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Kold Breeze
08-05-2013, 10:04 AM
~Gankstuh SaVage~

that's what i be telling em/ rsc we the best /posses an intelect that is cynical /dreams reaching to critical levels that turn into a physical pain of one insane individual /but let's keep it lyrical / ya'll starting to bore me / like a bitch with her mouth forever stretched over gloryholes / we the type to pop a shot in ya face/ the type to give your wife a stare and make her swear she was raped /don't make me flip on the tape /dog my word is bond imma shot ya i could care less if you a son of god/i could do it from afar but i like that up close and personal / shank dipped in garlic water i'm just curing em/skin the corpse at all costs before burial/ who you thought was your boss nah i'm just wearing em/truth be told we be mon-stars the bars tearing them/apart cause my niggaz got heart with no fear in em/ innocence brutally transformed to militant /we be the rebels that make the devil stay vigilant /diligent/ as he makes the rounds down on my block/ watch the murder rate hit the sky nigga why talk /when i can crush anyone who ever brushed me in life/ with a knife on any side walk / silence is the code we know i let my nine talk /rsc be crazy this is how you make crime talk

-Kold.Breeze-

a smile on the wicked face of a child, the signs dark/imagine the flame, call it insane, a blind moth/upon the horse of the death, I watch the soul ride off/a solemn psalm unto death, I wonder where the times gone/I sit by the graveyard, conversate with the lost/speak upon dead tongues, hear the cry of the lark/feel the sorrow of the dead, they cry where they fought/If you think you know darkness, I'll show you where my heart's kept/eat the soul of your child before she's a concept/my evil should never be taken out of context/I mean every word, curse the light and what it stands for/take your cynicism with a bit of fukken rancor/fuck your niece to death and rip your infant son's hand off/add it to my collection, put it in my jansport/never thought I wuz evil, why the fukk you think I'm damned for?!!?/holy water upon my sin is my soul in a sandstorm/but these are the type of things a jaded soul laughs on/pass-over? pass on, tryna get my dash on/these demons keep chasin a nigguh, while I laugh my ass off/death comes with smile, flirtatious hips/persuasive lips and pervasive quips/and on some real shyt, the bitch don't make me sick/I feel her grace, I kno that she's after me/so I watch the face of whoever gives dap to me/so before you put the gat me, I'll stand, smile, backhand ya teeth/watch you lean, hook ya spleen, watch you fall gradually/stomp you out passively, then saunter off while yellin one word #Blasphemy

Kold Breeze
08-05-2013, 10:11 AM
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=9597

Certain
08-05-2013, 02:25 PM
Gankstuh SaVage's verse was abysmal. I don't even know where to start. Everything needed work. The rhymes were simple and misplaced. The content was boring and uncreative. "Lyrical" is almost always a bad sign in a verse.

So I wasn't expecting much from Kool.Breeze. But hey, this wasn't so bad at all. There was no overlap in content or style between the two verses, making this an awkward collaboration, particularly because Kool.Breeze is so much better.

The dark and drear clichés at the start weren't the best look, but I liked the verse the more violent it got. Even there, a little wit my have lightened the mood and been a nice change of pace. But this section was probably the strongest:

I mean every word, curse the light and what it stands for/take your cynicism with a bit of fukken rancor/fuck your niece to death and rip your infant son's hand off/add it to my collection, put it in my jansport/never thought I wuz evil, why the fukk you think I'm damned for?!!?/holy water upon my sin is my soul in a sandstorm/

Now either teach your friends how to write or find new writing friends.