Camp Bell vs Touche Guerrero - TOUCHE WINS

[Sharp]

Netcees Newbie Tourney VII

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Friday,
September 12th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
Check Ins are due WEDNESDAY, Sept 10t 2014
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours


Line Limit:

Min. = 8 lines
Max. = 16 lines
Limit MUST be agreed upon


General Rules:

First to 5, Win by 2, 3-0=KO
1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
means you will be disqualified.
A check in ISmandatory.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
must match the 1st person's line amount.


Camp Bell Touche Guerrero

[Camp Bell]

...yup.

[Red Soldier]

How many ?

[Camp Bell]

12?

[Red Soldier]

Camp Bell

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room
It ain't nothin to cut this bitch off, I kill phonies like you cos see...
If anyone said you bought a new K camp then we know ur pussy ass cashed out his cd
Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume
My skills could be in Mayweather's gym, check my Knucks pussy you know it's true...
I'm a top contender with the punches, while Jilti made it hard to say for you
Yur not a spitta at all, hoe retire them flows cos yur losin more respect...
So watch me killa cam with a my range rover while bumpin some dip set

[Camp Bell]

his scripts a scam, this chump wont grip the ham, he's wack as hell
listen man, i be busting wicked cans, while you sipping the apple ale
the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated
the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch
ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down
sit son out, my lines be more explosive than dumb filler, i'm way nice
this touch, is to just enforce it: he was given the cut written to ray rice
i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che'

[Tic]

Camp Bell
Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume


the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated

I have Touche taking this. He was more creative and had better execution overall. The Bell Hop line could've been cool if reworded; it just kind of came out of nowhere for me, the whole luggage part.

Campbell had a cool line with the health codes. The other lines were worded awkwardly to me and didn't really hit. Touche had better misses.

Vote - Touche

[Sho Money EMG]

U don't have to accept this of u don't accept crew votes but I'm being honest

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room
Lol k

It ain't nothin to cut this bitch off, I kill phonies like you cos see...
If anyone said you bought a new K camp then we know ur pussy ass cashed out his cd
Ok wording was off tho

Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination
Decent

You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume
Lol dope for a noob sure funny u know what goes on here.. Hmm

My skills could be in Mayweather's gym, check my Knucks pussy you know it's true...
I'm a top contender with the punches, while Jilti made it hard to say for you
Lol

Yur not a spitta at all, hoe retire them flows cos yur losin more respect...
So watch me killa cam with a my range rover while bumpin some dip set
Bes bar, nice

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his scripts a scam, this chump wont grip the ham, he's wack as hell
listen man, i be busting wicked cans, while you sipping the apple ale
Dope flow okay

the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated
Nice

the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch
Wording was off

ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down
Lol sick

sit son out, my lines be more explosive than dumb filler, i'm way nice
this touch, is to just enforce it: he was given the cut written to ray rice
Good concept, could of been worded better

i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che'
Lotb

Vote - camp

Had more hits, more entertaining

[Kill Spree]

Touche
Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume

Vs

the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated

Overall both reads were kinda wordy more on camps part for me. He had some dope concepts but wording took sting away. Touches verse was a bit smoother for me and had some humor. His misses were better than camps IMO

Vote touch

[Window Taco]

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room

My skills could be in Mayweather's gym, check my Knucks pussy you know it's true...
I'm a top contender with the punches, while Jilti made it hard to say for you


Vs


the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated

the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch

ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down

i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che'


I think Touché took bar 1 and 2 and the 5th bar but I got Camp taking bars 3, 4, and 6. So since I also feel they even in just about every cat I think although both textcees bars were hard hitting I feel camp's humor gave him an advantage, and in the bars that camp won he feel he had slightly better connectivity than touché. Enjoyment also went more towards camp.

V/ Camp ( but just by a hair)

[Allen Knight]

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume

vs

the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated

V/ touche, this was a close one but i felt tg had a more consistent verse almost quoted the final destination bar
but its way to played concept that coulda been flipped better, camp had more misses but not a bad verse, props yah'll.

[Plot]

I concur with Allen that Touche got this one.
Both weren't bad but I felt camp had more misses.
Also a big factor for me was not getting some of camps
references while I got most of Touches, its probably
a cultural thing as I'm not American and don't wathc their sports.

[Clayray]

he facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated
the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch
ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down

vs

You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume
Yur not a spitta at all, hoe retire them flows cos yur losin more respect...
So watch me killa cam with a my range rover while bumpin some dip set

I liked Camp's flow throughout and thought that was what made his verse hit harder and it stood out to me. Touche had the "unfortunate events" concept but the "Final destination" punch made it weaker. i thought it would have something to do with the book series, or the movie with jim carry.

good verses from both.

Camp edged it.

[Unfukwitable]

It ain't nothin to cut this bitch off, I kill phonies like you cos see...
If anyone said you bought a new K camp then we know ur pussy ass cashed out his cd
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume

vs

the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated
ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down
i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che'

One had less misses and had the best line of the battle close match, both couldve gotten alil more creative tho..

v/Camp

[MKG]

Liked touches opener
2nd line seemed like filler to me honestly
And the muzzle reference
Thought final destination was too old tbh
Thiught the jilty line had the wording off which took away from the
Effectiveness of it
And the killa cam punch I thought wasn't very creative and was a miss for me as well


Vs

Everyone liked the camp shut down line but honestly
I think if he woulda used it, it woulda been labeled played
And I just want a fan of it, Apple ale was a miss to me as it
Wasn't very hard hitting IMO touch down was a miss also because his ne is too shay
So touch and that don't work ray rice was a concept that's been
Abused this week. Boo che was cool but like I said u can't have a che/shay
Wordplay and then a touch one cuz obviously one won't work .

2-1 vote. TG

[Sharp]

5-4 touche

[theMuzzl3]

Camp Bell

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room
It ain't nothin to cut this bitch off, I kill phonies like you cos see...
If anyone said you bought a new K camp then we know ur pussy ass cashed out his cd
Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume
My skills could be in Mayweather's gym, check my Knucks pussy you know it's true...
I'm a top contender with the punches, while Jilti made it hard to say for you
Yur not a spitta at all, hoe retire them flows cos yur losin more respect...
So watch me killa cam with a my range rover while bumpin some dip set

Over all -- dope ass lines. I like how tried to you use me to insult him. Over all, very good lines, fairly well even… I give it an A.



his scripts a scam, this chump wont grip the ham, he's wack as hell
listen man, i be busting wicked cans, while you sipping the apple ale
the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated
the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch
ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down
sit son out, my lines be more explosive than dumb filler, i'm way nice
this touch, is to just enforce it: he was given the cut written to ray rice
i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che'

The first 8 lines were really fuckin dope. Lines 9 & 10 weren't as good. The closing was cool.

This was a close one, Touche Guerrero's lines were much more insulting IMO, which is I guess what battling is all about… but over-all, I'm gonna have to:

/v Camp Bell

[Sharp]

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room
seen this against him
It ain't nothin to cut this bitch off, I kill phonies like you cos see...
If anyone said you bought a new K camp then we know ur pussy ass cashed out his cd
ok
Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination
ok
You don't hit bitches, party hard, or even smoke up, sad to say...
Everything about you's got nerd written all over, yur worse than muzzles resume
ok
My skills could be in Mayweather's gym, check my Knucks pussy you know it's true...
I'm a top contender with the punches, while Jilti made it hard to say for you
if there was a flip or anything I missed it
Yur not a spitta at all, hoe retire them flows cos yur losin more respect...
So watch me killa cam with a my range rover while bumpin some dip set
cool

his scripts a scam, this chump wont grip the ham, he's wack as hell
listen man, i be busting wicked cans, while you sipping the apple ale
eh
the facts is well, i got this virus waiting and guerrero gets annihilated
why try my patience? if camp shut down, health codes was violated
cool
the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch
eh
ya defenses sus, i'll beat ya ass before the season pass, what now?
since he got weaker snaps, his scores receiving flags til touch down
ok
sit son out, my lines be more explosive than dumb filler, i'm way nice
this touch, is to just enforce it: he was given the cut written to ray rice
cluttered wording
i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che'
get the flip but it didn't really hit for me


this was mad close but I think touche edged it, thought he was more consistent and his two bigger hits (final destination and killa cam) outweighed camp's (health codes and touch down). props to both guys

v/touche

[BROKE LESNAR]

his scripts a scam, this chump wont grip the ham, he's wack as hell
listen man, i be busting wicked cans, while you sipping the apple ale
the quiet neighbor, i've been felt by ya bae and lawd, the chic a slut
dog, give it up cuz ya text is quite the same, soft as ya bitches touch
i got dumb hitters that just came to light, this was too easy if i do say
fuck filler and fake lines, i almost employed the waterboy to boo che' - lotb

Camp Bell

When I walk in the door n' he sees me, you know camp is feelin doom...
Cos once I fire shots you'll see Bell hop n' carry my luggage to the room
Ya text career is unfortunate, so far every battle you've had is for the takin...
Cos you've got enough unfortunate events in your verse to script a new Final Destination

I have this 3-2 Camp. Really close, 1 bar made the difference. That Waterboy bar was lotb.

v-Camp

[Blanco Bishop]

Guerreros concepts came across smoother.
Camp,imo , triedd to multi too much, which took away from the clarity of the punches.

Top lines: guerr. Opener.muzzle. jilti personal.
Camp. Boo che n health code.


V guerro for better wording , concepts n clarity

[Certain]

Touche Guerrero: I liked the two name plays a bit, but the rest of the verse was weaker. Your wording and rhymes were solid enough, but the concepts weren't particularly creative or hard-hitting. The Final Destination and Killa Cam concepts have been done to death in text battling. The line about theMuzzl3's LinkedIn had potential but little creativity behind it.

Camp Bell: You put so much into rhyming that your content rarely lives up to it. That might work in swag-and-flow and Open Mic, but it won't in competitive battles. There really wasn't anything in this verse. The best line was a flip on your own name, which should be left for non-diss verses usually. The last line was the closest thing you had to a real hit, but your verse came across as a bit too nice. Get mean.

Vote: Touche Guerrero