Fenix: Good showing. You had a nice little story that you progressed through very well and in each stanza you maintained one rhyme scheme which was pretty dope. Props on that. I don't know if I'm that impressed with the story as much as I am with the details and that's in no way a diss I'm just saying you described the shit out of everything haha. Nice first week showing man.
Just Write: Well man I think if you would've had more time you could've had a great verse because what you have there is a nice opening and who knows where it could've gone from there. If you do finish it post it in the OM and I'd for sure read it. Welcome to the league.
All in all I gotta give this to fenix.
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