oh nah i dont watch the news. fuckin faggot.

[Ghost1]

Oh....
This kid is an idiot hes oblivious
To religious dissonance
and political constituents.
Ha. Oblivious.
Every minute is critical.
This is precisional ignorance.
From a pivotal position
These r surgical incisions.
Im legitimately disinterested.
My fiscal year was dismal
Im 80 bucks short an the rents due
My girl tossed wishes out the window
Her shattered dreams scream my crescendo
BUT PLEASE
Tell me more about the democrats an the liberals.
I dont sleep much lately
Black mold in the walls. Haha.
I dont breathe much lately.
But i dont got much to complain about
I cant preach much lately.
My kids safe.
An me an her mom dont beef much lately.
Oh....
But yea....tell me about condoliza & dick cheney
And about how
The commander in chief made a speech
About sum peace treaty we couldnt keep just lately....
Yea. Ok.
I got real problems.
U must be fuckin crazy.
Your politics r just soapbox geared towards a lonely bloated demographic
Its more of a sick joke to the folk that never had shit.
My kids mom does H an the state dont care.
But i gotta keep a job
So she can be a slob
An i can pay the state to take a break for welfare.
BUT PLEAAASE
LETS TALK ABOUT OBAMAS NEW PLAN TO TAKE CARE OF OUR HEALTHCARE
Fuck u.
I spent the past 15 years building a half average resume
An im broke
Cuz i dropped out of class an didnt graduate
Oh ....
U wanna debate about student loan interest rates?
I got shifts to work
My kid comes first
Imma have to take a pass bro thatll have to wait.

U fuckin people r symptoms

Im not oblivious...ur lookin at the blueprint to my ignorance
Fuck your polictical interests
YOU shitheads r the idiots.

[Sho Money EMG]

Lol dope shit.

[Clayray]

You're a fag.

But hey I like what you wrote. It was funny tbh except the heroin part that's sad lol kinda

[DexLabb]

sorry boss....

[oats]

This was really dope, flowed well and struck a chord of the silent majority that exists nowadays, too caught up in immediate life situations to give a shit about the political climate. It worked well that you didn't talk polemically or take sides or anything - just brushed it all off together. Humor formed it into a well-rounded piece, I really enjoyed it. You should come by om more often.

[Camarac]

this was dope for what it was

Fuck u.
I spent the past 15 years building a half average resume
An im broke
Cuz i dropped out of class an didnt graduate
Oh ....
U wanna debate about student loan interest rates?
I got shifts to work
My kid comes first
Imma have to take a pass bro thatll have to wait.


loved that last section, shifts to work/kid comes first was really nice

keep that pen moving!

RTF: http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=90266

[dull boy]

This was dope.

[Destroyer]

exactly
fucking dude like 'for what it was'
why u gotta qualify it?
it was dope period.

[sral]

lmao that was me, dick

problem?

[Destroyer]

carry on baron

[PancakeBrah]

Awesome.

Very relatable. Except for the heroin. The heroin part wasn't as relatable to me. Very different style than the norm, different from even battler open mic style. I enjoyed the resume and keep a job lines the most. Also agree on the sentiment of the piece. Idgaf about politics for the same reason.

Very gewd bags.

big baby

[big baby]

relatable message, writing was ok. idk about dope. think 2 many ppl jumped the shark. hey bags did u read this http://netcees.co/showpost.php?p=389741&postcount=6

El Pancake

[Eŋg]

I thought it started off pretty shakey. I wasn't really vibing. You did hit your stride and drop some tough lines though, and they were serious. An interesting, somewhat relatable, change of pace from the usual. This was good overall.

[Bodey]

Pretty dope. Good style. Loved the tone of the whole piece too. I'm tired of the world as well and how things "work"

[Fig]

U fuckin people r symptoms

Im not oblivious...ur lookin at the blueprint to my ignorance

Dope

Very content driven, but at a small price. The rhyming could be boring, like at the beginning, but that's nitpicking because I didn't really care. This had personality to it, but your message was not misunderstood. I'd like to see you drop more often.

[Vulgar]

I was trying to read this without imagining you as the narrator because your sarcasm sometimes chars a piece's seriousness. I was waiting for a joke but you may feel very passionately about your indifference to following politics, so I might be at fault here. I thought it was cool, the structure was unique for a change in the OM and the rhyming was sharp. The subject matter was truthful in some cases.

[CopyPat]

fuckin awesome. so real, so raw. from the heart. you emo faggit.
jk, it was emo without being gay emo. so good job
but no for real this is the typa shit i like man
flow was solid, nothing too fancy but u absolutely got ur point across.
tons of lil quotables.

I dont sleep much lately
Black mold in the walls. Haha.
I dont breathe much lately.
But i dont got much to complain about
I cant preach much lately.
My kids safe.
An me an her mom dont beef much lately.

To me easily the best part. lol just perfect dude

good shit bagatron, should bless the OM more often. we may have to revive the ol bullshit cypher from RF eh? ha

[Geno]

cool, but i didnt realy dig it for some reason. felt held back, emotionally raw, but you were holding back on the content man. anyway, good to see you in here

[Scripter]

This was actually pretty good. your still an asshole.