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Mr. J
07-20-2013, 08:04 PM
Take a step into the concrete jungle, offbeat hustle
where lyricism is deep, but that shit got me troubled
got me lost, between jealousy like it's honesty's body double
if I speak my mind, switch up the flow for these ho's
they would prolly be all over it anonymously....glory-holes
suppose we grow in the time we escape
and get the support over the rhymes we made
who knows though, cuz a guy like me is skeptical
shocking as Tesla, flew through pages and kept it cool
puffing medical while I express my concern
got my ideas on new print, I enjoyed pressing terms
stretching topics out and putting it down sometime yesteryear
like I need to put thought in. I just wait and let it fester here
I strike the match that would burn you guido fucks
reminiscing every November...putting free throws up
letting my display speak for itself, just to keep you people up
I need no luck...

Geno
08-02-2013, 07:51 PM
Was feeling it.
This was dope..
they would prolly be all over it anonymously....glory-holes

Seems your becoming of yourself. Nice way to change up the style a little. I like what your doing

Sho Money EMG
08-03-2013, 12:06 AM
This was aight a bit all over the place during the middle was a cool start flow seemed a bit choppy .... But overall decent drop keep writing

Mr. J
08-26-2013, 12:56 PM
Oooo the 5th of November line ;)

Brain Thief
08-26-2013, 01:10 PM
Decent lines, there were a few that stood out

Take a step into the concrete jungle, offbeat hustle
where lyricism is deep, but that shit got me troubled
got me lost, between jealousy like it's honesty's body double

Puffing medical while I express my concern
got my ideas on new print, I enjoyed pressing terms

The flow was a bit disjointed at points but that didn't detract from the writing too much. This could be improved in a few places but overall it's a sick drop, nice opening lines

Dope girl
08-27-2013, 08:13 AM
you some dope bars, the flow was cool.

Kold Breeze
08-27-2013, 03:01 PM
The glory holes lined killed, dope overall. I like it, the fact that you dont need any one to build you up, you kno u dope and thats all there is to it....

YDK
08-27-2013, 08:24 PM
word the gloryhole line was killer lmao
flow was good multies were decent nothing really negative ta say tbh just a solid drop. not overly flashy but it had enough concept flips to keep it straight.
good shit man keep droppin

Exis
08-28-2013, 10:35 PM
Take a step into the concrete jungle, offbeat hustle
where lyricism is deep, but that shit got me troubled
got me lost, between jealousy like it's honesty's body double

^^That's raw...if your whole verse was like that this would be straight fire, it just so happens that I thought what came after the section I quoted was not that great...average at best when compared to the way you opened, still an enjoyable read nonetheless.

Stay upwards.

CopyPat
08-29-2013, 01:22 AM
Nice bro!!! i enjoyed this one. seemed pretty realistic and from the heart. i also liked ur vocab, it wasn't stupid long words or anything but just shit u don't see often.. offbeat hustle dunno why liked that, puffing medical, yesteryear, fester. ha just liked it. scheming was nice too. really good drop man

Split
04-23-2014, 03:28 AM
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