Originally Posted by Witty
In a sterile white lab, scientist's provoke life with their hands
Capable of giving you mice on demand, is it a blight on the land
Or is it enlightenment planned to lengthen society's stand?
We can take nature and duplicate, is it stupid, fake, or a looming fate?
Who dictates our rise and fall? Will Messiah call when this balloon deflates?
First three lines were really dope, solid thought provoking intro that points the verse in a promising direction. I enjoyed third line in particular.
Humans are graceful, gifted, yet pain constricted
Nice rhyme scheme transition
Rage inflicted on feeble brains so we remain conflicted
I feel you coulda added 2 lines or so and taken this rhyme scheme a bit further
We could never watch the earth suffer if we loved her
We create beauty with one hand and crush it with the other
If we can give a falcon life, help a beast deliver a child
Why do we insist on slitting nature's wrist, with a smile?
Keepin it consistent, enjoyed the message here. I feel the last line would read better without the comma, something like "nature's wrists with a smile".
We're the singularity, we don't make any sense
We create self inflicted pain and then pray that it ends
Strained 'til we're tense, trained for defence
Brains in a trance, meds for rainy days, take 'em and dance
Really liked this section, one of my favourite so far.
Then wake naked and stamped with fakeness and rant
About how brainless the world is, tasteless and scant
Unaware our leaders are taking advantage, blatantly savage
Pick a place on an atlas, invade it and ravage
it naked, raping the face of the land, leave it vacant and damaged
Bitterness and hate have established a place in society
In attempt to displace the grace that's inside of me
Exasperated from evil, we've masqueraded as people
With passion, but our lasting trait is deceitful
You're hitting a groove here my man, this is gettin hot!
We give animals life, then we take it from each other
Hates fire's alight and we lay naked as we smother
We're traitors, we claim that nature is our mother
So how come we continue to rape her, if we love her?
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