Camp Bell, I'm not sure where this topic and that verse go together much at all. But getting away from that to just review th3e verse, the flow had some minor moments and some of the narration read smoothly, but it was a bit of a rough read with some choppy flow spots, but not too bad.
Mike wrecka, this was great character development and the details that you gave within the story were interesting and made it a much stronger verse. The different phases of the characters lifce made the depth of the storyline more creative and that got my attention more than anything else.
Voe mike wrecker
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