My mind likes piranhas, this is the motivation you've been lacking lately. You found a dope concept to run with and i applaud it. My only qualms are how you bounced around a bit only to end up in the same place. The ending did nothing and just seemed like an add-on. Keep it moving.
Creed, solid read. Same idea kinda sorta with a hint of Adonis flavor. I enjoyed your verses progression more and the ending was solid. However this whole thing seemed really rushed with just a general idea.
Voting for mmlp, his ambition was too strong.
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