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[Void]

Socially awkward loner and stalker. Drinking booze in his car with no one to talk to. Cold when he's bothered. Knows that he's haunted. Never hears from the ghost of his father. Knows he's exhausted. Knows he should off him. Invite his estranged family and close up the coffin. It's awesome. Focus? You joshing. He's only revolving 'cause no one has stopped him. Robotic. Mechanical. Closeted Hannibal. Modest. He's tangible. Was cocky. An animal stomping on mandibles. Cool, calm, collected. Youth lost, she's pregnant. Dude lost his best friend a month before his son was born. Father mourning his father. No problem, store at the bottom. Feeling's a luxury. Conceal it, don't budge or blink. Deal with the ugly things like healing ain't nothing. He sealed up and numbed the grief. It's a decade later and he's decayed. Hate her. Wants a rebate. Fate's a cheapskate. Prayer? He's atheist. Crazy. Sick. Faded. Spent. Maybe it's wrong, but stalks broads in the mall. Thinks about offing 'em all.

[Geno]

damn, wow..

this started off like a typical addicts ramble, but then suddenly got crazy deep with the pragnancy and best friends death. you went in here void. good shit.

[Split]

This was dope. You not bored with making the same references over and over again? lol

[Void]

lol... touché... but mine have roots. EMOTIONAL roots. Neighbor is just Megatron weapon drawn Kill Bill blade Ninja Turtle character movie reference weapon accessory death metaphor movie reference drug drug movie weapon.

Neighbor's dope, though lol

[Split]

of course of course

I just feel like you have a great capacity for alternative phrasing, but walk down the same conceptual path with the same light shining through the foliage every time

If you get my drift

[Lars]

word to what Split is trying to say

the thing is when you've been around as long as us guys, it's great to just be able to vibe in your writing and literally throw out these things in minutes without too much thought behind them or overthinking the end product too much

almost like you've hit your peak and now you're just plateuing knowing you can throw together schemes and pieces on a par or above what some can write down

its lonely at the top

i thank god i've Void for company sometimes

[Void]

Yeah. I was actually drunk last night when I wrote this. Took like 3 minutes lol Not claiming I'm some keystyle wiz. I get what you're saying, Split. Like Lars said, there's no concentrated effort or point here, besides wanting to write and this being my outlet for it. It's my digital journal. THAT'S GAY. I've touched on it in verses. Lars is right. I've reached a point where writing what's considered dope as a challenge to myself is no longer motivating. What you're left with then is your challenge to perfect writing for you. It's a lot harder, and I don't have the free time I once did to persue it. Appreciate the feedback and compliments.

[Void]

I wholly agree. Been treading over the same themes and even wording for a while. Duly noted.

[Coup]

Good read. Enjoyed this niggah

[Lars]

I wholly agree. Been treading over the same themes and even wording for a while. Duly noted.

yo

i can never force myself to use the same rhyme twice back to back like you do though

Knows he's exhausted. Knows he should off him.

shizz like that, i'd never use the 'knows' masculine rhyme twice back-to-back like that, ever

just a personal assholeish limit i put in place for myself

not knocking you for it, just putting it out there since i didnt actually comment about anything in the piece with my last post and wanted you to know i did read it

enjoy or endure!

[Void]

I use that rule in most cases, but sometimes I feel like doing it adds emphasis, or a certain ring to a line.

[Lars]

lmao yeah i see that

doing it three times seems to be the accepted way amongst textcees now though, like it somehow adds a poetic or emotional element to it

textcees are so gay sometimes

[Darth Yoda]

I want to be at the top and alone 2 u no.

[CopyPat]

haha this thread is truth, void neigh split and lars basically calling eachother out, ha good points too funny.

enjoyable read as always. you should collab with ur alter ego named null and make a dope collabo called null and void