8 Topicaldood5 vs. 5 IamBenT [Topicaldood5 ADVANCES VIA NO SHOW]

[Adonis]

16 lines minimum, 48 lines maximum. (if agreed upon by both participants, you may go beyond the limit at your own risk.)

Verses are due SUNDAY 6/17 at 11:59 PST.
Extensions are due MONDAY 6/18 at 11:59 PST.

You must vote on EVERY OTHER battle available... I am much less lenient on this rule then Keith, so please vote.

While there's no absolute criteria for voting, 1 line votes and criminally underdeveloped ones won't be allowed. I will holler via private message if I think a vote of yours isn't up to snuff and you'll be allowed to develop it, as long as you do it within the deadline. At a minimum, you should aim to include what you liked and what you didn't like (if anything) about each verse as well as an explanation towards why you thought one verse was better than the other.
There is NO RECYCLING.BITING.GHOSTWRITING.

Voting ends THURSDAY 6/21 at 11:59 PST.(Unless otherwise it may be extended another day at the most.)

You MUSTcheck in.


NOTE:
Swaying, excessive freeposting, voter fraud etc. are grounds for vote deductions at discretion of the moderators.
Editing your verse after the grace period, after your opponent posts, or after the first vote (especially this)- as well as biting- are grounds for disqualification at discretion of the moderators.


TOPIC: "Turn Off Your Mind, Relax And Float Down Stream"


G/L IamBenT TopicalDood5

[IamBenT]

Chec in

[Soulstice]

ok i really want to write this time and kill you
so hopefully i do

[Soulstice]

ext if you will kind sir.. ik its a little late to ask

[Soulstice]

Don't Blink

At this point the ancient terminus is rusted and worn
Where conductors have ushered hundreds of bustling hordes
Running, feet stomping like thunderous storms, people hustle aboard
So packed you couldn't bring another speck of dust on the tour
But there's nothing - just you and yourself at Station One
& the sky's sallow glow as shadows grow beneath the fading sun
Your face is numb, & your mind, you're powerless to control
Focused on the billowing smoke and the towering commodes
It's souring your soul, you've only heard stories and seen relatives
That return, and seem as they've been treated with dream desiccants
You breath, negligent to the bells and the large light approaching
The silhouette on horizon reminds you how hard life is becoming
The desolate silence is numbing, you retreat deeper in thought
Uncontrollably sink into a dreamscape until your hopelessly lost

This is the place, you remember it, it's perpetual excellence
Only this time this place is even more dressed up in decadence
So special, the scent of it, the smiling faces and shining sun
You'll see every single tooth before the time is done
The vibrant sun, the arctic chill, whichever you recall is stronger
You take a seat to stay, stay just a little while longer
Denial conjures strange illusions, the clocks have frozen in place
You'll stay forever in this apartment or this rosy estate
Worries floating away, and one last time a toast to freedom
Your senses dull and then you laugh as if you're s'posed to need em
Perfect hues in glowing sequence, in a dress she flips her hair
It was always your favorite color, that sexy, golden mare
Over there, the perfect place - you'll bring it with you 'till your dead
And then a bell, and then a whistle, and SMASH you've hit your head

Dizzy and jolted back to the present, a disasters presented
In passive aggressive....
Daydreaming, forgetting you've hopped in your cab
That's bringing you somewhere impossibly fast
You glance at the window - totally unseemly and strange
Did you miss your stop? While you were daydreaming away?

[Adonis]

IamBenT No shows

Topical Advances

Asshole bro. I'm jealous you advanced and you no show??