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Meth
06-18-2013, 02:14 AM
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Patrick Defiant

Swerve
06-18-2013, 12:11 PM
12.

Defiant
06-18-2013, 12:41 PM
Ok

~RustyGunZ~
06-25-2013, 10:26 PM
Patrick Defiant

Swerve
06-25-2013, 11:02 PM
Ext.

Swerve
06-27-2013, 02:12 AM
Keying...

Your girl only wants me dude and no doubt she won’t settle,
So when you’re gone, I’m eating those sugar walls worse than Hansel and Gretel.
Plus you don't look at girls, just a pussy lame limey sucker,
Only time defied a bitch was the one night he refused to sponge bathe his mother.
And she's a sucker, known to get on her knees for the drama,
I put out the spread cause If she's coming over, I figure-head like Obama.
Your stupid ass will get knocked out, better come up with a plan,
Cause I'm quick to decadence bitch...and not because of how great I think I am.
My custom out, riding so clean and high till the swagger hit em’,
If Def cussed 'em out, he's yelling at his stuffed animal about their tea party mannerisms.

Bit late.

Defiant
06-27-2013, 03:26 AM
saw hens' crew and id for sure revamp
u started the downward spiral of dohpe, n a downsprial of dope NOW your champ
a girls got be paralytic w/ u, sober you wont get a peep
last time pat had a chick with a landing strip, she was so drunk she fell over and went asleep
15 years battling but your still weak when you burst into fight
it leaves your prime suspect, n im about to charge u with being the worse on the site
U came wack last week, the kinda robbery everyone for sure fears
way u screwed cash, its like youve been taking tips of what ya girls been doing for years
last time you got through to the audience, the comp just knew
that you literally got the crowd to their feet,......just to stomp on you

FGR
06-27-2013, 08:34 PM
And she's a sucker, known to get on her knees for the drama,
I put out the spread cause If she's coming over, I figure-head like Obama.
^cool

My custom out, riding so clean and high till the swagger hit em’,
If Def cussed 'em out, he's yelling at his stuffed animal about their tea party mannerisms.
^funny but didnt hit to hard

vs

U came wack last week, the kinda robbery everyone for sure fears
way u screwed cash, its like youve been taking tips of what ya girls been doing for years
^lil wordy but iight


v/Pat ..really there wasnt much here, both seemed rusedi read pats n thought def would get hit easy but he didnt bring much that stood out

Atomic
06-27-2013, 09:48 PM
Your girl only wants me dude and no doubt she won’t settle,
So when you’re gone, I’m eating those sugar walls worse than Hansel and Gretel.
kinda a reach, it's ok tho.
Plus you don't look at girls, just a pussy lame limey sucker,
Only time defied a bitch was the one night he refused to sponge bathe his mother.
lolz, k.
And she's a sucker, known to get on her knees for the drama,
I put out the spread cause If she's coming over, I figure-head like Obama.
haaa, simple but i liked it.
Your stupid ass will get knocked out, better come up with a plan,
Cause I'm quick to decadence bitch...and not because of how great I think I am.
lmaooooooo, such an indirect punch but once again i enjoyed it.
My custom out, riding so clean and high till the swagger hit em’,
If Def cussed 'em out, he's yelling at his stuffed animal about their tea party mannerisms.
avg.
//

saw hens' crew and id for sure revamp
u started the downward spiral of dohpe, n a downsprial of dope NOW your champ
meh, ok
a girls got be paralytic w/ u, sober you wont get a peep
last time pat had a chick with a landing strip, she was so drunk she fell over and went asleep
this could have been dope, but you & i both know this was worded horribly man, cool concept, poor execution.
15 years battling but your still weak when you burst into fight
it leaves your prime suspect, n im about to charge u with being the worse on the site
meh, wording is lacking hard. ok though.
U came wack last week, the kinda robbery everyone for sure fears
way u screwed cash, its like youve been taking tips of what ya girls been doing for years
so simple, okay though.
last time you got through to the audience, the comp just knew
that you literally got the crowd to their feet,......just to stomp on you
ha, best bar of ur verse, not bad.

v/ pat takes it with much cleaner wording. i'd say concept wise they tied, but def just didn't execute the way i expected he would. cool battle but pat edges it imo.

Meth
06-28-2013, 03:34 AM
Defied
Decadence

vs

Screwed cash... which was kind of weird... but it hits, its clever i guess i havent seen it done.

V/ Swerve...

better verse, didnt like this battle. If i wasnt being lenient it would be decadence vs nothing... but ya know.

Swerve with the better hits here, both were obv rushed.

Rawn M.D.
06-28-2013, 12:10 PM
Tbh this was kinda lackluster... I get the feeling both were just keys tho

swerve ur verse was more funny then ne thing else, I liked the figure head line it was a cool flip simple but effective, the closer was decent, tbh I may have missed something g but decadence didn't really work or was just to indirect n came of like a statement to me and the rest was just clowning w a little wit in it.

Def I liked the screwed cash line sht came off a lot cleaner then the rest of ur verse for me, like landing strip had a lot of potential but execution was off n to verbose, charge was statementish n kinda filler imo, opener could been better plus dohpe/dope Shts played in my eyes, n ur closer was cool, but I've seen a lot similar flips done as well so that subtracted from the sting.

V/swerve
cleaner wording, more effective punches and filler is type lines were at least funny so not a complete miss.

~RustyGunZ~
06-28-2013, 04:16 PM
Your girl only wants me dude and no doubt she won’t settle,
So when you’re gone, I’m eating those sugar walls worse than Hansel and Gretel.
Plus you don't look at girls, just a pussy lame limey sucker,
Only time defied a bitch was the one night he refused to sponge bathe his mother.
And she's a sucker, known to get on her knees for the drama,
I put out the spread cause If she's coming over, I figure-head like Obama.
Your stupid ass will get knocked out, better come up with a plan,
Cause I'm quick to decadence bitch...and not because of how great I think I am.
.

opener was cool. lmao @ defied. other two were cool. didn't like the closer.

vs

U came wack last week, the kinda robbery everyone for sure fears
way u screwed cash, its like youve been taking tips of what ya girls been doing for years
last time you got through to the audience, the comp just knew
that you literally got the crowd to their feet,......just to stomp on you

hell nah @ opener.. dohpe/dope no.. nah @ landing strip.. prime suspect super basic. eh @ cash i'll give it to you and the closer was alright

v/pat easy

Defiant
06-28-2013, 10:04 PM
Can we close this shit please I'm embarrassed even reading it