Flexin Weight - To Be Recorded!

[thewinnerallday]

hit the stage with a rage when this kid is blazed
pistols paint the paper red with the shit i say
split ur face, my sickles slay in a wickid way
plus im full of presence like its motha fuckin christmas day
spittin hate, rictors shake from the viscious quake
so get a taste, or get erased from my inner haste
the rap assasin, trippin out, acid rappin
back in action, like i never left or lacked the passion
my battle cry shatters minds of the baddest kind
u fuckers fight to write while i just battle rhyme.
magic mind, fresh to death never past my prime
jurassic grind, old school automatic shine
mad props cats who keep it real my hats off
lyrical hack saw- currupt like a bad cop
leave u rookies dead- bloody and lookin red,
pushin lead through your motha fuckin mushy head

[~RustyGunZ~]

wooooooooooo

presents/presence

cot daym

[thewinnerallday]

the flow is butter, this is an audio not a textstyle key. but thanks for takin time out of your day to hate.

[Witty]

My flow is better.

Your rhymes and wordplays are pretty basic but this was still cool to read, you have a good grasp of flow and wording, try different words other than the obvious...just makes it more interesting.

Good job tho, should sound nice recorded.

Don't be posting something you wrote and expect the spelling not to be critiqued tho, that's silly.

[Kin]

Presence....presents

He didnt spell shit wrong if ur usin a word with a double meaning...whats the problem with it????

O well...I appreciated this piece...would like to hear it when recorded tho...seems like it could be fire ova the right beat

An I got em if u want em

Holla at me