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Paradigm
07-19-2014, 03:13 AM
The Summer Classic VII
Netcees Premier Text Battling Tournament

ill nik-A Sharp Nine

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due TUESDAY,
July 22nd 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Check Ins are due MONDAY, July 21st 2014
Voting ends Saturday July 26th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours
You will be GRANTED ONE EXTENSION throughout the Tourney. Any extension beyond the first will result in loss of votes.


Line Limit:

Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
Limit MUST be agreed upon


General Rules:

1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
means you will be disqualified.
A check in IS mandatory.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
must match the 1st person's line amount.

Paradigm
07-23-2014, 12:25 AM
Sharp Nine:

Mr. Former Rapper


I'm gigging every day n making bread. My musical career's good dude
meanwhile your musical career ended early with a broken back during 'footloose'
Your girl hates you & comes to me. Our forays are getting frequent
She's been nibblin on my ear while she'd rather give you that Suarez treatment
The bitch forgot how to fuck. said you never pound it, mac
We had to start from scratch... n ended with claw marks down my back
I'm an animal that'd wreak havoc on ya. Sharp's straight ruthless
I'd destroy your squad n leave you with shattered knees... but Bron beat me to it
Champ? You blow every tourney you're in. No way you'll survive here
Your ridiculous choking could distract us from the NYPD for 5 years
Actin like you're a trendsetter cause you get attention. why pretend dude?
but sure, the nika style's all the rage...
leading to all the bitching and swaying every time theres a vote against you

ill nik-A:

u in music school & should have sex stories with no desire to come home
but this one time in band camp u got two-timed by the fat bitch who plays the trombone
u have no game, guy; fucking ugly bitches is easy, don’t even need to play fly
I’d cover her face with a paper bag… u need to breathe into one cuz u too nervous to say hi
Whether its women or standing-up for urself, this scared guy vomits
your heart is so fragile… even ya chest has a handle with care sign on it
I’m a monster! while this four-eyed geek will run like many fags do
& if u confront me… I’ll use ur big ass glasses to channel Bloody Mary & Candyman too
hiding ur passion is wrong, find my car in the garage when smashin ur mom…
I wont panic nor run, besides, u crash on the same couch I’ve had many pull-out accidents on
I motivate with skills, whore; fathered pink-slips if u wanna get killed more
I’ve never seen this pussy drop something that moving… u pushing a style that’s stillborn

BROKE LESNAR
07-23-2014, 12:47 AM
Sharp Nine:

Your girl hates you & comes to me. Our forays are getting frequent
She's been nibblin on my ear while she'd rather give you that Suarez treatment
The bitch forgot how to fuck. said you never pound it, mac
We had to start from scratch... n ended with claw marks down my back
I'm an animal that'd wreak havoc on ya. Sharp's straight ruthless
I'd destroy your squad n leave you with shattered knees... but Bron beat me to it
Champ? You blow every tourney you're in. No way you'll survive here
Your ridiculous choking could distract us from the NYPD for 5 years
Actin like you're a trendsetter cause you get attention. why pretend dude?
but sure, the nika style's all the rage...
leading to all the bitching and swaying every time theres a vote against you

ill nik-A:

u in music school & should have sex stories with no desire to come home
but this one time in band camp u got two-timed by the fat bitch who plays the trombone
u have no game, guy; fucking ugly bitches is easy, don’t even need to play fly
I’d cover her face with a paper bag… u need to breathe into one cuz u too nervous to say hi
Whether its women or standing-up for urself, this scared guy vomits
your heart is so fragile… even ya chest has a handle with care sign on it
hiding ur passion is wrong, find my car in the garage when smashin ur mom…
I wont panic nor run, besides, u crash on the same couch I’ve had many pull-out accidents on
I motivate with skills, whore; fathered pink-slips if u wanna get killed more
I’ve never seen this pussy drop something that moving… u pushing a style that’s stillborn


Wow. What a battle. 5-5 each. Sharp really stepped up in this. His lotb was the back scratch line and Nik's was the paper bag line. Great showing on both parts. Both with 2 different styles. I think I'm going to stay away from voting in any tie and judge this based on the 2 lotbs. Sharp's had me laughing. It was dope. Nik's was fucking roflz. It really countered Sharp's lotb. It would probably be more fair to call this a draw and withhold my vote but the show must go on.

My vote and the winner of the lotb tiebreaker goes to...

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lmao jp


Nik.

Good stuff guys.

v-Nik

Amen
07-23-2014, 12:14 PM
The bitch forgot how to fuck. said you never pound it, mac
We had to start from scratch... n ended with claw marks down my back
Champ? You blow every tourney you're in. No way you'll survive here
Your ridiculous choking could distract us from the NYPD for 5 years

- Even tho this choke/nypd reference could have been executed a lot better, still feel as if it was effective, props.

vs

u have no game, guy; fucking ugly bitches is easy, don’t even need to play fly
I’d cover her face with a paper bag… u need to breathe into one cuz u too nervous to say hi
Whether its women or standing-up for urself, this scared guy vomits
your heart is so fragile… even ya chest has a handle with care sign on it
I motivate with skills, whore; fathered pink-slips if u wanna get killed more
I’ve never seen this pussy drop something that moving… u pushing a style that’s stillborn

- I liked the still born concept, think you could have presented/executed it a little more harsher, IMO. Seems you took the more simplistic route.

OVERALL: This was a good battle and enjoyed both reads. I got Nik w/ just 1 more quote but Sharp definitely did his thing here. IMO, what hurt Sharp was the Heat reference which I felt was wack and a complete miss for me and the closer that was stretched as hell. I think those 2 bars helped the decision. Nik has some weak bars too, like his opener & the Glasses reference, but were better then Sharp's misses, so w/ that being said...

v/Nik

Ghost1
07-23-2014, 10:31 PM
]Sharp Nine:

Mr. Former Rapper


I'm gigging every day n making bread. My musical career's good dude
meanwhile your musical career ended early with a broken back during 'footloose'

Eh...failed attsmpt at humor for me

Your girl hates you & comes to me. Our forays are getting frequent
She's been nibblin on my ear while she'd rather give you that Suarez treatment

This is ok...not too hard hitting tho imo

The bitch forgot how to fuck. said you never pound it, mac
We had to start from scratch... n ended with claw marks down my back

I like this. Nice.

I'm an animal that'd wreak havoc on ya. Sharp's straight ruthless
I'd destroy your squad n leave you with shattered knees... but Bron beat me to it

This is light

Champ? You blow every tourney you're in. No way you'll survive here
Your ridiculous choking could distract us from the NYPD for 5 years

Ok

Actin like you're a trendsetter cause you get attention. why pretend dude?
but sure, the nika style's all the rage...
leading to all the bitching and swaying every time theres a vote against you

Wordimg sucked. Took away the harshness this couldve had


ill nik-A:

u in music school & should have sex stories with no desire to come home
but this one time in band camp u got two-timed by the fat bitch who plays the trombone

Lol. This was cool.

u have no game, guy; fucking ugly bitches is easy, don’t even need to play fly
I’d cover her face with a paper bag… u need to breathe into one cuz u too nervous to say hi

Nice jab

Whether its women or standing-up for urself, this scared guy vomits
your heart is so fragile… even ya chest has a handle with care sign on it

Lol

I’m a monster! while this four-eyed geek will run like many fags do
& if u confront me… I’ll use ur big ass glasses to channel Bloody Mary & Candyman too

Ehh...i see the concept...didnt much like this tho...tried to do too much i think

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hiding ur passion is wrong, find my car in the garage when smashin ur mom…
I wont panic nor run, besides, u crash on the same couch I’ve had many pull-out accidents on

Haha. Fire.

I motivate with skills, whore; fathered pink-slips if u wanna get killed more
I’ve never seen this pussy drop something that moving… u pushing a style that’s stillborn

This is ok...felt familiar tho....not real fresh


Id say nik was way more entertaining to read. I didnt care much for sharps angles. To be fair tho niks creativity will outshine most on the site....an that was the case here. Sharp wasnt himself and nik was on point plain an simple.

V nik

Velocity
07-24-2014, 01:12 AM
The bitch forgot how to fuck. said you never pound it, mac
We had to start from scratch... n ended with claw marks down my back
Champ? You blow every tourney you're in. No way you'll survive here
Your ridiculous choking could distract us from the NYPD for 5 years

vs

u have no game, guy; fucking ugly bitches is easy, don’t even need to play fly
I’d cover her face with a paper bag… u need to breathe into one cuz u too nervous to say hi
Whether its women or standing-up for urself, this scared guy vomits
your heart is so fragile… even ya chest has a handle with care sign on it
hiding ur passion is wrong, find my car in the garage when smashin ur mom…
I wont panic nor run, besides, u crash on the same couch I’ve had many pull-out accidents on


couldve quoted another line from nik, but this was pretty clear cut to me, Sharp just got out shined.

vote- Nik

Certain
07-24-2014, 01:39 AM
Sharp Nine: You came a bit soft in the top half, as though you were flipping braggadocio lines to inverse them. I'm not much of a fan of that style. The LeBron James line easily was the best of your verse, and the choking line was good and current. But the closer was way too generic, and the opener was weak. I feel like you could have attacked from more angles, as the girlfriend stuff clearly was the weak point. None of this was bad, but it could have been better for the most part. Your wording was OK, not harsh enough to carry the less clever concepts. I did like that you countered the obvious music school punches.

ill nik-A: This was well below what I expected from you. The opener was mediocre. The paper bag concept was a little thin, but you worded it well enough to get impact. Then there was a long run on average to mediocre lines until you got to the couch line. While generic, that was really good and something I hadn't seen before. The wording could've been tightened on that and the closer, which wasn't nearly as good. The weird thing to me is how choppy this verse is, as it doesn't read cohesively very well. Ultimately, though, you showed a bit more edge and had the line of the battle.

Vote: ill nik-A

Paradigm
07-24-2014, 03:52 AM
ill nik-A wins 5-0.