bitten

[gitto138]

This was bitten, but if you'd like to see the original:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=olVPXpGohII

[DexLabb]

african can shake a spear at lmfao

[gitto138]

Any one gonna feed this

This is shit then

[JESODIST]

Some of the rhymes were forced, but your accomplishments were very clear.
Not a bad story, Put some multies once in a while.

[Mitch]

i like your alliteration, this was your best style so far

[big baby]

wish you expanded further when you were talking about antonyms and synonyms, like how did you do this stuff, cinemas from synonyms? it would be better than the dabble after it. good stuff.

[UnbornBuddha]

Good stuff. I get the feeling many times you just rhymed to rhyme. Using words that had similar connotations and using them for the sake of doing so. I did enjoy you using grammar words so as to lead a discussion on your love for language, and its implications when interacting with the world. Although you had a method, it lacked a certain focal point that inevitably will give it a direction in which you can explain what you truly want to. The meaning at times was eschewed by certain phrasing that sometimes was used for the sake of maintaining a certain order. Which is important, but the conveying of your conceptual framework precedes it.
Anyways keep writing. You are sure to prosper.

[Vulgar]

I studied more Shakespeare
Than any African can shake a spear at
And the whole world fear that

lol

I don't have any witty remarks for your witty remarks. I could pull something out of my hat yet it would be unbecometh of me - cool writing, some fun content here. Not the most original at some parts but you nurtured it into an enjoyable flirt/piece. Welcome to Netcees, stick around.

Keep doing you

[Eŋg]

everyone who posted before me is officially retarded:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=olVPXpGohII

officially. but not as much as OP. banhammer, please.