~The Chair~

[Kin]

http://www.reverbnation.com/itskin/song/21311179-the-chair-feat-breez--learic



Order-
1-Kin
2-Breez
3-Learic

[DexLabb]

idk man its like.. if u wanna blow up. why rap like classified? classified already exists. and i know i am guilty of writing like drake so i cant be a hypocrite. but i think differentiation is key... who are u gonna be in the public eye?

classified barely even made it u know. i liked this beat more than the last one i heard, and the chorus was alot better

[Kin]

Neva heard of him

[PancakeBrah]

Don't listen to dexxlab

Srs

[DexLabb]

yeah man dont listen to dex-labb. keep writing those underground hip hop songs man you know... just keep beating that dead horse bro. which is prob what im doing right now but alrighttt

[Kin]

Nah I get u sayin my style is like someone I neva heard of....all good... could u comment on tha content at least or tha other two dudes that put their time in...or even a overall thought on the track itself not juz ya 1st impression of sound

[DexLabb]

if u never heard of him use youtube dude

[Pakistani Hand Cannon]

straight up...i dont wanna be too harsh cause im sure i was on the last piece of yours i fed

but how old are you bruh? seriously? cause if you over like 18, with this typa shit...its muhfuckaz like you that make me lose faith in hiphop...there's honestly nothing good i can say about this...typcal soundin bullshit you only find on these netcee type sites...its a joke

the second nigga had some poise...& thats about it...the other two of you...man whats the point

if you want an in depth critique i got no problem doing it, genuinely, i just aint gone waste my time keepin it straight up with you when you prolly just gon take it as hate

so yea, this was not good holmes...just my opinion though

take it how you want it

[gitto138]

I thought it was good man flowy, good job

[Kin]

Rugged outta curiousity...name two or 3 rappers you consider "dope" see if I
Can post a track more ur style up next time

[Zen]

I didn't like the chorus, but besides that it was good.

When it comes to actually rapping I think it's kind of ridiculous for people to critique you and tell you how to "blow up" when they've never blown up and likely never will. It's even more ridiculous when a person who raps like Drake says don't rap like Classified because there's already a Classified. In a site full of know it alls I'll tell you just do what you know because what you have here isn't bad at all. It isn't great either but it could be. Just keep doing what you're doing.

[DexLabb]

zenland fight me?

[Zen]

I'm a man of peace.

[Mitch]

kin: Good flow, the flow is the strongpoint, the alliteration was good with the com con, but towards the end, with the fast flow rhyming with repetitive, it fell off for me cus that rhyme scheme is so easy to rap fast and is repetitive lol, overall it was good. I thought it sounded cheesy when you and Learic did the repeat of ur last lines, it killed the flow for me.

Breez: i didn't like his and didn't pay enough attention to critique

Learic: his delivery was very good, sounded like blueprint, although his lyrics were kinda simple, they had the most meaning. i think Learic did slightly better than you, although your flow, vocab, & alliteration were better. Just cus his delivery, his meaning kinda set the tone for the song, although it seams like he wrote his after yours, having knowledge of what urs was,