

keep on it. thanks

1
Appreciated it, dude. Lazy lines are from me just typing this up quick and keying up on the rhyme scheme I had in my head. Eh, sometimes you write something to just perpetuate the scheme. It's good to be back and we'll see how this text shit goes.

Good to see you here and participating in the league. Looking forward to seeing your work. I'd say this reads like your introduction to the site and I actually liked what you did here. Rhyming was on point, solid scheme. You really started picking up near the mid part of the first section, which I felt was the strongest part. Some cool lil references in there. I'm definitely interested in seeing what you come up with here and in the league.

Good stuff.
Thanks for the feed. I'm looking forward to being in the league and seeing what happens afterwards.

reminded me of a copy pat with less multies

good stuff doe
This feedback reminded me of a circular argument with less content.

Good feed doe
Dope I remember yu


Stick around
I don't remember the name but, hey, if you tell me some of your old names, who knows. Thanks for the feed.

Exis
04-08-2014, 11:17 AM
This was nice man...sure a few parts could be tightened and what not but it's a solid spit, thought scheme wise it was straight...content was good.

Stay upwards.

Wise Wiggles
04-08-2014, 02:00 PM
oooo I like uuuuuu

and by multies I meant syllables

Ghost1
04-08-2014, 02:08 PM
Fire

Bladed Thesis
04-10-2014, 03:16 AM
This was nice man...sure a few parts could be tightened and what not but it's a solid spit, thought scheme wise it was straight...content was good.

Stay upwards.
Appreciate it. Just a warm up so the scheme wasn't always perfect but it got where I wanted it to go.
oooo I like uuuuuu

and by multies I meant syllables
Multies are our friends.
Fire
Water.

NYCSPITZ
04-10-2014, 01:02 PM
good shit Bladed, I remember u going bananas in those AIM cyphers, quick mind and very creative, this piece is no exception

stay up

Bladed Thesis
04-10-2014, 01:14 PM
good shit Bladed, I remember u going bananas in those AIM cyphers, quick mind and very creative, this piece is no exception

stay up
Hahaha, those aim cyphers... good times.

http://www.rapworlds.com/forums/showthread.php?t=62131

NYCSPITZ
04-10-2014, 01:17 PM
LOL...wow throwback

Bladed Thesis
04-10-2014, 01:20 PM
Yeah, dude. RW was the shit.