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Old 09-18-2014, 09:36 AM   #2
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stand out line for me

Every night I dream of methods to uncover the slaughtering of my demise.

honestly the lines are pretty stretched an the rhymes in general are pretty basic compared to the level most people here are on...I'd suggest shortening up the bars an tuckin' the rhyme scheme a lil' tighter also stay away from single syllable rhyming words...kick some multi's in..

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