Aero [VS] Blanco Bishop [Aero WINS]

[Paradigm]

The Summer Classic VII
Netcees Premier Text Battling Tournament
Aero Aero the Apex Blanco Bishop
Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due MONDAY,
July 14th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Check Ins are due FRIDAY, July 11th 2014
Voting ends Friday July 18th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours
You will be GRANTED ONE EXTENSION throughout the Tourney. Any extension beyond the first will result in loss of votes.


Line Limit:

Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
Limit MUST be agreed upon


General Rules:

1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
means you will be disqualified.
A check in IS mandatory.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
must match the 1st person's line amount.

[StarFaggot]

Good work Para.

White Bishop pm me if you need help wording your concepts.

[StarFaggot]

Yo Blanco aka Hoe Nigga I haven't seen one battle from you. Looks like you stay no showing... Don't make that mistake this time.

[Blanco Bishop]

In.

[Blanco Bishop]

Can tell u a fag, claimin u had celebrities bagged, bruh, ur coke strung.
Only celebrity bag u can claim's that faggity purse u bought at Nordstrom.
In top form son. Quickly turn this to Pornhub.
This rape'll have u uploaded for days till u end dead from a stroke cunt.
How u top tier?! Stop queer. Ill raise ma game'n leave ya fucked up from within.
Your tier is really mid aer..jus'like your body when i land this uppercut to your chin.
U been actin the playa type, but no one wants ME around they boo...
Tell the truth. U say all bitches get fucked on the side? Yeah..that's how me n yours start our rendezvous.
Your goat talk is sooo off. You delivering great text is a lie punk.
If your at the Apex, we pray its of a skyscraper n u entering a suicide jump.

Thump.

[StarFaggot]

Yo I need to stop fucking around
.
.

Girls get insanely jealous, it's something you know nothing about
Last time you drove a chick mad you picked her up from my house
^ In the car I skeeted in but she cleans it quick, she gets too embarrassed
techniques used to get my kids out the car could've saved Cooper Harris
Your pops would murder you for a Hi-C, it'd be movie spoof style fam
toss Bishop over a ledge, I'll walk to him like you've got the juice now man
I can see it now, blunts in his car, rap blasting through speakers are clear
friends in back eager to roll up... the windows when black people are near
Quit acting tough its not cool or wicked why do you refuse to listen?
Seems like the only way he'll learn is by swimming with a school of fishes

[Kin]

blanco-

Only celebrity bag u can claim's that faggity purse u bought at Nordstrom.
ok

Your tier is really mid aer..jus'like your body when i land this uppercut to your chin.
kinda dope

U been actin the playa type, but no one wants ME around they boo...
Tell the truth. U say all bitches get fucked on the side? Yeah..that's how me n yours start our rendezvous.
pretty corny to me...why you tryna rhyme "boo"

If your at the Apex, we pray its of a skyscraper n u entering a suicide jump.
ok

Aero-
Last time you drove a chick mad you picked her up from my house
not a fan of these lines...but thiz one got a reaction outta me haha

toss Bishop over a ledge, I'll walk to him like you've got the juice now man
like how you tied in the set up hi-c shit wit' this...coulda been worked a lil' but nice

friends in back eager to roll up... the windows when black people are near
hahaha

Seems like the only way he'll learn is by swimming with a school of fishes

you got those comedy punches....which I think people overuse and are corny as hell...but you are one of the few that do them right...original and funny...nice verse...not the style I would normally even say I like...but you makin' me a fan of those lines

too many nice punches...straight clownin on em'

Vote-

AERO

[Tettris]

Your goat talk is sooo off. You delivering great text is a lie punk.
If your at the Apex, we pray its of a skyscraper n u entering a suicide jump.

vs

Your pops would murder you for a Hi-C, it'd be movie spoof style fam
toss Bishop over a ledge, I'll walk to him like you've got the juice now man
I can see it now, blunts in his car, rap blasting through speakers are clear
friends in back eager to roll up... the windows when black people are near

yea this was pretty one-sided...

v/Aero

[Amen]

Apex/suicide jump could have been flipped a little more harsher but, IMO - that was your strongest bar. Rest were struggled attempts that were poorly worded and needed the proper executions in order to land effectively.

Vs

The juice play was nice and the roll up was dope, actually & also liked the cooper Harris play... Swim w/ the fishes is crazyyyyy played bro no matter how you try and flip it, lol. It's like one of those defeat/da feet plays hahaha... But I think your verses was a lot cleaner as far as concepts/wording & executions, so with that being said...

V/aero

[Paradigm]

3-0 Aero

[Swerve]

Aero kinda killed this....I was just feeling the swagger in his verse. Opener was hot, kids out of the car was nice and roll up was funny. Nordstrom and rendevous lines were solid by Blanco but the other lines were quite weak/played-unoriginal nameplays and brought the overall quality down.

V/ Aero

[Velocity]

Your goat talk is sooo off. You delivering great text is a lie punk.
If your at the Apex, we pray its of a skyscraper n u entering a suicide jump.

vs

Girls get insanely jealous, it's something you know nothing about
Last time you drove a chick mad you picked her up from my house
Your pops would murder you for a Hi-C, it'd be movie spoof style fam
toss Bishop over a ledge, I'll walk to him like you've got the juice now man
I can see it now, blunts in his car, rap blasting through speakers are clear
friends in back eager to roll up... the windows when black people are near


Aero didnt come to direct but the wording was fierce which helped land generic concepts & made them dope. This was pretty much a landslide, you can tell by aeros vibe in the verse he knew it was in the bag.

[Paradigm]

Aero wins 5-0 and advances to next round.

[namix]

[QUOTE=Blanco Bishop;363478]
Can tell u a fag, claimin u had celebrities bagged, bruh, ur coke strung.
Only celebrity bag u can claim's that faggity purse u bought at Nordstrom.
-- this was aiight. to me, it 'revealed' too much from setup to punch, like it was clear what the celebrity bag wordplay was going to be, and really its just a 'bag' wordplay in the end --- but, it felt personal, and i dug the flow-carry over to the next bar

---- buuuut be careful with that. it's tempting for sure, and def. dope in a freestyle, but in a written... you can sacrifice concept for flow really easily if you dont get it right... just didnt really feel the pornhub punch


How u top tier?! Stop queer. Ill raise ma game'n leave ya fucked up from within.
Your tier is really mid aer..jus'like your body when i land this uppercut to your chin.
-- obv. the aer angel gets used on him a lot... but I did think this was solid 'nuf here though. I liked your wording here, probably the best of your verse to me. you can lose a bit of the redundancy, repeating the same thing in the setup and punch.... it seems like a damn generation of writers did it when i went on like hiatus lol... sometimes the "call back" makes sense, but a lot of times there is room for a synonym to keep it interesting.



U been actin the playa type, but no one wants ME around they boo...
Tell the truth. U say all bitches get fucked on the side? Yeah..that's how me n yours start our rendezvous.
--- lol nice, i like the angle.

think about that though, the angle.

take the bitch from the side... then off the side of the bed... then doggy and back to missionary so you can bust on her head...

that kind of "conceptual expansion" turns a nice 'word!' personal/type punch into something potentially lethal... you are conveying the same thing except doing very simple wordplay off "girls get fucked on the side", and making it about your positions in a very specific way --- just tends to make it hit more, you know?


if you ever want more concerted help or something holla, cuz i think you can increase a few levels pretty quick by considering some simple tips. anyway, good stuff..
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AERI



top fucking around
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Girls get insanely jealous, it's something you know nothing about
Last time you drove a chick mad you picked her up from my house
------------------------- hah, i appreciate how you made such a siiiiimple concept hit through just crisp delivery dude.... it's def. a talent that so few people look to learn, but is probably one of the most important if you're a long-term writer and pride yourself on never/rarely gettin writers block... solid display.

I can see it now, blunts in his car, rap blasting through speakers are clear
friends in back eager to roll up... the windows when black people are near
-------------------------- very similar to the opener, lol, nice.

solid ---

clearly Aero one this one...


i just realized that it was already over though haha...


i still might as well post since i wrote this and have admin priviledges i guess