K Huntsman vs ribbit [K Huntsman WINS]

[K Huntsman]

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ribbit

[K Huntsman]

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[ribbit]

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http://netcees.co/showthread.php?p=368122&posted=1#post368122
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?p=368153#post368153

[ribbit]

U getting bruised bitch ur fam useless forget ya mom and pops shit
the only solution is to put all ur loved ones in a coffin
mite key this battle but ribbit live right next to da locksmith
u crashing k but rib got u homeless shootin airballs picking up dog shit
tough love k but why thug when u get no love..plus
u cant c rib through his smoke bombs
and guess wat? noone wants u to get there vote
like blacks who are running for office
u can disguise urself but this forun expects adjustments
so forget ya customs u got blue balls rap artists call k numb nuts

[K Huntsman]

I'll hit the blunt...rip this slut apart with no care
If you catch rib rollin up, he'll be half dead in a fuckin wheel chair
I don't usually battle newbs...bitch hit ya knees cos ya blessed
A dope verse from you ?...we got better chance of a WNBA dunk contest
I'll choke you out sheik style so keep 5-0 on call
Cos while I'm living life on edge, this faggot just has his posters on the wall
You ain't deadly with shit...homie go rethink ya thesis
I could revolutionize butchery the way I chop bits to pieces
Thinkin about gettin a hot start on the board ?..nah kid
I'm like a vegan the way we'll never get a chance to see a prime rib

Shakin the rust... Dropping links later

[Amen]

ribbit - please work on your structure as well as end rhymes, bro. I mean, you hardly rhymed anything. Not sure what type of accent you have, but...

Pop shit/Coffin - Do not rhyme
Locksmith/Dog shit - The smith/shit's a near rhyme but comes off awkward

tough love k but why thug when u get no love..plus
u cant c rib through his smoke bombs
and guess wat? noone wants u to get there vote
like blacks who are running for office

Not sure what ^ is, tbh. Is it 2 bars/4lines or 1 bar/2lines in a weird stretched format?

And your closer really didn't make much sense to me, tbr. With that being said, I'm not trying to come off as a dick but this verses was pretty terrible, IMO. Work on structuring your bars/lines in a better format because it caused issues while reading, from a readers perspective. I had a hard time trying to follow a flow not to mention, your end rhymes were off as well so I couldn't find any type of flow. Concepts were weak/not effective, just an overall pretty bad verse.

vs

Hunts had an OK'ish verse. Nothing really WOW'd me but you had a few attempts. I liked the concepts on your name flip attempts but feel the executions could have been worded in more of a harsher manner.

You ain't deadly with shit...homie go rethink ya thesis
I could revolutionize butchery the way I chop bits to pieces
Thinkin about gettin a hot start on the board ?..nah kid
I'm like a vegan the way we'll never get a chance to see a prime rib

IMO, were your best bars/PUNS. The rest was blahhh'ish to me. I see you have the basics down just work on structuring your punches with fresher and more effective concepts with harsh executions and you'll be straight, bro...

Overall: IMO, this battle was pretty one sided as ribbit had nothing vs the 2 quotes I got from HUNTS which were his best bars out of the entire verse. So with that being said...

v/K Huntsman

[K Huntsman]

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[Dope girl]

Both of you need more work, Should have came with better & stronger bars
Vote-KH

[Paradigm]

Silver vote doesn't count. Not explained.

[ribbit]

So its still 1-0 in ur favour k

[Blanco Bishop]

Rib..your bars are good for audio. But u need a grasp of similes n metaphors. Youll get better bro.

Khunt u had the butchery line. That pretty much won it for u.

V k hunt

[KnowP]

nothin hard.



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You ain't deadly with shit...homie go rethink ya thesis
I could revolutionize butchery the way I chop bits to pieces
Thinkin about gettin a hot start on the board ?..nah kid
I'm like a vegan the way we'll never get a chance to see a prime rib



Hunt got this easy with better flips and the bits n pieces bar which was a good nameplay. Ribbit needs to work on rhyming his punches and being more creative with fresher concepts and personals. keep it up tho.



v. hunts[/B]

[Paradigm]

K Huntsman wins 3-0.

K Huntsman: (0) +5W+2Links=7pts
ribbit: (0) -3L+2Links=0pts