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Old 02-23-2013, 06:28 PM   #15
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Cambell...

People talk about rhyme schemes, you got those. Good rhythm to this joint, maybe self indulge. Felt basic, void of true emotion. "They'll never take what's yours" meaning they was trying to brain wash you, I got that. Half hearted shot in the dark. Try to be vulnerable and allow yourself to incorporate more of you into your shit.

Mike wrecka.

Good shit iron man. This piece was tough. You gotta rusty scheme in the sense thats it not too polished but it's more genuine because of it. Sometimes you rhyme only one syllable, so when you do do multies it has greater effect because of it. You flow like early man, your not too eloquent but you keep it humpback of notre dom. Good showing. Simple strength personified.

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can be one winner And With the 3rd round TKO.... MIKE WRECKA
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