Zen came nice. I thought the flow was good, but kinda sketchy as certain points but that's nitpicking. The verse does seem to end abruptly tho, I think it could have been stretched out more & perhaps a meatier ending would have birthed. But overall, good take & nice showing. Mike, I didn't particularly enjoy your take but this was a good piece of story telling, great in fact I thought. You went along pretty well with it. Im sorry to cut this short, no pun intended, but I gotta go with Mike on this. I felt it Zen went a bit longer he could have taken it. But, I wasn't fulfilled with his showing.
Vote - Mike
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