Pyro vs ...the Munster - MUNSTER WINS BY KO

[Pyro]

10lines due tomorrow morning..


easy body :)

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=8751
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=8647

[...the Nagger]

hey baby

[Pyro]

Give me your Max cause this is indeed a hard drive, his rhymes war & break
when i crash, dumb he feels cause everything he ride for is fake!
his lines are bitten from scripts so he like "My Pix'ar dope" in that bordered Box he Stood
Slip a Link into Munster's Ink and he get to thinking he's HollyWood!
I Trade Marks then drain hearts, remaining pain attack this boys Guilt
your not Stable to Vets, tm's only labeled a threat ona back of spoiled milk
I'm blocking his Cruelty like What can your Shots.... do to me?
hes known for getting Beamed in battles so he's used to having dots to his 'T'ee!
His Vass get shattered and this Man Dies, he's not Eligable to see my Grand Prize
After this bout if he Survive 'i'ce skate on his Grounds cause he knew it was a Land Slide!

Die bitch nigga...

[...the Nagger]

Pyro!? Call me when this shit gets scary
Ight word, i'll put out ya flame... but u gonn have to write that niggas obituary..
I'll mop the floor wit this clown defeat is a must
I'm tellin u.. its gonn be a clean sweep when i beat u to dust
Dont sleep... & nver dismiss me like you'd do somethin.
Your styles alarmin? Yea, it pissd me off.. then i rolled over & hit the snooze button.
Kill it, b
& add this up so its clear to ce; the math.. for the losses of py'?
Some long ass number that never stops,& begins wit 3
My strong might'll leave u slump.. i'll beat n ya fuckin face alll night
You gonn have to get stood up .. like what Granny did to u on prom night

[Sharp]

Opened since munster wasn't notified of ext til now
...the Munster 2 voting links please

[Atomic]

Give me your Max cause this is indeed a hard drive, his rhymes war & break
when i crash, dumb he feels cause everything he ride for is fake!
wording is horrendous, not feeling
his lines are bitten from scripts so he like "My Pix'ar dope" in that bordered Box he Stood
Slip a Link into Munster's Ink and he get to thinking he's HollyWood!
setup was better than the 2nd bar, wtf man i see no actual punch
I Trade Marks then drain hearts, remaining pain attack this boys Guilt
your not Stable to Vets, tm's only labeled a threat ona back of spoiled milk
ok i see the punch so i will say this is acceptable
I'm blocking his Cruelty like What can your Shots.... do to me?
hes known for getting Beamed in battles so he's used to having dots to his 'T'ee!
plz no man, awful
His Vass get shattered and this Man Dies, he's not Eligable to see my Grand Prize
After this bout if he Survive 'i'ce skate on his Grounds cause he knew it was a Land Slide!
mehhhhh the connection is vague if even there, u need to work on wording badly/having an actual punch

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Pyro!? Call me when this shit gets scary
Ight word, i'll put out ya flame... but u gonn have to write that niggas obituary..
wtf, no
I'll mop the floor wit this clown defeat is a must
I'm tellin u.. its gonn be a clean sweep when i beat u to dust
ok for this battle i'll label this acceptable
Dont sleep... & nver dismiss me like you'd do somethin.
Your styles alarmin? Yea, it pissd me off.. then i rolled over & hit the snooze button.
LOL, too simple, but it's funny
Kill it, b
& add this up so its clear to ce; the math.. for the losses of py'?
Some long ass number that never stops,& begins wit 3
the wording was just horrendous, i'll give u the attempt tho.
My strong might'll leave u slump.. i'll beat n ya fuckin face alll night
You gonn have to get stood up .. like what Granny did to u on prom night
NoOOOOooOOoo

i realize both of u are just starting text/attempting to elevate so please don't take this as me being a dick, but u both need serious amounts of work. pyro, ur punches are sometimes so vague or non existent & ur wording makes me think english may not be ur 1st language. munster ur ideas are there but some aren't very hardhitting altho u do have more of an idea of what ur doing.

v/ munster for more of an idea on how to battle. pyro if u want help hmu on aim & i'd be glad to help u elevate but atm munster took this, sorry breh.

[Animosi T]

Give me your Max cause this is indeed a hard drive, his rhymes war & break
when i crash, dumb he feels cause everything he ride for is fake!

This was wack. You want to go with a set-up/punch-aka Joke. Talk about past battles/pictures of him/etc. Make it funny. This verse made no sense-wording is crucial.

his lines are bitten from scripts so he like "My Pix'ar dope" in that bordered Box he Stood
Slip a Link into Munster's Ink and he get to thinking he's HollyWood!

Again, no real punch. No reaction was given from me. I saw the concept, you could thought of monster Ink, and made a reference to it that was more indepth. It really made no sense calling him 'Hollywood'

I Trade Marks then drain hearts, remaining pain attack this boys Guilt
your not Stable to Vets, tm's only labeled a threat ona back of spoiled milk

This was a semi-punch. You want to strive for lines like this. It's a joke, in a sense, and you want to insult the opponent.

I'm blocking his Cruelty like What can your Shots.... do to me?
hes known for getting Beamed in battles so he's used to having dots to his 'T'ee!

Gun lines are wack fillers. Concept here was worded badly, you want to make a good set up and punch. lead up to the joke. Look at some comedian's best punchlines/great battles.

His Vass get shattered and this Man Dies, he's not Eligable to see my Grand Prize
After this bout if he Survive 'i'ce skate on his Grounds cause he knew it was a Land Slide!

No, this wasn't a good punch. If he survived, that would be a win. bad wording/no real punch.


Die bitch nigga...
Munster got this but I will break down Pyro's to help him.

Pyro, work on crafting punches. Do some research so you don't use all fillers and try to crush your opponent. Look at some battles and look how they craft punches.

mvgt: Munster

[Meth]

2-0 Eddie

Up

[Hush]

Ed did u recycle that alarm line

[...the Nagger]

I had a sleepin on u line that was similar Hush thanks for the vote smh

[Hush]

U did win easily

[Orc]

Eddie barely wins. V/ Eddie.