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~RustyGunZ~
07-27-2013, 10:40 PM
The Ultimate Writer II
The Premier Tutoring Tournament

Flo Real Ronic

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday,
August 1st, 2013 @ 11:59 PM PST.
Check Ins are due Tuesday, July 30th , 2013 @ 11:59 PM PST
Voting ends Sunday, August 4th, 11:59 PM PST.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are normally 24 hours
(unless requested otherwise, that is),
can be no longer than 48 hours
and have to be granted by your opponent.



Line Limit:

Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both. If no line agreement is made you CANNOT go above 16 lines


General Rules:

1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
means you will disqualified.
A check in IS mandatory.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
must match the 1st person's line amount.



THIS WEEK IS NAMEPLAY WEEK, YOU MUST INCLUDE 3 NAMEPLAYS IN YOUR VERSE.

Ronic
07-27-2013, 11:11 PM
Oh fo real flo real this mofo easy 10 dude?

Flow
08-01-2013, 08:55 AM
Your L's many, your neck on the line plenty an flo ready to snap it
Methodone left you so shook was lookin like you missed your last dose of that shit
I get fit bitches loins stirrin, you only know one bitch called mum
If a bitch stirrin when she cauldron... she got warts, boils an working the magic on her own son
Talking bout how Meth left you shook, this match up had me crying
I ain't lying, I can't bear seeing any mo'ronic attempts at rhyming
this faggot must be smoking rock, if he thinking he will win round 2
no one respects rolling stones.... But then thats exactly what Ron Wood do
This comp can bring rep, make champs, look at sharp nine
You got no chance, in 9 matches time we'll still be waiting for you to deliver one sharp line!!

Ronic

Ronic
08-01-2013, 09:46 AM
Flo Real? No deal. Knucklehead you can have him back, dude
When I said I wanted the tits, I didn't mean that boob
What a fuckin queen - a thug g ain't tha man he be
Is that the Real life? Nah, it's just his fantasy
Had your ex girly hittin on me, she was caught hook, line and sinker bro
But I tuna stinkin bitch out coz only dead fish go wit tha flo
I get honeys wit that code x, Flo couldn't pull em with a slow jam
Media shows that Real Player... coz no-one fucks wit that program
Dude knows he aint all that, even he won't believe them lies n trash
Now who ironic, Real lost to a Storyteller in a swag & flo match!

TheEnd
08-03-2013, 10:54 AM
his faggot must be smoking rock, if he thinking he will win round 2
no one respects rolling stones.... But then thats exactly what Ron Wood do

Vs.


Had your ex girly hittin on me, she was caught hook, line and sinker bro
But I tuna stinkin bitch out coz only dead fish go wit tha flo
I get honeys wit that code x, Flo couldn't pull em with a slow jam
Media shows that Real Player... coz no-one fucks wit that program

Coo battle flo had that 1 good bar that was coo ron had those 2 that were lol but that extra quote won it 4 ron coo battle again

V/ Ron

God Of War
08-03-2013, 11:43 PM
Your L's many, your neck on the line plenty an flo ready to snap it
Methodone left you so shook was lookin like you missed your last dose of that shit
this would of been a cool concept but methadone is pronounced meth uh doh'n so the wordplay is a huge ass stretch man, i also think ur set up was to wordy

I get fit bitches loins stirrin, you only know one bitch called mum
If a bitch stirrin when she cauldron... she got warts, boils an working the magic on her own son
aight i thought ur concept was dope i mean the cauldron was a nice idea, dont really like where u took it and u using stirrin in set up and punch makes it sound off to me

Talking bout how Meth left you shook, this match up had me crying
I ain't lying, I can't bear seeing any mo'ronic attempts at rhyming
man i think ur wording got u here, i think moronic would of worked perfectly no sure why u got the mo'ronic in there

this faggot must be smoking rock, if he thinking he will win round 2
no one respects rolling stones.... But then thats exactly what Ron Wood do
dont know man seems simple and off compared to your other attemps, the hardest part of a battle is keeping consistency

This comp can bring rep, make champs, look at sharp nine
You got no chance, in 9 matches time we'll still be waiting for you to deliver one sharp line!!
the idea was nice the concept was really cool but ur wording fucked u here, it was bulky and way over worded imo and u used double words to many trimes 9/nine sharp/sharp that kiss wording man



vs


Flo Real? No deal. Knucklehead you can have him back, dude
When I said I wanted the tits, I didn't mean that boob
this was a bit corny to me, u have the right idea but i still think its a bit corney of a concept

What a fuckin queen - a thug g ain't tha man he be
Is that the Real life? Nah, it's just his fantasy
this isnt really a diss imo ur punch was meh and was so simply, creativty has to be in eac bar even if its simple it still should be creative and the "man he be" killed me

Had your ex girly hittin on me, she was caught hook, line and sinker bro
But I tuna stinkin bitch out coz only dead fish go wit tha flo
again your wording is horrible, why is the first bar the only decent worded bar in ur verse? the idea is ok but tuna has been done alot but still the idea is ok but the delivery is horrible man or execution u got to execute a punch to hit hard and urs is falling short of that remember execution is just as important as the punch imo

I get honeys wit that code x, Flo couldn't pull em with a slow jam
Media shows that Real Player... coz no-one fucks wit that program
i dont really get this bar at all

Dude knows he aint all that, even he won't believe them lies n trash
Now who ironic, Real lost to a Storyteller in a swag & flo match!
this isnt a diss man, u had two ok attempts at dissing and it was the tuna and tits bar the rest was real simple and meh, u got to bring it every line and work on ur execution




imo flo you really need to fuck with ur wording and ur consistency u really started losing what u did have at the end and ronic ur execution is a big part of ur issue, the execution of a bar can determine whether a bar is ok or its a bodybag


with that said i think flo got this

v/flo real

Animosi T
08-04-2013, 08:58 AM
Your L's many, your neck on the line plenty an flo ready to snap it
Methodone left you so shook was lookin like you missed your last dose of that shit
First line was alright, second was a bit off/not hard hitting. Wording hurt ya.

I get fit bitches loins stirrin, you only know one bitch called mum
If a bitch stirrin when she cauldron... she got warts, boils an working the magic on her own son
First line was kinda wack/played, second was a decent, cool wordplay. But, wording was off a bit around the end, and the punch wasn't that great.

Talking bout how Meth left you shook, this match up had me crying
I ain't lying, I can't bear seeing any mo'ronic attempts at rhyming
Was a good concept, but stop trying to force the internals. It's too filler. You were 'crying' that just sounds stupid and like you are trying to get the internals to rhyme too hard. Nice wordplay though

this faggot must be smoking rock, if he thinking he will win round 2
no one respects rolling stones.... But then thats exactly what Ron Wood do
Ehh, wasn't feeling the punch in here. Not a great attempt at the wordplay.

This comp can bring rep, make champs, look at sharp nine
You got no chance, in 9 matches time we'll still be waiting for you to deliver one sharp line!!
Wording wasn't great. Sharp nine/Sharp line, not feeling the double rhyme. But, decent concepts, alright closer.



vs


Flo Real? No deal. Knucklehead you can have him back, dude
When I said I wanted the tits, I didn't mean that boob
Weak opener, no real punch in here.

What a fuckin queen - a thug g ain't tha man he be
Is that the Real life? Nah, it's just his fantasy
Not much of a punch here again. Don't try to force the multis, it backfired here and left you w/o a pnuch and a weak line.

Had your ex girly hittin on me, she was caught hook, line and sinker bro
But I tuna stinkin bitch out coz only dead fish go wit tha flo
First line is played. Then, second was wack. Wording murked you here, my man.

I get honeys wit that code x, Flo couldn't pull em with a slow jam
Media shows that Real Player... coz no-one fucks wit that program
Not much of a punch, wordplay/name play wasn't strong.

Dude knows he aint all that, even he won't believe them lies n trash
Now who ironic, Real lost to a Storyteller in a swag & flo match!
Ok attempt at personal, but was executed badly.


I got Flo Real taking this.

Had more consistency, and the punches hit a bit harder for me. Both need to work on wording, and getting punches in.

2-1 Flo Real

SiK
08-04-2013, 04:19 PM
Flo..

Ya concepts are good, but your forcing some of your nameplays...You get the idea tho just need to sharpen ya skills which Philly should be able to help you with


Ronic...

Need to work on your concepts....Your wording is pretty bad and your concepts seem childish

V-Flo with a better understanding/concepts