Interesting read, I feel like you could do more technically to contribute to the flow. A few of the rhymes were a little choppy, but from what I read from you I'm sure you could work on more multi/inner shit. Felt like you found a powerful tone and supported it well, the story itself was pretty effective, I could tell that was your main focus. Overall a pretty good drop, liked reading it, looking forward to seeing more from you. Sorry if this isn't the best feed but I'm not really a creative/OM type, I just dont like seeing any piece get slept on.
and yay at my random act of kindness being post 1000 in OM
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