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Advocate
06-25-2013, 10:40 PM
Assemblin my greatness, this kindle in my basement
Coincidentally, mentally I’m complacent
These bytches into me intimately
All this energy enters me simply, but wit a patience
Show no mercy, if they verse me it’s written in stone
Unpleasant peasants, they ain’t worthy up on the throne
I don’t care if James Worthy was on the phone
Offerin a blessin, got em stressin like Kevin on Home Alone
The shyt I’m spittin here is sure to follow me
Ran a train thru that bytch Lexus wit no insurance policy
Head game on point, her throat was good quality
I’m getting off topic there, I owe yall an apology
Why else you think I let Earl borrow my Sweatshirt?
Them turtle-neck sweaters had em complain his neck hurts
The game twisted now it’s all about who can flex first,
No one gives two shyts bout the next verse
But they rather take two shyts and then piss on they own talent
They diet is in question, and surely it’s unbalanced
Claim they hol it down on they corner, like they fuccin Ray Allen?
But I’ll believe it when I see him and Denzel filmin wit Italians
That just goes to show what we have come to
And best believe there’s no place to run to when I’m come thru
There’s not a weapon that can prosper
Never varsity, but I guarantee I’ll rock ya whole roster
Leave outta here wit an Oscar for Best Actor
That would be the end of my book and beginning of Oprah’s Next Chapter
See ya soon!

Lemme know what yall think!
All feedback is welcomed.
This is the link to the instrumental: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nj73U4aOzrI
Raekwon – Ice Cream (Instrumental)

Coup
06-25-2013, 11:44 PM
cat went in on this...real facts spit too...lot's of cats in this for pats on the back and not improvement...flow was sharp with angle lines to cut the brick of the dense halfwits...kept my attention man.

liked how this came out my mouth: Claim they hol it down on they corner

gave a sense of authenticity which was needed to back up your separation from the pack of needle nosed pocket protector stans.

I'd like to see you move from the observational into the 3rd person expressionist...see what you can do on that front...you got this down

Chyeahhh!!!
06-26-2013, 10:55 AM
I loved this man. great beat selection as well

Dove Dozer
06-26-2013, 11:00 AM
perfect rhyme scheme on this. it flowed perfectly too.

very enjoyable read bruh

Split
06-27-2013, 04:47 PM
bookmark'd + in depth feed after i eat this dead chicken

Advocate
06-28-2013, 03:41 PM
Well thanks everybody! I really appreciate the feedback and yall will be hearin from me in some of yall's post yall make in the future.