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Paradigm
07-15-2014, 07:45 PM
The Summer Classic VII
Netcees Premier Text Battling Tournament

Bags Velocity

Winner of this advances into next round in a no show spot. Not guaranteed.

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due WEDNESDAY,
July 16th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Voting ends Friday July 18th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours
You will be GRANTED ONE EXTENSION throughout the Tourney. Any extension beyond the first will result in loss of votes.


Line Limit:

Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
Limit MUST be agreed upon


General Rules:

1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
means you will be disqualified.
A check in IS mandatory.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
must match the 1st person's line amount.

Velocity
07-16-2014, 09:29 PM
Velocity

Why you worried bout' posting first, a lil weak?

anthony right?
Do not enter unless your down to bust nuts on my face
Alpha Male Jim Sanchez Today 12:15 AM
by Bags

-Side note, the fact you even entered that thread proves a lot my friend.


you dont get numbers fag, women Si on the site of this rook
girls never want to Make this Duck Call, even though hes going for that Dynasty look
you been in Niks shadow for ever & this isnt changing of chapters
im still suprised that Maddison Square Garden doesnt have you hanging from Rafters
Ant, your a shitty father, no PPV but you signed for a slaughter
he loves NC so much, he had to stop boarding just to spend time with his Daughter
i have crude bars that are well oiled for any supply & demand
but your bars are more like jets that are low on fuel, their just dying to land
you roll with Destroyer who sways to win, hes a vets whats worse?
but Bags wont stoop that low, he'll normally post a thread then send a message first
Kin couldnt help Bags get past this even if hes movin the drugs
you sent the 16 to get viewed by Paracite & right now hes probably removin the bugs
Ant wants to champ the SC but hes barely decent & never flame
he couldnt Hail in this Summer Classic even with the earths current weather change
your next alias should be Fat Thursday & i bet your dying for why
its cuz your like a French Mardi Gras how all Women want to Cut Ties with this guy

Ghost1
07-16-2014, 09:36 PM
I kno RB on hard times ....but i mean...cmon guy
U tread my turf? Get sniped out. Long range. Thats my 50 yard line.
Rb is NC's graveyard n im Braveheart takin head shots
So Velocity gets WASTED when a wallace gon bring em to a dead stop
My squad gooned out. So wat u glarin at fag?
U post up? Ill have the wolves on u quick... NO VERITAS TAG
Alias FAGGOT. U so shook. Ya personals? No good.
Soon as u got my number? ill Beat u to death w/ the phone book
He dumb slow..so....stop son wats w/ the name...?
wats a slug to velocity? Lets find out... SHOTGUN PUMP TO HIS FACE
My quotes? Top 10 or better. Cmon man im fresher
U don spit cancer ever they cut UR lines out the mag like a ransom letter
Sluts? U fucked up or crazy he wouldnt put nut on a pastry
A Bitch pick up velocity? Trust Its a rape scene n shes runnin 4 safety
Alias coward. U gon need the army of jesus.
Get personal..ill cut u off at every angle & mail u back to RB in pieces

Paradigm
07-16-2014, 11:29 PM
0-0

No dick riding allowed in jest or otherwise.

Defiant
07-17-2014, 11:12 AM
Velocity was 2 simple nik flip was ok, hail, fail to land are played, paracite coulda been good but why would kin remove the bugs, coulda been nice rest didn't hit hard

Bags had a different style more of a swag and flow verse, his last 6 probably get him the win, shotgun made me lol not because it was good tho, ransom was lotb and rape scene was nice 2, I dunno he dropped any shit to win and it was closer than it shoulda been but bags gets the win


Vote bags

big baby
07-17-2014, 05:53 PM
Good mediocre text battle. I read thoroughly and appreciated the effort from both parties. I liked the rafters line the most, it was good and hard hitting, pretty funny. Velocity had a lot of decent lines that didnt provide much sting, or were just a tad bit off for my taste. Not off as in bad, but they didn't provide a humoristic effect, although the cadence and set-ups were evident. For example the dying to land line was a gutted attempt, it was a generic that didn't really have any connection to the battler other than your personal subjective opinion on him, it wasn't economized or anything. Plus it seemed stretch in terms of key words use, jets that are low on fuel, lol it just seemed a little bit too long, and with most text battles everything is centered on what's being said last, too much focus on the last thing, it's formulaic and very boring to me. Though your next lines were full of humor, the message first, etc etc. Cool stuff! Paracite? Seemed stretched as hell. Unless you're using some version of cite/site idk. Seemed thoroughly stretched, although I can see attempts of good set ups in this cornered version of writing.

bags has very formulaic writing as well, lol. the wolves line is a prime example, although what brought it to fruition was the relevancy insisted. William Wallace line was garbage. Unless you had specific emphasis on the word wasted, where I dont see any, and I don't feel like thinking for more than 5 seconds, so it's just null and void. The lines following the previous lines I mentioned were full of humoristic nameplay, which heightened the effect of whatever you were conveying. Running for safety, was literally a hair away from being lame, but it connected, and eveyrthing else was stellar, infact it was a moderately close battle, it's just whatever suits your style and taste more, and I personally think bags took it with more cleaner cut lines, although both faltered dearly in some aspects. Good showing, thanks.

Blanco Bishop
07-17-2014, 10:38 PM
Thought velocity started hard. I was feeling dynasty, rafters,daughter was lotv. Didn't feel thewording was good on the last three tho.

Bags was dope. Wording was on point.didn't like slugs line tho.
Overall i thought velocity was going to pull an upset but he ran out of steam.
Bags was consistent throughout. Possibly my fav battle so far.

V bags

StarFaggot
07-18-2014, 08:36 AM
Velocity:

you hanging from Rafters
Ant, your a shitty father, no PPV but you signed for a slaughter
he loves NC so much, he had to stop boarding just to spend time with his Daughter
^ yikes bc it's true


its cuz your like a French Mardi Gras how all Women want to Cut Ties with this guy
^ decent


Overall a cool verse, some misses


Bags:

U don spit cancer ever they cut UR lines out the mag like a ransom letter
^ nice

A Bitch pick up velocity? Trust Its a rape scene n shes runnin 4 safety
^ very clean


Overall some dead spots but couple really good lines



My vote goes to Velocity for consistency and a more personal approach.


This battle is cloooooose

Certain
07-18-2014, 03:56 PM
Velocity: The Knicks line was good but poorly worded. The same thing could be said for the low on fuel line. Otherwise nothing stood out to me. The wording was the real problem because you were overwrought and tried to make things more complex than they were. I did like that you tried to be personal, but those lines never were worded to seem mean.

Bags: The style contrast here is palpable. Your ideas were much simpler, but your wording was pretty dead-on. A few played concepts definitely hurt, but I really liked the Braveheart line and the rape scene line. You'll have to be more creative against tougher competition, but you did enough to move on here.

Vote: Bags

Amen
07-18-2014, 04:27 PM
Ant, your a shitty father, no PPV but you signed for a slaughter
he loves NC so much, he had to stop boarding just to spend time with his Daughter

Could have been worded a little harsher, but connected, IMO.

i have crude bars that are well oiled for any supply & demand
but your bars are more like jets that are low on fuel, their just dying to land

Played concept but could have potentially been flipped nicely.

your next alias should be Fat Thursday & i bet your dying for why
its cuz your like a French Mardi Gras how all Women want to Cut Ties with this guy

I fucks w/ it...

vs

Rb is NC's graveyard n im Braveheart takin head shots
So Velocity gets WASTED when a wallace gon bring em to a dead stop

Wallace/Wall is? Forced, not sure how you pronounce Wallace, but it sounds nothing like Wall is, lol. Dig'n the creativity tho using an older reference.

My quotes? Top 10 or better. Cmon man im fresher
U don spit cancer ever they cut UR lines out the mag like a ransom letter

Scene this concept before, but this was a decent flip on it.

Sluts? U fucked up or crazy he wouldnt put nut on a pastry
A Bitch pick up velocity? Trust Its a rape scene n shes runnin 4 safety

I like it. Simple, basic and to the point. Generic name play with a "Oh you can't get bitches/you don't get pussy you ugly fuck, concept but the wordin an execution was smooth.

All in all, I got Velocity edgin this one out. I feel, Bags had some decent'ish Bars but nothing too direct or personal to give him the Win, IMO. I think Velocity took a personal approach and all tho, a lot of his personals had some wordin issues, I think some still connected better then Bags random'ish could spit at anyone type of bars.

v/Velocity.

murda sho
07-18-2014, 07:27 PM
Bags

My quotes? Top 10 or better. Cmon man im fresher
U don spit cancer ever they cut UR lines out the mag like a ransom letter
Sluts? U fucked up or crazy he wouldnt put nut on a pastry
A Bitch pick up velocity? Trust Its a rape scene n shes runnin 4 safety
Alias coward. U gon need the army of jesus.
Get personal..ill cut u off at every angle & mail u back to RB in pieces


Velocity

Ant, your a shitty father, no PPV but you signed for a slaughter
he loves NC so much, he had to stop boarding just to spend time with his Daughter

your next alias should be Fat Thursday & i bet your dying for why
its cuz your like a French Mardi Gras how all Women want to Cut Ties with this guy


A couple punches landed in this battle, i see bags took the street approach in this one haha anyway I got 3 quotes from bags and 2 from Velocity so bags edged it barely. v bags

Sharp
07-18-2014, 10:42 PM
liked the nik line, maybe the daughter line

v

braveheart was cool, ransom letter was an alright idea and rape was alright

giving it to bags with one more quote. close. can elaborate more if need, on the phone

v/bags

Paradigm
07-19-2014, 02:51 AM
Bags wins 6-2.