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brokenhal0
04-22-2014, 03:18 AM
if you find love will you show that do you deserve that
will my heart handle a feeling it cant hold back skipping beats
all my senses open im not even missing the streets real love magnetic
actin eccentric this love so pure beyond the doors of kenetics
you said when i die i wont have to get back go back with another setback
running like a wet back with 6 bricks in his sac up the spine till my brain react
i knew love when i first saw it invisible in its glory
most people go threw life and ignore it thats a different story
fine ill just take your purity alchemical love jones
molly drug tones thats synthetic kisses honey makes her kitty flood tho
cutthroat bloody mess dont lemme catch another furry pest
she loved me cause i was into dirty sex worthy of real love i told you a secret
you laughed at me and told me to keep it fantasy island feelings
hot boy astral love demons
ghostbusters wheres dan akyroyd when i need em i get too much love
from my love its addictive cant always use it to please my dick tip
instant releases this a real mixtape you gotta connect the pieces
to build the bed to sleep in you cant wait for love
cause before there's light youll find darkness already creeped in

e11even
04-22-2014, 03:40 AM
Interesting read. The rhyming and mechanics were very clunky imo but I liked some of the imagery you had in there. I think if you manage to use what yuou did and develop your format, this would be a really cool piece. Keep dropping.

brokenhal0
04-22-2014, 05:18 AM
thanks yo my flow its broken up n it be spastic to read it sometimes i like how it sounds when i say it tho lol peace

Wise Wiggles
04-22-2014, 09:52 AM
Interesting read. The rhyming and mechanics were very clunky imo but I liked some of the imagery you had in there. I think if you manage to use what yuou did and develop your format, this would be a really cool piece. Keep dropping.

It's already a cool piece.

e11even
04-22-2014, 02:10 PM
It's already a cool piece.


this you?


EDIT: my last freepost.