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Originally Posted by Kin
We're Separate Levels, time to Wrestle, your move next
This match'll be 1 Fall..but it'll take 2 Story's to Do Plex
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I liked the concept here, pretty creative. Some ppl might not get it, but I'm a wrestling mark so I do. I like how you used seperate levels in the setup to accentuate your misdirect. Idk ab the do plex though. I'm assuming your referring to suplex, only omitting the su for the du in duplex to go along with the first half of your setup. In this regard, I don't think it hit that hard bc essentially you're using two different concepts here that are on completely different wavelengths. You juggled 2 when I think it would have been better to focus on 1. But I understand your need to include the wrestling aspect as it it helped to make the plex in duplex work.
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Originally Posted by Storyteller
I'm fine with separate levels cus I got experience on this geek,
1 fall is true cus whose next in kin is in question once I lay him 6ft
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I'm assuming you were trying to say "next of kin" instead of "next in kin". In this regard, when I think of a np for Kin, that is the first thing I think of. I had a battle with him recently and purposefully tried to stay away from that angle bc of how predictable it would be. With that said, I don't fault you for it. I think the rebuttal was on point, but the 6 feet finish was kind of anticlimactic. Everything up to the "next in kin" part was more focused from a rebuttal perspective than Kin's first bar in terms of creativity, but the finish felt flat.
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Originally Posted by Storyteller
Ur bars are replicated from the past W/ horrid wording but u claim seperate
A fucking rip off of originals but what u expect from a haunting in kin etiquette
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This wasn't that bad. One thing I've been trying to become more lenient on is what distinguishes between a np and a reach. Normally I would have said Kinnecticut and Connecticut is forced and just discount it based on that. But murda sho has kind of taught me to be more lax so I think in this instance I will just say well done. Sounded out it works for me. Now the execution was kind of off, which is funny bc the concept was on how bad your opponent's wording was, but as I said it was a slight nuance.
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Originally Posted by Kin
Etiquette?? shiiiit...Kin bout to teach u how to be proper
Keep ya mouth Closed when its Full of bars Slouchin' in Posture
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The setup was perfect. Had a great rebuttal tone to it. The downside here at first glance would be the statementish underpinnings of the second line. However, instead of going setup, buildup, punchline, you basically included the setup and buildup in the opening line. Probably the best bar of the 4 posted.
This came down to 2 bars, the creativity of Story's Kin etiquette np vs. the strength of Kin's rebuttal.
In the end, I have Kin's rebuttal taking it.
v-Kin